.........WAWAZZAT?!

WOOt GOOD CHAPTAH

*sniff* *sniff*

A very good chapter sir. The Ending was emotional to me.

I really like how the stories evolving and becoming more intense as the storyline progresses. The novel is over the top and very creative. To some people like Hevia they see ponies are crazy but to true fans it pays homage to them. I can't wait to read more, keep up the good work. BTW cupcakes are tasty

*me at the edge of my seat after reading the cupcake part screaming* DON'T EAT THE CUPCAKE DON'T EAT THE CUPCAKE!

Make him turn back into the World Eater

>>533144533144 I agree

>>533144533144

In due time...in due time.

Nice My Little Dashie reference. Also, FIRST

>can transform to anything

Uh... ok then.

>magical powers

Now that's just silly.

>can reach speed of light

Alright, I'm starting to get a little pissed here... Regardless, I'm still going to keep reading even though your character seems a bit... overpowered (understatement of the century). I hope you aren't offended by my musings; I just had to do it. Anywho, don't let lil' ol' me stop you from writing! Keep on truckin', friend-o!

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>flying human

God dammit, Inrei! Y U SO OVERPOWERED?!

YEHS WANTS MORE AWESOME GOOD STORY (BTW IM NOT YELLING WITH TXT THIS IS HOW I TYPE.)

YES YESSSSSSSSSS YESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS

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>>622100622100

That made me laugh

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For realsies, bro! Why is he so overpowered!? Y'all seriously pushing it here bro, because this is fucking ridiculous. Don't take my opinion seriously (please), I don't want to persuade you to stop writing just because of one butthurt critic. Yes, I understand that as an author, you have every right to break every rule in the book (pardon the joke) but shit like this just pisses me off even further (my personal opinion). Keep doin' what yer doin', bro.

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>>622698622698

I understand your view point, but the reason why Inrei is overpowered is because he was never really human, he's a god.

>>622814622814

*sigh* Alright, I've calmed down a bit but at least tone it down a little, k?

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>>622814622814

Noooooo

Ineri must always be the overpowered devourer of worlds

heck op or not means nothing along as story is still enjoyable it shoudn't matter......im tempted to draw a image of leviation wraped around the planet but im too lazy......but gods i have awesome picture in my head.....

Touchie chapter mate!

The cupcake chapter made me weirded out a bit, but anyways

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Although I think that Discord disapproves of what u did there  

>>626807626807

I consider Discord a more crazy Tobuscus, so even if he did do something, I may find it funny lol.

>>623686623686

Don't worry, I have the whole story planned, I just have to type it.  Inrei will remain overpowered (comes with the god territory), but *spoiler* there will be others.

That chapter was... amazing.

WHY THE FUCK DOES THIS STORY ONLY HAVE 22 LIKES!!!!!!!!!!! IT DESERVES WAY MORE

>MLS update

>still pissed about overpowered oc

*sigh* Let's get this over with.

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I'm not mad at you, just overpowered oc's.

Bad. Ass.

*Emails story to chuck norris*

*Gets email back*:

Chuck Norris approves.

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Dafuk? why is NO ONE commenting on this great story?????/ this must not go unpunishede!

>>736102736102  >>744660744660

As long people enjoy MLS, I'm content.  And I'm glad readers like you appreciate my story to the point of wanting it to be better known.  I think the reason it's as hidden as it is, is because when I started uploading the chapters, it was during my spring quarter of college; so the only time I could add parts 1-6 were at 2 and 3 in the morning, giving it less time to be read since most are normally asleep by then.  Also because of the fact that I'm basically a new writer, people are probably not sure what to expect with My Little Sinner.

>>745599745599 Well I think your story is great! I even may think you could be n my top 3 . Im ok with the over pwered oc, The only thing i hate about over powered oc's Is that they use there poweres like every five seconds! But im glad your not doing that. So, keep it up!

MOAR!!!! :D

Woa, Intense! o_o Next chapter gonna be interesting indeed! :)

WHAT?!?!?! ONLY 1 COMMENT???? THIS DESERVES MORE MORE!!!!!!

edit: dont stop writing bro, this story is amazing

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But I will continue nonetheless. Keep doin' what you're doin', bro.

This guy is like the friggin Avatar, except add Mind bending or something.

I'm so sorry, but i'm gonna have to leave this story now. I just can't stand when people bring some 'ALL F'CKING POWERFUL BEING/ARMY/ETC THAT LIKE DESTROYS THE WORLD. I would've loved it if he just went leviathan and then had to do shit for the princesses or something to atone for his actions.

dammit this waas getting good

Woa! Intense. But... WHAT will happen? WHEN will it be? HOW will Inrie solve his life problems? WILL Rainbow Dash be involved? WHY am I asking YOU all these questions? o_O

Still pissed, still good.

> mfw

>>859213859213

Well if you were hoping for the next chapter, it just got uploaded.

Force answers force, war breeds war, and death only brings death.  To break this vicious circle one must do more than just act without any thought or doubt..... is that a metro quote?

