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Scipio Smith


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Freed from the malign influence of Nightmare Moon, Princess Luna goes to pay an old debt, to visit a tribe of night ponies who, for their loyalty to Luna, were cursed by Nightmare Moon with lycanthropy. Seeing what her alter ego wrought, what damage it has done to generation upon generation of innocent ponies, brings home to Luna the magnitude of what she while in the grip of jealousy and pride.

Written for Sir Viper

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 4 )

It is a full moon every night, isn't it? Hmmmm.

5097751 its whatever luna feels like making it :raritywink:

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Name of Story: Light in the Darkness
Grammar 9/10 (you forgetting the spacing between paragraphs on occasion)

Pros
I liked mixing of Luna's "old English" with "modern".
Luna pain is raw and well written.
Hearn being grayish in his thoughts and feelings on forgiveness and hate

Cons
This story really should have more views.

Notes Section
I do find it refreshing to see grey in the motivations and feelings of OC characters. (and well written at that)

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Very good story, my one gripe is that the term were- refers to human, so werewolf would be "human wolf" but it is little more than a personal nitpick.

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