Man, that art is spooky!

good story wished it contiued but ill be fine wtih this for now. (love all the muffin talk )

Hmm... well the story introduces everyone a little too fast, and you have a couple of run on sentences...but being a prelude of a story I will not make a solid conclusion yet. So, till then good luck writing fellow brony.

that was EPIC LOL XD

You're doing great so far dude!  Once again, KEEP IT UP!!!!

The Chronomancer I: Hubris - The Sword

Will you be accepting OC ponies to represent different time periods?(Great Depression, 1980s, Roaring Twenties, Disco Era(70s), Renaissance, etc)  I have an OC that would I would love for someone to use, if your interested!

I agree with TimeWarp, the characters seem a bit too accepting. Like Night, for instance. A blue box suddenly appears and he just agrees to go on an adventure with this guy he just me. other than that it's great. Hope for more!

Alright this is what I have to say, first off, THANK ALL OF YOU FOR YOUR COMMENTS.  I really love the support now my next comments will target specific people.

>>476054476054

Thanks for the link. Awesome music.

>>476096476096

Sure give me an oc in a message with description (mark, talent, coat, eyes, mane/tail etc etc.) And I'll find a place to put him in. For a set amount of time that you want.

>>475460475460>>476135476135

This is a double reply. Yes I know they were a bit to accepting and the run on stuff is my weak point, but this was just a get to know the character basics mainly. They will have more descriptions and also more background and also the only one who wasn't how he was meant to be was Chrome. Swift is supposed to be carefree but awesome and Night Fire (Me) is very caring and can take a good judge of character but doesn't put up with bull crap. But thanks for commenting on it.

To the rest of you that I didn't specify or that comment after this; THANK YOU. For reading my story, and please leave comments

>>483880483880 COOL! Here is the link to my Deviant page! I was wanting him to represent Coney Island (or rather Poney Island,LOL) in the 1920s. That was the Golden Age for Amusement Parks &  Steeplechase Park's heyday, you know! http://yoyododo1990.deviantart.com/art/Midway-Matt-296026022 Here is the deviant page for the great artist that drew it for me. It's basically a much easier to see picture of my OC. http://that897guy.deviantart.com/art/Midway-Matt-295505322 Here is some music to represent him! http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=urPV7w0K2J4 & http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oENUA2B1_uM&feature=related (I couldn't decide which one I liked better!) He's basically my "ponysona". Tell me what you think! I can't wait to see him in action!

>>484017484017

Dear god, I have legit fans and legit people who are into this story, wow. Thanks i'll get right on it.

>>484072484072 Why wouldn't you have fans for this? Your writing a story about a group of ponies that are screwing around with time, what's not fun about that?

>>484072484072 Wonderful! One last thing, Do NOT have my OC use profanity. I don't cuss, & I don't want my ponysona to cuss either. I won't be able to do much about it, but I would still be disappointed about it. Now that that's out of the way, thanks again! I'm looking forward to seeing him meet the Doctor! Which Doctor is it anyway? My favorites are the Second & the Tenth Doctors What's yours?

>>484566484566 Well Doctor Whooves is actually the tenth doctor, that is who he is supposed to be anyways, and I like the 9-11 doctors.

>>484524484524

I didn't think I had fans because if you look at stuff like my original story, my one with the twixie shipping, people mainly complained about the grammer, and very few people commented or hit favorite.

Also is it ironic that as I typed these an ad at the bottom of the screen is advertising a game with doctor who facing against cyber men?

>>487913487913 Haters will hate, grammar is just an important aspect of writing, and people can get really annoyed when something is wrong. Learn from it, correct it, and move on.

>>487915487915 Thats what product-placement is...

>>488059488059 My editor is going to kill me when he finds out I posted this already. Just realized that.

>>488490488490 Nice knowing you.

>>488703488703

He's mad but not that mad. Also Name change!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Hello readers, I am the (would be) editor for my friend here, and I am quite displeased with him.

*begins cleaning off bloody knife*

Now that that is dealt with, the updates may be slow (due to my rainbow dash-esque lazyness level) but rest assured, "THE FUN SHALL BE DOUBLED!!!"Hey, buddy, you OK?

