This story is flippin' marvellous. Kits writes in a style that evokes images all the time; so many little scenes that are easy to visualize because they're show-close in how they're written. Both Twilight and Rainbow Dash hit all the key points, and one particular scene later in the story just presses all my buttons with regards to characterization.

I've watched this story take shape, so I'm obviously slightly biased, but I will be the first to tell you: read this. If you like TwiDash? Read it. If you generally like shipping, but you're not convinced 'bout TwiDash? Read it. If you don't like shipping? I've no idea why you clicked the link here, but read it.

So. Much. Cuteness. A little hot, too! I may be in love with Rainbow Dash now.

Not really my kinna story. But I respect it for how well it is written. You have my like. Good work.

Damn you good sir, .

was about to sign off and say that you posted a story with my favourite pairing, .

Damn, time to read, track and favourite this sucker.

>>471675471675

>implying you didn't love her before

But seriously, thanks for the help you've given me. Even if you think it wasn't a lot, this wouldn't exist in anything like its current form without you.

>>472775472775

Might I inquire as to why it is not? Is it the pairing? I'm actually a huge fan of myself. Is it >shipping? Or is it the setup? I don't want to spoil the ending, so I'll shut up and just let you answer.

>>472823472823

I hope you enjoy! TwiDash is probably my second fav pairing now-a-days. It shot up after Building Bridges and Read it and Weep, knocking AppleDash aside. I really just like shipping Dash with her friends.

this is awesome and twilight better not hurt dash.

....... LOL

>See this added to twiDash group

>Looks at Approval Rate

"Well this sounds promising-"

>kits wrote it

I MUST READ THIS!

Sorry, had to post that, will actually review later when I read it.

>>473117473117

Nothing against your work. generally I'm jsut not much for paring because it happens, ALL THE TIME. I have liked some and very few. but like i said. while this story is great, I just don't like the shipping basis much.

the one thing I'm worried about is that this is going to go into the classic cliche of 'you thought it was a real relationship?' and Dash is going to get hurt...if you end up doing that, it'd be wise to do it in a very unique way because it's too overused

Twilight's organizational skills are just adorkable here.  And seeing the usually confident Rainbow just stammer like that is a sight.

YOU HAVE ME HOOKED, SIR!

>>473136473136

Spoilers :x

>>473183473183

I have fans

Thanks for the support!

>>473139473139

>>473189473189

Certainly! It is actually refreshing to talk to someone who doesn't like shipping and is mature about it. Thanks! You Might like Storm. It's not Shippy at all and written in a similar 3rd person limited PoV. But, being almost a YEAR OLD now (holy ****nuggets) is quite a bit rougher in places than this.

I actually started this fic for a contest back in Feb. (I missed the deadline by 38000 words and 2 months. Hah)  I know a lot of TwiDash has come out since then, but that isn't going to stop me from posting my own.

Adorkable Twilight is best Twilight!

Well, let's see where this baby goes! Definitely star'd!

Oh god how did I not fav/thumbs up this before.

*fixt*

>>473117473117

Yes, implying at any point that you don't love Rainbow Dash should be considered a grievous offense.

Perpetrators must be severely punished!

TWENTY SMACKS WITH A WET POOL NOODLE!

>>473207473207

Spoilers. I can note you if you wish to know before deciding to read the next 37000 words.

>>473240473240

Thanks!

>>473259473259

Twilight should be adorkable. And Dash should be whatever the sporty version of that is? (hot? I dunno. I find her so.)

>>473360473360

Lol. When it first went up, I had two thumbs up and 11 faves. I was very confused.

>>473366473366

I'm 90% sure that any ship that involves Pinkie is amazing.

PinkieDash is my favorite pairing, but when you get ideas, you gotta roll with them. If you don't mind clop, check out End of a Rainbow. It's been called "sweet and funny" by some.

>>473396473396 nah I'll wait it out. just saying that that particular path for this kind of story is a rather overused one.

I'm more interested in what happens when Dash finds out that Twi is just using her to fulfill a checklist, then move on

I see the makings of a very convoluted/awkward situation abrewing! Can't wait to see what's next!

