I'm simply a mad man who enjoys driving others mad. That way other people can see things from my perspective.
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Daniel tries his best to avoid risk, the small ones in life can't be helped but any unnecessary ones he avoids like the plague which has led him down a boring road in life. A small package is sent to rectify this problem and it does so, but in a way the sender probably never intended.
Sequel is out now, Never Dream.
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I like what I am reading, despite some typos. That being said, my only complaint is the chapters are unsatisfyingly short. But it is a good concept, that I look forward to reading future chapters of.
update please
Liking where this is going. You just got a fave.
I love this story so
far!
Thanks for the encouragement and feedback. I really will/do take what you guys post into consideration.
Dat last sentence, good question...
Good story so far keep up the good work
I see no problems with some being left out. There's still rarity and pinkie, unless i already forgot any part they already came in.
This one seemed a bit rushed.
Great job
nice story I like the pony that used her hearing to see that is cool
Quire is supposed to be choir. I'm enjoying the story.
I cannot believe I did that
I've been trying to go back over what I've already submitted and correct things. Work has kept me pretty occupied unfortunately, but I've still been able to find time to write. Thanks for reading and commenting you guys are awesome.
I find myself hoping that he will stay pony
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Glad you guys enjoyed it, I'm not a fan of humans turning into ponies either which is why I was hesitant to post this actually. Seems tossing caution to the wind was a good idea for a change, "Comet Guard" will be back.
now i wait and hope he succumbs to the temptation to become a pegasus again X3
Awesome!! Can't wait for the next chapter!!
So is Daniel going to work inside the postal warehouse/storage or will he handle package and mail deliveries? If he does end up working deliveries, he should be coached by the professional. (Ditzy Doo) : ) . P.S. I really like your work, Keep it up!
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I never thought of his sister like that before but that's an interesting take on her.
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Thanks, I'm glad you're enjoying it. Ditzy(Derpy) is one of my favorites so she'll definitely be back.
you do realize that in order for a human to survive without eating meat, large amount of either nuts or grains and beans(together, not separate) are required to be eaten yes? fruits and vegetables are fine and dandy, but they tend to be horribly low in protein(potatoes are a complete one though they have 10 times more sugars). Eggs would also be an excellent source of protein(actually considered one of the best, though they do tend to be rather high in cholesterol both good and bad). other than that, story's pretty good so far.
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Thanks and you raised very good points. I tried addressing the egg issue earlier in the story.
I noticed some of the chapter names are misspelled.
Awesome! I can't wait for the next one!
She'll make daniel go on the night he is supposed to be at that concert.
Surely Celestia isn't THAT much of a troll.
Just gave you your 50th like. Time to get typing!
Neat. Keep up the good work.
So he just decides on his own to stop eating meat?
Pretty sure it had something to do with being in a town full of pastel herbivores (ponies)
You spelled 'genre' wrong.
Nice start. But now I have to ask: is there going to be a side fic with Izzy and Daring Do???? I mean, that practically writes itself!
5372381 I intend for her to do something on her own, so yes this has crossed my mind before.
Could have been a bit longer, but it was alright. You don't seem to be using commas as much as you should though.
1) That is really really short for a pony, why didn't he notice that?
2) Why did he spontaneously shrink when he turned around in order to ram his forehead into a low hanging branch on a tree only a little taller than him? Since that would put the upper branches at forehead hight.
3) With modern technology and global satellite coverage how can he think there is any chance that there is a completely unknown civilization of talking ponies on Earth?
What Manual Control said. Needs WAY more commas.
Homophones, homophones, homophones... learn your homophones or you're not going to flourish as a writer. The readers, they're going to notice when there are incorrect homophones breaking their immersion in the story.
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I appreciate the criticism, believe me I do, and I've been bouncing back and forth between going over old chapters while working on the next. I'm not a perfect person and I'm bound to miss things. I'd like to think I've gotten better, but time is another issue so I'm sorry you felt let down.
Yay more! Can't wait..
A lot of things that happen in this story are just nonsensical. I haven't the slightest idea why Daniel would choose to stay, for example. He claims he's happier, but he certainly doesn't sound or behave that way. If anything he seems even more depressed, because being an outcast in a world of talking animals is now added to whatever problems he had before.
You seriously need to work on that part of your writing - just claiming something is true is not a replacement for demonstrating that it is true.
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Well I disagree, but I do appreciate your reading and feed back. Thank you.
You might want to consider it, at least. When a reader feels that your characters' stated motivations don't match up with the way they actually behave, that's an indication that there's a communication issue somewhere. You don't have to agree, but if you want to improve your writing, you should at least take the criticism seriously.
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I didn't at all mean to blow you off, I simply didn't feel the same way. That's not to say I didn't take your criticism into consideration with the other stories I have planned going forward. Thus why I appreciate the feed back.
Fair enough. I will say, though, that it got a lot better in the last five or six chapters or so, when the protagonist actually starts acting as if he likes it where he is. Just for clarification. It's just the parts before that point that just couldn't sell it to me.
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So I take it you really like music?
Well...since when have RD depicted as overly agressive in the show?
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She was willing to chase down Nightmare Moon, kicked a dragon in the nose, seeing an odd creature looming over her friend would no doubt trigger some kind of response.
I have the feeling I know who is that blonde maned stallion....*cough* Princess *cough* Blueblood