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ezra09

Joined April 2012
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Sequels

  • Harmonics
    Years after the events of Discordant, Scootaloo is hired as an assistant flight instructor.

    75,941 words · 4,137 views · 525 likes · 12 dislikes

Stories (5)

  • Upon a Falling Feather
    Skypirates Rarity and Pinkie Pie abduct Twilight. Daring Dash and Fluttershy must save the day!

    30,122 words · 5,756 views · 653 likes · 8 dislikes
  • Discordant
    When Discord finds a crack in his prison he begins whispering to a lonely Scootaloo.
    43,404 words · 9,740 views · 1,119 likes · 18 dislikes
  • Harmonics
    Years after the events of Discordant, Scootaloo is hired as an assistant flight instructor.
    75,941 words · 4,137 views · 525 likes · 12 dislikes
  • As Twilight Fades
    Who is Twilight Sparkle, and why does she know so much about Rainbow Dash and her friends? Can the five Elements of Harmony stop this strange unicorn from destroying harmony in Equestria forever?
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Hearth's Warming Eve has come once again, which means fun in the snow, warm food, and spending time with family. At least, that's what it means for most ponies. For Scootaloo it means a day off from crusading, loneliness, and the coldest night of the year. When Discord begins to whisper to her from his stone prison, she questions the beliefs held by many. What was so great about Harmony? What could be so bad about a world where chocolate milk fell from the sky?

Thanks to The Band Brony, Gsppcrocks10, Inkscrawler, TheBuggiest, and minjask6572 for help with editing. Thanks to SStwins for the awesome cover art.

First Published
20th Apr 2012
Last Modified
10th Aug 2012

Comments ( 1,128 )

#1 · Chapter 1 · 126w, 2d ago · · ·

Oh i can tell dis gon b gud!

Do not disappoint me.

#2 · Chapter 1 · 126w, 2d ago · · ·

Can't wait to see where this goes!

-Minty

#3 · Chapter 1 · 126w, 2d ago · · ·

YEah, Discord\Scootaloo father-daughter relationship! GO!

#4 · Chapter 1 · 126w, 2d ago · · ·

Sounds interesting. Can't wait to see the next part :twilightsmile:

#5 · Chapter 1 · 126w, 2d ago · · ·

Hmm. I am very cautious when it comes to orphaned Scootaloo stories. Its so abused, and its so rarely handled well. At least this story doesn't have a sad or tragedy tag. These won't be added later?

#6 · Chapter 1 · 126w, 2d ago · · ·

I really want to see some elements of Discord!

#7 · Chapter 1 · 126w, 2d ago · · ·

>>475050

I'm not planning on adding them. Sure, the fact that she's an orphan is sad, and I hope I can develop it without butchering her characterization, but I'm hoping to make this more an adventure than an angst ridden tragedy.

>>475060

You won't be disappointed. A friend of mine and I went through every character deciding who would represent what, and I feel it'll be a very solid plot point.

#8 · Chapter 1 · 126w, 2d ago · · ·

Oooh, interesting. can't wait to see more :pinkiehappy:

#9 · Chapter 1 · 126w, 2d ago · · ·

>>475108

Ok, then I'll see where you are ging with this.

#10 · Chapter 1 · 126w, 2d ago · · ·

Awesome! Can't wait for more!:derpytongue2:

#11 · Chapter 1 · 126w, 2d ago · · ·

Ooh this should be interesting is Scootaloo going to become a villain. Hope so you really don't really see any stories where one of characters becomes a bad guy or girl in this case without it becoming very dark like the infamous CUPCAKES for example i wouldn't mind reading a story where a character becomes a villain without it being a Dark story.

#12 · Chapter 1 · 126w, 2d ago · · ·

Discord is gonna Discord :D:derpytongue2:

#13 · Chapter 1 · 125w, 4d ago · · ·

Resist him, Scoots! He's planning nothing but bad things for you!

Scootaloo is best filly, I can't wait for more updates to this.

#14 · Chapter 1 · 125w, 2d ago · · ·

I'm excited to see where this one goes. Scoots is my favorite, so I wanna see where you go with this one.

#15 · Chapter 1 · 122w, 1d ago · · ·

Errors/Suggestions:

No, it won't be another thousand years,  he reasoned.

Extra spacing between the comma and 'he'.

“Ah said it’s a bit higher than ah thought.”; "That's right, ah forgot! Tomorrow's Hearth's Warming Eve!"

'Ah' could be capitalized since it's in place for 'I'.

"CUTIE MARK CRUSADER SNOWBOARDERS YAY!"

Putting either a comma or exclamation point after 'SNOWBOARDERS' would make it so that 'YAY' isn't interrupting the sentence.

"Get on."

An exclamation could give Scootaloo more enthusiasm.

Scootaloo gave a loud "Woooh!" as Applebloom called "Yee haw!"

'Woooh' could have the 'h' removed. As for 'Yee haw', there should be a hyphen to combine the two words.

"Ah told you 'carry it in the back door' was a bad secret plan."

'Through' instead of 'in' would make the sentence make more sense. Unless you are saying they took the back door with the ironing board? :rainbowhuh:

"We were chasing some Ironing Board thieves!" Scootaloo said.

'Said' could be changed to add more description to what's taking place.

Ex. Scootaloo then added, "We were chasing some Ironing Board thieves!"

"Bye Sweetie Belle, bye Scootaloo," Applebloom said.

Exclamation points could replace the commas in this passage. And then the problem with 'said' again. You can add on to said though.

Applebloom said with her farewells.

But I'm liking this story and will look forward to more updates. Keep it up ezra09!