>>473396473396

I realized after I posted that I read it whilst it was still on gdocs, Cloudy had pointed me at it, heh X3

>>473454473454

Haha

Well, THIS one is edited

Hence it being only 3 chapters instead of all 12

>>473499473499

Sounds like a good reason to read it again, soon! X3

hmm, this is indeed a peculiar proposition. Then again so are most situations where communication - and lack thereof - malfunctions big time.

I love the detail you put into each little bit of description. All the little points that make it come to like, all of which I am seriously envious of you about and that I can only wish I could pick up on your knack for detail and making it spring to life. I've been trying to pull it off myself where I can but I fall flat.

My biggest question is though, with that last bit about Twilight imagining Dash as Daring Do, is Twilight actually going to develop feelings for Rainbow because Rainbow is taking it like a legit relationship or is she really just going by her objective?

Don't Answer!

Looking forward to what comes next, obviously.

Oh god. In during the best TwiDash.

This is delightful! Kits, where have you been all this time?! Why have I not come across you before?! I have the stupidest smile on my face, and people are looking at me weirdly in the lecture theater. Apparently political theory shouldn't make people go 'dawww'. Funny that.

Seriously, this is a lot of fun, and you have a really commendable style. I have become far more picky with the ship fics I read, but this one has me hooked! I really can't wait for the next update.

Keep up the great work! I'm gonna go check out some more of your stuff, haha. Any suggestions?

I am so very excited to see this posted!  

>>473710473710

(comment has been noted. any answers have been explicitly removed) Thanks though. I usually have a really vivid, fully animated with voice acting and sound effects image of what's going on. That first scene where she stalks her table... If I could animate, I would make that a thing.

>>473759473759

/me blushes. I hope it lives up to your expectations

>>473878473878

Well. After I published Storm (which would be the one I'd recommend if a darkish/sadish thing is good with you) I got involved in Phoe's New Artist Training Ground event and went from talentless hack to almost good. Then I got brought onto EqD's pre-reading staff because they needed more people. Storm hitting 6star and the help I gave Cupcakes with Nocturne got me an in. Between art and pre-reading and starting the mlp-wtg on deviantart, I had no time for writing.

Then I pre-read Building Bridges, offered to buy Cloudy's booze, and we hit it off. I spent a lot of time helping friends get their ideas up. I actually have several fics I've never got past rough draft of part one. Trying to use the same WTG prompt that Rainbow Dash's Best Plan Ever used made me hit writer's block so hard, I ended up writing End of a Rainbow (clop).

I don't have anything else near this long:

Read Goddammit Pinkie Pie, it will take around 1 minute. But only if you can afford to laugh.

If you like show-style CMC, I'm told I did a good job on Chancing Canterlot. Probably the weakest of my fics.

If you want a darker, less bouncy mane-6 centric fic that did real well around a year ago, check out Storm. No, Dash does not lose her wings or die.

End of a Rainbow is my attempt to write clop. I didn't bother futzing around with a story to critique, it's just Pinkie and Dashie having fun. It's been called "sweet and funny"

Featherfall is primarily Scootaloo learns to fly from Dash. But I have a twist planned for it. This fic just killed all my time.

That and the twins that are being born in <6 weeks

OH! There is a fic, written by one "Tittyhawk" called "The Great and Powerful Ship" that is trolling 2nd person clop so hard people seem to LIKE it. I TOTALLY DIDN'T WRITE IT.

<.<

>.>

- Kittyhawk out

>>473958473958 Goddammit Pinkie Pie is hilarious. Best 400 words I've read in a long time, haha. I'm definitely going to check out Storm as soon as I can, too. It is 6 star, after all.

And helping Cloudy with anything is a perfectly reasonable use of time! Haha

This is adorkably brilliant, and reinvigorates shipping with plenty of awww yeahhh.

>>474061474061

Wait for the super secret epilogue to be posted in a different story thread. It'll get a rise out of you.

Ooooo Featured now

Congrats!

-

Usually these stories go with Twi actually finally getting into the relationship, followed by Dash finding the truth or the lists, betrayal feelings of sorts occur, while Twi will have to prove herself to Dash... (Or maybe I have no idea what I'm saying)

ANYWAYS

Thank cloudy skies for leading me here

Awaiting moar

Adorkable Twilight causing confusion.  I can't find anything to dislike.  