>>864712864712

Metro 2033 does have that line, but this quote has been used in other books and movies.  I rather like this quote because of its meaning (it's the reason why I used it.)

nice

me gusta

Such turn of events! I could see the battle myself!

I was actually reading the battle scene listening to this! Belive me, it's alot more epic! :)

¡Ay!

*sigh*

I'm gonna just go over here and sit in the corner... nice work, man. You already know how I feel.

>>916610916610

Interestingly enough, one of my friends showed me this before I wrote this chapter and it has been stuck in my head for a while.

fucking hell man, you basterd.

Now I have to get My Little Dashie out of my mind.

still a good chapter though

enjoyed it. but really

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also, perfect reading material while listening to Disturbed

W.T.F.

My Little Sinner; now with chapter titles.

OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOH FUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU

This.......has just gotten serious.... B(

Brace yourselfs Dragon army to feel the full wrath on INREI!!!!!!

Please continue with this! I love this story because its not like the rest, yours is uniqe!

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If you're gonna use an overpowered OC, at least do it right (like this guy):

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/19849/The-Darkness-Within-Us-All

Can you dig it?

I wouldn't have felt sadness if my parents died when I was young or any other family member so I can't relate to the sadness but yeah damn good story

I am only up to chapter 12 but will finish in a few hours or so but I would like to state some information.  What I can garner is that the main is a Tier 2 Deity (Somewhat [Galactus in the Marvel comics is as will]).  Tier 1 Deities would be in this situation be Celestia, Luna, Discord, and any other that is connected to one planet/realm (Going to other worlds would slightly weaken em because it is not connected to their home).  Tier 3, 4, and 5 I will talk about at a later time and that doesn't go into the servants that follow such entities.  He may seemed overpowered but by releasing his powers to the fullest he has a high chance of losing himself to the old self (Which plain sucks but kinda makes sense [The madness of the old determine by how long it has passed to the life extent of what he has lived through will take a long time to create a balance to offer better restraint and control]).  Liking it so far.

i agree, the oc is over powered. but you know what? fuck it. it makes for an interesting story. plus you shipped him with RD, which automatically makes this story amzing

A new update?

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beautiful

This is a nice story and I think it is really underrated,also the fights are really epic.

SPOILER ALERT

Also I must say I was really skeptical when I realized that this was something like a sequence of My Little Dashie but I think it turn out nice and both stories keep their value since main focus of this story is Inrei and not Dashie or her past.

>>13142191314219

When I originally thought up of the story Sinner (the book in progress dealing with Inrei's full life) My Little Sinner wasn't originally intended.  It wasn't until I read My Little Dashie when I came up with MLS.  Sure this story does act as a spoiler for Sinner at parts, but it is still its own story.

I am glad that you and the other readers this story has appreciate it.

P.S.

Thank you for the watch as well.

>>13151031315103

No Problem

no

no

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Shit is about to go down.

no

First?

>>14483091448309

I see what you did there.

But back to the story, will it really end like this?

>>15251971525197

Will Inrei win?  Will he lose?  Is peace possible between the two, or will it end with only one standing?  The final chapter will answer these questions.  Expect the end very soon.

no

Nice.

time to add this to my e-reader

beautiful end and funny too.

>>15296081529608

But sleepless nights are where it's at.  Alright, I hope you enjoy the finale.

Wait... he's capable of moving at the speed of light?  I hope he transforms himself into some kind of massless energy when he does that, otherwise he will hit any object with the kinetic energy equivalent of a nuclear bomb.  Ex: A 1 kg mass traveling at 99% of the speed of light would have a kinetic energy of 5.47×1017 joules. In explosive terms, it would be equal to 132 megatons of TNT or approximately 32 megatons more than the theoretical max yield of the tsar bomba, the most powerful nuclear weapon ever detonated. 1 kg of mass-energy is 8.99×1016 joules or about 21.5 megatons of TNT.  

If he does it in atmosphere it will have absolutely catastrophic effects on the surrounding landscape.  A really good example of this can be found here, in the form of what would happen if a pitcher threw a ball at 90% of the speed of light.  For those of you unwilling to read the whole post, the cliff notes are, ball becomes a bullet-shaped ball of expanding plasma which absolutely annilhilates the batter, the diamond, the stadium... and so on.  Essentially, just traveling at a small percentage of c would result in a thermonuclear explosion.  

This of course assumes that he is just THAT FAST.  Not that he can transform himself into energy or make himself intangible in such a way that he lacks mass.  As you approach light speed, your mass essentially becomes infinite.  Ergo, E=MC squared, if mass is infinite the energy necessary to move it is ALSO infinite.  I know, I know, magic, but come on... you don't find anything a LITTLE ridiculous about him being able to move at the speed of light?

You made a really long story. I like that, it reminds me of my story. And I liked that. That last chapter was really well made. Did I mentioned that I LOVED IT! Right now, I'm standing and clapping for you.

The level of power creep in this story is absolutely ridiculous.  Let's see....

Faster than Rainbow Dash?  Check.

More Magical than Twilight?  Check.

