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Jade Ring


The purpose of a story is that it's a story. It can be more, but it can never be less.

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Neigh Orleans. The Jewel of the Delta. The Crescent City.

Over the years, this city of music, food, and mysteries has taken the souls of many a poor pony. The siren call is hard to resist, particularly for those who have never given in to their baser natures before.

Mr. Carrot Cake may be the next to lose his soul in the search for some good times.

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Comments ( 11 )

A cautionary tale is an odd expression of love.
Good work getting into Mr. Cake's head, at least. Evocative stuff.

A zebra equivalent of Baron Samedi.:pinkiehappy:

5082658 Thank you.

The temptations of the Crescent City are part of her many charms. To slip slightly is no crime, but to give in entirely is another matter.

this is highly offensive to me * a cajun who is from new orleans*

5083080 May I ask why?

I read every story that you have posted here. They're all great. This story; last sentence.

Also, one little thing:

I believed I knew this city better than I knew the back of my own hand.

I drew closer to investigate. I asked him what the small pile of sand in his hand was.

Since this story doesn't have a human tag, I assume this is a mistake.

Also, the zebra made me think of Kisuke Urarhara from Bleach, for some reason.
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5083697 Thank you. And fixed.

What about the last sentence?

5084284
My reaction to this story is: the sentence before that. Namely, that it's great.

5084312 Ah. Very good then.

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