Nice! Ive been waiting for a story like this, keep up the good work!

>>490720490720 Thanks! I saw 9001 fics about the queen but 0 about the soldiers.

It was a nice shake-up.

I am sure this will end well, with no chaos at all.

>>490739490739 I make no promises.

interesting concept... will track.

Nice, I've been looking for one of these.

Have some pinkies.

I hope the power of love changes him for good!

Not before there's plenty of action scenes though.

>>490785490785>>490787490787>>490794490794

Thanks, guys! Be sure to check out my other stories, and I will be osting new chapters on Fridays, hopefully more often.

This is by far my most popular story! Thanks, guys.

Hey, does anypony do art? I need a cover. Reply to this comment if you cand do it.

BTW, his pony form looks like my profile pic.

>>490736490736

Technically, my story was about a soldier and not Chrysalis; I just tagged it for her because there's no Changeling tag.

>>490908490908 Ok, i'll check it out.

Oh! Well this seems really good! I hope it continues.

I think I have about 31 tracks.

FUCK YEAH!

>>491305491305 Hi five my likeminded friend. ;D

Interesting concept...

Derpy approves

this is the sort of story I've been wanting to hear, so far I love save for the one irk; the way it mentions how he's killed so many ponyies and the rest but again apart from that I love it

This is pretty *puts on sunglasses* Coolio!

YEEEEEEEEAH!

>>515091515091 Brohoof.

Epic brohoof.

>>516000516000 40 points!

Cool.

Killing ponies? What's the matter with you man?

silver sea, what is it about us that makes us so riginal compared to about everyone else?

I'm watching this story and will probably keep watching it, but please get a pre-reader (people will do it for free on this site I think). It will cut a lot of mistakes and will make the story flow better. Otherwise, keep going.

>>14103571410357 Yeah, the first chapter was written a while back, before I knew what I was doing, and so was the second up until the RD part. That was written tonight.

>>14103841410384

Just saying for future reference. Pre-readers do help a lot to see errors that your own eyes skip over.

>>14104021410402 I'll be sure to find one.

You want a comment?

BAM

Here's your god-damn comment. You are no longer lonely. YAY!

Hey dude, not bad for a first timer.

Thing is, you need a proofreader. (I know you already discussed this with other peoples, just needed to get it out there)

Make sure it is well written, I suggest looking at comments for ideas.

Example:

Maybe one of the Elements already knows about him being a changeling, but won't let him or the others know unless forced.....

just a thought.

>>14107941410794 Yeah, about that...

This is actually the third or fourth I've written. I'm hardly a first timer, and zi'm working on getting a preteadr but its really early, so I'll do it later.

>>14107551410755 I feel so much better. Thank you.

I like it, it could be better, but I already like it.

Dog tags?

He should have put more thought into his disguise.

>>14119891411989

You know those days where you stay up till 2 in the morning and say completely random stuff? That's not my thing.

Honestly, it looked like a first timer, sorry to say.

Ah well, I apologize for that, but the story is still what I said it was last time

like the others said:

get a proof reader, edit the mistakes, MAKE MOAR, profit.

>>14120361412036>>14129951412995 Thanks. also, how was he supposed to know to check his cutie mark? He's only an infantry unit! The only reason he should change is to disorient foes en masse.

>>14120541412054 well, I was a rookie back then. i've grown over time, so expect better work from now on.

Um... ok, that was somewhat fast...

Pinkie hasn't gotten any in a very long time......

>>19187791918779>>19197801919780

Exactly.

Do continue would you?

...This took you three months?

>>19291561929156 hey, don't hate on us lazy people. I had school and other projects and was very busy.

By the way, it's been about 7 months, 3 between each chapter. Plus, I'm working on more, slightly shorter ones.

whatlings

Too short Need moar If you don't mind

Too small? Son of a freaking gun.

>>19315381931538>>19320981932098

Sorry, I said I'm releasing more shorter chapters.

Well, the thing with shorter chapters is that you have to be careful how you send them out. If you make long chapters, say, 20,000 words, people expect them to be released within a matter of weeks. If you make small chapters, say, 2000 words or so, people expect at least one every three or so days. Personally, I like to write long chapters.

(I've not released any of my stories to FiMFiction yet, but expect one soon.)

>>19331191933119 ...

20,000 WORDS?

2000?!?!

WHAT KIND OF MADMAN WRITER ARE YOU?

>>19331371933137

I'm with smart, wise, and sane. 2000 words is a short story?

What's a medium size for you?

Sorry about that horrible pun, but it illustrates what many are thinking.

>>19351961935196 2000 is not something I can manage. Normal for me is about 1000 a chapter, up to 2000 (definitely NOT every chapter) and down to 500.

>>19396891939689 Sorry, should've clarified.

>9,000 = then

it was really to this guy>>19331191933119

Okay now I'm lost... if I wasn't before.

>>19610261961026 Don't worry. I have a plan. After reading the Milky Way story, I shall start writing.

"Yeah, let's go. Well... She sort of hit her head a few minutes ago, and it was rather hard. (I did not realize that until I typed it out.)

Yeah.  BAD AUTHOR!  Bad!  You don't break a fourth wall like that!  Change it to a thought and Italicize it.

lengthen your chapters, if you can write two in one day then combine them

>>19617021961702 naw, that's how I write. It's my style. I never expect people to be absorbed into the fic, therefore I do not care about breaking the immersion,

But thank you very much, that will be changed.

>>19618051961805 I only do work in stupid, complicated ways. Making two separate chapters is one way of how I write, and how I work. Please understand that I do not think these things through, as I'm a bit of an idiot.

The only advice I could give is to make longer chapters. At least 1500 words (I go for around 2200+/- myself). Other then that It's a decent story, and I rather enjoy it. The gun in the last chapter was weird, but not really in a bad way.

yeah... these short chapters are kinda hard to grasp onto, and it doesn't really help the speed of the fic that much, but I still like it very much, just a tad longer would be nice though.

>>19714541971454>>19717131971713 I think I've already explained this: if the chapters were long, I would spend months on them and the fic would go on hiatus for another 3 months. Trust me. I know how I work.

F**k a doodle doo!

This was awkward, but the right amount of awkward to make me laugh at the character's expense. Well played.

>>19896201989620 thank you. I always try to either remove the awkward, or balance it out.