I haven't seen evidence yet that he could oveshadow the other mane six, but I'm certain you could pull it off if you REALLY tried.  You really REALLY need to think hard about where you are going with this story, bro.  As it stands, we have a protagonist who is supremely unsympathetic, for a multitude of reasons, but mostly because he really has no FLAWS.  He has a typical "tragic backstory" (tm).  I understand that you have some kind of ultimate showdown of ultimate destiny planned with this thing, possibly this Reiku dude you keep talking about, but... well, right now, I'm kinda rooting for Reiku... this guy killed quadrillions of folks because he was having a bad millennia?  Dude.

To give you an idea of what that means, are you aware that as of 2011, the estimated total number of human births on earth, that means from the beginnings to our history, to 2011, was only (I can't believe I'm saying ONLY) an estimated 108 billion?  Let's try to conceive of this, because this is literally one of the biggest numbers I've ever worked with.  1 quadrillion is 1,000,000,000,000,000.  Rounding off the other number, 108 billion, for ease of calculation, we get 100,000,000,000.  As a ratio, that can be simplified to 1:10,000.

This means that, if he had ONLY killed one quadrillion (you mentioned he killed quadrillionS) than he has killed approximately TEN THOUSAND sentients for every man, woman, and child ever born on earth.  Throughout its history.  Ever.   Give or take a few hundred.

Are you even reading what you're writing?  That's... just Re-god-damn-diculous.  I'm sorry.  I really want to like this story, but... I just can't.  I tried really hard to like the main character.  I just can't.

Even the gods of greek mythology had flaws, bro.  Zeus was a huge irresponsible pervert.  Hera was a jealous shrew.  This guy is the sad little dark god who murdered a shit ton of people more than have ever existed on earth and then thinks that the fact that he could do it again doesn't justify wiping him off the face of whatever planet he happens to reincarnate to.  Yes, it's sad that his loved ones have paid the price for his existence.  Even Hitler had a mother, and I'm sure she loved him.

Sorry.  Good luck to you, and thanks for... well, thanks I guess.  For the record, I don't downvote stories or anything.  I sincerely hope you take a good luck at the direction you're going with the story and at least think about it a bit.

Zin began, but his voice was empty with his words.  “Inrei…died….”

A hollowed silence filled the room as the equines’ eyes widened and their mouths dropped into an O.

“Inrei…He…..he died a week ago…Inrei died fighting Reiku.”  Zin continued, his voice detaching further away from anything remotely happy and deeper into depression.

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“Even though Inrei and I are two separate entities, our souls are the same.  If I use my soul as a conduit, I can strengthen Inrei’s spiritual energy as I transfer it back into his body.  I can resurrect him.”

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“It worked…”

Another chest compression appeared, and then another and another.

“It worked!”  Reiku joyously laughed.

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Rainbow Dash just met him. Now she's sleeping next to him, cooing in his ear.

Lucky mother fucker.

YESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYES

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The only picture that was on my mind when the rock-element fuse

and i am not a pokemon fan

This is the only thing I can pic while Inrei was grapping the earth whit his tail

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Ps.Thats Slifer the Sky Dragon

Next song to be play

Fucking half a hour to finish this chapter(or even more time)

i like it

I have somany pic rigth now that i want to post on how the battle went

but too lazyass to doit

sorry other readers

Some How

All the battle that  Inrei figth

I see them like this

Sorry that is in Jap

but

the original language is better!!!

great story

the stories picture! i now remember what its from! .hack//

i knew i recognized it. now i can rest easy.

>>20670202067020 When I decided to the cover picture for MLS, it was going to be either Inrei's mask or Reiku's symbol.  I had one of my friends who is good with both drawing and photoshop try to create the cover pic.  However we had a lot of trouble with the mask and ended up deciding to go with the mark.  Since Reiku's symbol is very similar to Tri Edge's, we ended up going with what you see now.  He blacked out the background and enhanced the glow of the mark, and I considered it my reference/easter egg to a series I enjoyed as a kid.

"0.00000391 percent" + various descriptions of multiple superpowers.

Huh. So he's a superhero. Of Phenomenal Cosmic Powers. From your book which I haven't read. Do you have a name for this universe he's from? Is it based off some other franchise I might relate to?

>>21637212163721 To answer both your questions, the universe that Inrei originally came from (when he was still a chaotic being) never did have a name, however in sense with the whole story, this universe is to be considered the original universe or the first universe that Reiku had created.  The universe Inrei came from (the one where he regained his powers and was known as the Azure Dragon) this realm's Earth is set after the collapse and rebirth of most modern governments and nations.

As for the story and universe being based off another franchise, in a way yes.  I had a lot of influences from  different animes I used to watch when I was a lot youngers.  What I did was take a concept and redesigned it or added my own take on it in my head; an example of this would be Zin's Ultimate and beast form are based on Nightmare's and Nightterror's design from Soul Calibur 3.

marked with read later, lets see when i do read it

>>13248761324876 yes

But I’m not saying I’m going break up with you

You scared me you bastard