#16 · Chapter 1 · 121w, 6d ago · · ·

>>618094

Thank you for the feedback. :pinkiehappy:

#17 · Chapter 1 · 121w, 4d ago · · ·

Edited those mistakes, as well as did some work to make the writing less monotonous, which has always been a problem of mine. :twilightblush:

#18 · Chapter 2 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

My heart's breaking for poor Scootaloo here.

Let up on us, already!

#19 · Chapter 2 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

Just reading the description, I've often wondered the same thing.  Discord liked pranks.  So they banish him into stone.  Chrysalis wanted love, and needed to feed her people.  So they kicked her ass out of Canterlot.  That pony looks different.  Run and hide.  Ponies can be real assholes sometimes.  :applejackunsure:

#20 · Chapter 2 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

Discord is best foster father. I'm sure nothing bad will come of this!

#21 · Chapter 2 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

I'm going to have a happiness fit if it turns out Discord's just trying to enjoy himself instead of screwing everything up. Now, that said, I like where this is going. Discord the manipulator is a better appeal than the typical Discord the mad god, and he's characterized quite well. I would like more of this, please. :twilightsmile:

#22 · Chapter 2 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

DISCORD WILL BE BEST TROLL DAD EVER!!!!

#23 · Chapter 2 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

Oh Discord you dastard fellow. :pinkiehappy:

#24 · Chapter 2 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

Sweetie, Applebloom, don't you know that using brute force is no way to free a frozen tongue? She needs to breathe onto the pole to warm it up so it lets go and doesn't hurt her.

I know he's evil and a bit of an ass, but I love seeing Discord be nice to ponies. It's a shame that he's Chaos and Disharmony, or he could be redeemed and spend his days as that fun guy who always shows up with gifts and fun for everyone.

#25 · Chapter 2 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

Discord ends up considering taking care of Scootaloo to be so much fun that he decides not to do the whole checkerboard-ground floating-houses thing?

Just as planned. :trollestia:

#26 · Chapter 2 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

>>642939

I agree with you about Discord, but you can't really forget that with Chrysalis, she kidnapped Princess Cadence/Cadenza/blah and tried to take over Canterlot too. I think the ponies were justified in kicking her flank outta there.

Poor Scootaloo :fluttercry: so excited to see what comes next!!! :eeyup: :pinkiehappy:

#27 · Chapter 2 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

Discord stories are best stories. Tracking! :pinkiehappy:

#28 · Chapter 2 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

And now the game is a foot. I can't wait to see what's going to happen now that Scoots knows whose watching out for her.

#29 · Chapter 2 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

im kinda hopeing discord will try to be her new faster father and take care of her! this is nice im loveing it!!!:heart::heart::heart::heart:

#30 · Chapter 1 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

Have you read Pony POV Series were a petrified Discord begins telepathically speaking to Diamond Tiara?

#31 · Chapter 2 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

>>642939

Discord found joy in watching ponies soul's crushed under a mountain of despair and hopelessness. Just look at his reaction when he finally breaks Twilight. He doesn't just enjoy causing chaos, he enjoys causing chaos that hurts people. Evil.

As for Chrysalis, yes she was trying to feed her people. By enslaving Equestria. What she is trying to do is no better than what the machines do to humans in The Matrix. She wants ponies to be her mindless puppets while she feeds off of them. It would be nice if some other way could be found to feed the changelings, but Chysalis's way was definitely evil.

#32 · Chapter 2 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

No Scootaloo! Don't fall for his tricks and slick words. Your friends care about you, TELL THEM WHAT IS GOING ON!

#33 · Chapter 2 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

Yep. Decidedly gives that feeling.

And DIscord begins to slowly feed Scootaloo just the right information to come to the conclusions he wants her to come to.

Ironically, I hate to say it, but I'm remindered of a tumblr Blog, where the writer/artist had Twilight send a letter to Celestia how, "Friendship is a beautiful, and fragile thing, it can be destroyed from the inside, but this isn't a bad thought, because that just makes it all the more precious."

#34 · Chapter 2 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

Sweet jesus, this is a fantastic fic. Favorite/follow.

#35 · Chapter 2 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

This is a great story, Discord has always been one of my more favorite characters and I think you did a great job on staying in character, so to speak.  :scootangel:

#36 · Chapter 2 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

I like where this is going. You're taking your time to build up the connection Scootaloo has. It's not just "I'm desperate and I need it NOW!"

I salute you for that!

#37 · Chapter 2 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

WAIT WAIT WAIT! Is scoots an orphan because her parents were made into rainbows?!:rainbowderp:

#38 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 1d ago · · ·

I get the feeling the CMC are about to lose a member:unsuresweetie:

#39 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 1d ago · · ·

Everything is falling into place. :trixieshiftleft:

#40 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 1d ago · · ·

I have high hopes for this story, the concept is awesome and I :heart: both Discord and Scootaloo.

Keep up the good work!

#41 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 1d ago · · ·

I thought your portrayal of Twilight was a little off, but this is otherwise a good addition to the story. Fantastic job.

#42 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 1d ago · · ·

I LOVE stories where Discord manipulates ponies with nothing but words.

#43 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 1d ago · · ·

Here comes CHAOS~:pinkiecrazy:

#44 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 1d ago · · ·

and so it begins...

#46 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 1d ago · · ·

I aprove:moustache:

#47 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 1d ago · · ·

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#48 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 1d ago · · ·

This story is the

BEST.

POSSIBLE.

THING.

:raritystarry:

#49 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 1d ago · · ·

:applecry::unsuresweetie::scootangel:

#50 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 1d ago · · ·

Oh god. Do need moar! :flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage:

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