Days after the truth is uncovered regarding the Rainbow Factory, Cloudsdale is struggling to cope with the sudden loss of a vital institution. The place of operations may be condemned, but the effects are not over with. Not by a long shot. And in an attempt to heal fix the broken city, The Royal Cloudsdale Congress turns to the very madmen they despise for help. Nothing could possibly go wrong, right?
-An unofficial squeal to the famed Pegasus Device by AuroraDawn-
Cool and very interesting take I'll be sticking around for this waiting for more.
Pretty good for a first fimfic. And I'm not just saying that because I absolutely adore the Rainbow Factory (In case my profile picture didn't make that obvious enough.). I'd be interested to see where this goes. If you ever need an editor/pre-reader, let me know. I'm always willing to help out another author.
Good fic
Ooh, neat format you're using there, with the timestamps and documentation. Makes this feel like a cool mystery.
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Yeah, some extra help proofreading and editing would be great.
Would you be willing to do that?
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I'm glad, that's the feel I'm going for.
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Sure. I'd love to.
An interesting and solid start thus far. I cant wait to read more on this and see how you do this piece differently.
-frost
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Great! I'll send you a message, one sec.
Hmm... Not sure how to feel about this just yet. I despise Rainbow Factory, but this shows promise. But... is Dash dead?
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Yes. Dash and Hide are dead.
It's fantastic to see this updated! I thought you had abandoned it!
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Lol, I did.
Not really sure where I'm going with this story. But I'm going...
Oh boy someone wants to revive the Pegasus Device. Who are these ponies and why do they want world domination? Yeah don't expect me to finish the meme... EVER!