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LoneUnicornWriter


Just a person that reads, writes, and reviews stuff. Oh, and draws.

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Trixie grows tired of searching for her place in the world. It is time to put aside her pretending as a powerful magician that she isn’t.

In the depths of the Everfree forest she stumbles on something extraordinary that will change her life forever.

Just want to thank Bad Dragon for looking over and editing the first chapter. It was much appreciated.

Author's Note: I'll be releasing chapters for it monthly since I need time to write the chapters well.

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Comments ( 18 )

Nice start to the story. I can't wait to see what will happen next. Will she learn to master these beasts or will she unleash something? Oh so many fun foreshadows

Seems interesting. Can't wait to see where it goes:pinkiehappy:

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Look here we are and what we have been through! :twilightsheepish:
Being a Princess is all so brand new! :twilightblush:
Can't wait to see what our future ha-as in store! :raritystarry:
Don't wanna wait anymore! :pinkiegasp:
To boredom we say good-bye! :pinkiehappy:
We have limits that we should defah! :ajsmug:
Possibilities endless as Skyyyyy! :rainbowdetermined2:

The dream, she had dreamt from since she had been a small filly, was to a make a breakthrough form the background.
Also there's a missed space here and there.
Don't know if any of these had been intended.
Hope I could help!

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:rainbowhuh:

Well isn't this a oddly creepy coincidence. Both of use reading the same story... It is almost... Comical.

I agree with my counterpart, though unlike him, I do have a few things to point out.

Was Trixie attached to her wagon through the whole chase, as well as her moments in the Cave?

What happened to the Timber Wolves?

An where did the Ursa Major come from exactly?

There were also a few grammatical hiccups here and there, but nothing too major as to detour someone for less than a minute or two.

In any event, I like the idea, and can't wait to see where this goes.

Beastmaster? FOOL! :pinkiecrazy:NONE CAN COMPETE WITH MY KNOWLEDGE OF BEASTS!:pinkiecrazy:

but seriously, I like where this is going:twilightsmile:

This looks very promising. Trixie seeking out a forgotten art can be very interesting indeed.

A little worrying at the end though. I sincerely hope this won't turn out with Trixie becoming a villain who ends up getting taken down by Twilight. I want to see Trixie's journey as she pursues this mysterious lore, becomes powerful in her own right, fights her own villains and learns something about herself in the process. If that's your intention, I'll definitely read with interest.

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Was Trixie attached to her wagon through the whole chase, as well as her moments in the Cave?

Wagon? What wagon? :trixieshiftright:

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:rainbowhuh:

Forgive my ignorance, but are you making a joke?

5050545 The wagon was destroyed. Besides, we've seen her run out of town without it, on more than one occasion. And let's not forget that she mistrusts wheels.

She went to the forest to run away from it all. I can't really picture her dragging a wagon through the thick bushes and trees. You don't go into a forest with a wagon, unless there is a path for it.

So, no. I'm not joking about this. She's alone with nothing but her hat and the coat. I think the wagon would jar her distress, and bring the story down.

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Well that maybe the case in the show, but in this story the wagon's existence was mentioned. The author went so far as to state that she had to detour a few times because she was attached to her wagon.

Between paragraphs 13 and 16 to be exact.

Sorry.

5050714 Hm, you're right. This version of the story really does have the wagon. I concede to you. Your question was, indeed, very valid. Sorry. :heart:

Can't wait for more chapters this fic seems interesting

Again A great start, I would love to see Trixie control the Ursas and with them others

Well i liked it...provided Trixie can actually TRIUMPH in the ned....

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