>>474104474104

>Usually these stories go with Twi actually finally getting into the relationship, followed by Dash finding the truth or the lists, betrayal feelings of sorts occur, while Twi will have to prove herself to Dash

You are correct. That is the trope.

>

Image: http://i.imgur.com/iIrEj.png

I haven't read the story yet (Will in a second) but just wanted to point out that I read the title as Twilight's Lust (Same with the pic).

That is all.

I don't think I'm the only one who knows where this is going and is perfectly okay with it.

Oh, this has trouble written all over it. I mean, it is a story, after all.

"Rainbow Dash led Twilight Sparkle, her new girlfriend, out onto the dance floor."

I believe it should say "Rainbow Dash led Twilight Sparkle, her new marefriend, out onto the dance floor."

>>474124474124

That is also a fic I am writing. In fact the full title is "Twilight's Lust: One Letter Makes all the Difference"

>>474129474129 see >>474122474122

I need to stop getting distracted. i opened this 5 hours ago.

Just finished chapter 1.

Good work so far.

The characterization in this story is both enduring, hilarious, and brilliant! My goodness, Bravo kits!! BRAVO!! Easily the best representation of the characters I've seen yet in any relationship based fanfic. I'm in awe at your ability to capture these mares personalities in an enjoyable and believable way that hasn't been seen in the show yet.

Personal favorites? Rainbow Dash getting flushed over Twilight's Ice water nerves, no, like, cold ice water nerves (so obvious it in retrospect but this is the only fanfic I've seen point something like that out, and you did it so well), and then Rarity's fangirly reaction to her two friends dating. So funny! You made my night.  

I wish I could offer some constructive criticism in return for sharing this work with us, but you've struck me stupid. You really only have yourself to blame for this.

I like the canon-inity of this shipfic. Scystorm tells me this'll dethrone me, or something along those lines, and depending on where it goes I don't think I'd mind too much.

I wish I had the daring do episode all of season 2 to go off of when I wrote

>>474122474122

Ehhheheheh, well it'll be fun to see how you flesh it out

Part of the fun of reading these is seeing how writers take classic scenarios and put their own flair on it

Twilight's way of approaching romance is very... well, Twil-like.

Way to go blindsiding Dash completely!

>>474241474241

I dunno about dethroning, but it's definitely a worthy match.

Just read 1 through 3, was so awesome. If there's something I love in a story it's how close the characters are portrayed to the characters on the show. And I'd say you hit it right on the mark. It was those things like Twilight's orderly perspective and Dash's brash and spontaneous perspective that get me and really make the story for me. Applejack seems more mocking and teasing to me but I could put that down as her competitive attitude with Rainbow Dash.

Chapter 3 Fluttershy. . . DAWWW

>>474145474145

Me Gusta

Now this I like. its a little different form the norm, I cant really place a hoof on it, but I like it.

Hah! AJ is a reliable source of good sense and teasing, it seems.

We all know what Dash is now going to dream about

Muffins of course

I saw that song coming, and I loved it!

I hope Twi knows what she had done.

>>473245473245 "I actually started this fic for a contest back in Feb. (I missed the deadline by 38000 words and 2 months. Hah)  I know a lot of TwiDash has come out since then  actually started this for a contest back in Feb. (I missed the deadline by 36000 words and 2 months. Hah). I know a lot of TwiDash has come out since then, but I'm not giving up on it just because it got popular while my slow-plot tried to finish this story."

Sweetie Bot has detected an error.

Suggested Action: Initiate repair protocols.

I see this little experiment in romance is going to end up going much further than Twilight expected, though she doesn't quite realize it yet...

And now...we wait for moar.

Oh no, Oh No, no, mo!

Dash thinks its real, Twilight thinks Dash is playing around! Pore Rainbow!!! this will not end well!!

Love this story, The writing is top quality ,  and the plot is fantastic!

>>474413474413 1-Poor Rainbow

2-RAINBOW NOOOOOOOOOOOOOO

3-WHY TWILIGHT WWWWWHHHYYYYYYY

Why the buck did I read the title as "Twilight's Lust"?

