You are Anonymous the lone human in equestria. Due to some recent events, you end up living with Fluttershy. A timid mare that will change your life forever,
A new take on the heartwarming moment series. With a new format.
(Note that I am not up to date with season 4. I don't think it's relevant in this story but just to be safe...)
Also, the prologue is written in 1st person (to give you an idea of what is going on in the mind of the mare in question)
And the 'main' chapter is written in 2nd person (Old fashioned Anon action)
Yes, there will be an epilogue. I'm writing it as of now, just wanted to get this out because I haven't posted anything in like 5 months.
Story number ten in the Heartwarming Moment Series.
Who's next?
Glad to see your still righting cant wait
Ah its so coote!!!
Oh so damnably coot!!!
You've made a lot of fans super happy now that they know you are still writing
Here's the thing. The story, I found to be pretty heart-warming and had good character development for anon. However, not the same could be said for Fluttershy. Her behavior, namely in the second chapter when Anon and her were laying down together seemed...off.
Also. Your grammar, namely your past-present tense, capitalization, and sentence structure does need some work. But, overall, a nice story.
+The couple is cute, and you can feel the heart warming.
+The twinge of heart wrench came when you found out what Celestia had replied (but was gone when you learn the result.)
+Anon does act like a sensible human, though I would have imagined him more uneasy in the beginning.
-Grammar does need some work. Not too big of an issue.
-Fluttershy's behavior is a bit off, but in all honesty, she's a little hard to get, despite having one of the simplest personalities.
Rating: 7 Anon cuddling Fluttershys out of 10
A minor typo I noticed:
That should be "rephrases".
That, and you didn't capitalize "Twilight" early on.
Besides that, this was good, though I just realized there was a prologue, so I'll get to that later.
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Thx mate, fixed it
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2480 words and still counting, my son. I might finish it today or tomorrow
5101103 can't wait.
ya cuteness overload! love these serious. the V2 much much better.
Aww. This is adorable. I really liked the first HWM Fluttershy story you did but this one is even better. I loved how the characters were more fleshed out and how you told the story from the viewpoints of both parties involved. Definitely made for more interesting reading. I look forward to the Epilogue and any other HWM stories you choose to do. Love this.
Cool man I think you should do a version 2 of the heartwarming saga.
Also man you a dam good writer.
I would like to see Heartwarming moment with Princess Luna
The cuteness is too strong!
I always love it when you release a new update for the heartwarming series, just so damn adorable.
Exactly what it says on the tin. Cute and heartwarming, exactly what I like to read before going to bed. The pacing felt a little off, but it was too cute for that to be a problem. Also, it's so damn rare to see a perfectly in character Fluttershy in AiE stories...
Well, I guess I'm off to read the Lyra one now.
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Glad you're enjoying my stories
I LOVE IT "IS" CUUUUUTE
THIS IS GREAT EVEN MUCH BETTER THAN THE OLD ONE
Sir once again this was a splendid story I fully enjoyed it amazing description it practically flowed through my mind like a movie you done well nightshader and good to have you back my friend
5128006 oh and if I may ask nightshader could you possibly do a trixie heartwarming moment please I'm quite curious as to what you could write about her
My heart is so full of awww right now!!!
whats the v2 about a sequela or new story with the same bases
stay classy
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I'ts a different story completely.
aaawww
stay classy
daww
Very cute man very cute.
so kawaii.
it so kawaii!!!
OH FOR THE LOVE OF- I CAN'T STAND IT ANYMORE!!!!!!!! THIS IS SO FRICKEN KAWAII IT MAKES MY ENTIRE BODY MELT THE CUTENESS IS TAKING OVER DEAR GOD MY HEART IS MELTING IT HURTS BUT FEELS SOOOOOOO GOOOOOD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! OH MAH GAWD SO KAWAII!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
woah...........................................................................................................................................well.......that escalated quickly!
Fluttershy is too cute....
Kudos. This was great and well written.
Cute. Well written. Heartwarming. Although you did sort of contradict yourself about how long it took for Anon to catch Fluttershy.
8/10 Vodkas
YAY!!!
So adorable!
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jake?....jake!?.... JAAAAAAAKE!?!
see what i did there?.........
Easily one of your beter written ones! Good job
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Desu kawaii!!!
Even cuter then the first aww
This is adorable, but by Celestia you need to learn how to use commas