Zach: my..... spleen....

Me: Meh, you'll be OK.

>>490171490171

Thanks for creeping them out.

Umm...>>490171490171 ...I don't think he's moving....Medic!!!

On another note, when should the next chapter be out by?

I have no idea

Just gonna throw that out there

>>490625490625

The next chapter will be out some time within the next week, i'm typing it then chrome will fix all the grammer and then I will read his revised verision and post the story. Simple yet not.

>>492634492634 Talk about a collab story.

Me: Casey, is the knife necessary?

Yes

a fun read. tracking. I have an OC based on feudal Japan's samurai warriors. If that applies at all, let me know, and you can borrow him.

>>498155498155

Alright, it's always nice to have people following and offering charecters. I'm working on the next chapter, and after that I will start adding ocs.

>>494930494930 You don't have to stab him...

>>498232498232 *characters

This is why you need me

>>500869500869

shut up those are rare

Hey, it's me again! I just thought of a name for my OC's park! How does Ponyville Palisades sound? It's based on the (long since closed) REAL Palisades Park! Here's a tribute website for the park so you can get an idea of how mine looks! http://www.palisadespark.com/index.php Here is a song to represent the park & my OC ponysona! http://www.palisadespark.com/sounds_enter_laughing.html Tell me what you think!

To anybody wondering why it is taking a while for the next chapter, my editor Chrome is having some problems editing it and also I now have a single dislike, if you want to own up to it, go ahead, I'm not mad, but I won't be surprised if it is LittleJackiePappercut. So again sorry about the wait, should be up soon though.

Good chapter, i know it's hard to write these oc's.

Didn't know what to expect from this first (official) chapter but i'm at least interested in the story, so i'll keep my track on this.

Good luck writing!

so apparently, the hyperlink didn't come out right, so here's the link to the song "chrome" played.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XQ-VQIRHVf0&feature=plcp

"Doctor punching them with his hooves" Im sorry THE DOCTOR NEVER USES VIOLENCE( He ALWAYS try's to find the peaceful way out)

(unless its a Time war)

>>577572577572

Thanks for following along with this story. I promise shit is about to happen, mainly to Night Fire.

>>582320582320

That is a lie. He has fought with swords, destroyed cybermen(cyberponies) and when fighting the Daleks, destroyed all but three, but believing he had finished them all off.

>>583943583943 oh ya DERP

Okay, who left out the fact that I have aerokinetic powers and the fact the I can slow down time?  Chrome or Nightfire?

>>587211587211

Oops.

if you find yours confusing read my story.

I like to confuse so this isn't confusing for me.

but it is more confusing then the series it self but less then doctor who.

the story is great and for me it is clear.

>>606710606710

Challenge accepted

>>613466613466

do your best guy.

i think you should be careful not to make a story with no sense.

that happens when people want to make confusing stories on purpose

>>626235626235

I think yours shall be confusing, in the mild sense of the word, only because it appears that you have a story that was originally in another language and it has been translated. Am i correct?

>>628152628152

i don't translate i only write in the story in the languish i post it in.

i actually write better in English than dutch.

how dare you accuse me of such a thing.

it isn't confusing because of that matter.

and it always is checked on forehand.

Dude, I have an idea for another enemy.  He is in the story I was talking about in my PM.  Back to the point, I'm smart enough to not to mess with Chrome's blindfold, apparently.  Anyways, Chrome basically did a Solar Flare that hurts you on accident, right?  I swear, your curiousity is going to be the end of you.

I'm guessing Chrome is like cyclops from x-men...or something like that.

>>988711988711

I'm not using DBZ moves

>>989397989397

If it was just like that, I'd be fine. This is about 100 times worse.

>>992479992479 ...100 times worse than disintegration?

>>992710992710

Well Cyclops shoots an explosive high power beam, that would make me hurt. This, well wait till you find out.

>>993023993023 Yes...waiting....i hate waiting..

>>993093993093

Well I can't put it in a comment!