I don't know what everyone here is so worried about. I, for one, think it's going to end just fine with no hurt feelings at all.

Ooh...this could end in heartbreak. I don't see a "sad" tag, but it definitely could...

....

*tracked*

"...I think– I think I'll say 'yes'."

Image: http://gaijintokamera.files.wordpress.com/2010/10/keikaku.jpg

let's hope my craptop can handle fimf comments!

>>474225474225

Thanks! Characterization is the number one thing I care about usually. It's made me love some less than stellar writing and has sunk great writing. It's one of those things you  run into with >fanfiction a lot more than original fiction.

I had a lot of fun imagining how Rarity would ever react if two of her friends showed the slightest bit of romantic interest in each other. Fangirling out is the only reaction that makes sense to me.

>>474241474241

Well, I didn't seek out to dethrone anyone. I mean, Twilight's quill is blue because I saw someone make a comment about how Twi having one of Dash's feather is a unique thing to TwiDash (*snrk*) so I had to. Cloudy appreciated it I think.

But yes, Read it and Weep (and Lesson Zero to a much lesser extent) really helped bring this together.

>>474285474285

I hope you like my take!

>>474293474293

Well, more like her approach to dating. I think if she thought this was supposed to be >romance, she'd be petrified.

>>474299474299

I see AJ's relationship with Dash as really good friends who constantly try to annoy eachother. Dash pranks AJ and AJ pushes Dash's buttons when she can. But yeah, it's meant to be friendly ribbing, not HAHA U R TEH SUCK

>>474300474300

I may be my writing style. One critique (ok, like the _only_ critique) I received on Storm was that thought's were presented both directly and indirectly. This fic has no direct thoughts. No "I wonder what Twilight is doing?" Dash thought. The closest is teh occasional time when the ponies talk out loud. I try to let their thoughts color the narration instead of presenting them directly. It's essentially a very limited 3rd person PoV that is a step back from most.

>>474303474303

Yeah. AJ just can't let Dash off w/o some teasing.

>>474345474345

>>474413474413

>>474450474450

>>474601474601

>>474607474607

I want to respond. But >spoilers.

>>474315474315

Blueberry muffins :3

>>474350474350

Kittyhawk has thrown a Concurrent Modification Exception

>>474357474357

See >spoilers. But, it is tagged >romance.

>>474362474362

I hope to have at least one more chapter by tonight. The whole story is written, just not edited.

>>474515474515

Sssh! That's the spinoff!

>>474667474667

Hahawat

Another story where the Mane 6 are gay as fuck.

Congrats on making the featured box!

This is lovely. Here is the part where I will say I'm not usually keen on TwiDash blah blah excusecakes, but really, I think I'm not keen on BAD TwiDash. I mean, sure, I've got my preferred ships and all, but I think it really is a quality thing. (Kinda like the folks who keep saying, "I don't really like romances, but I liked this!" I wonder if they in actuality just don't like poorly written romances ... but I am digressing.)

The thing I like the best about this so far, the thing that's really making it work for me, is Rainbow Dash's goofball enthusiasm for the idea of dating Twilight. It's adorable and, though it initially took me by surprise, it seems very in-character to me. Reminds me of "Over a Barrel" ... she took a bit to come around to the cause of the buffalo, but once she did, she was 110% and aggressively defending the cause. And here, she takes a bit to process the idea of dating Twilight, but once she comes to the decision "Yes, I will date Twilight," she is ALL. FOR. IT. Zero to sixty, in ten seconds flat. So very, very Dash.

Rainbow Dash led Twilight Sparkle, her new girlfriend, out onto the dance floor.

They haven't even gone on a date yet, and Rainbow's thinking of Twilight as her girlfriend. That's hilarious and adorable. And it makes me think these two really are suited to one another--they're both going about this in an utterly ridiculous, socially inept way, just from opposite ends of the social ineptness spectrum. I cannot wait to read about these two actually going on that date.

And of course it's making us all worry, as WE know what Dash does not regarding Twilight asking her out. But then we got that lovely little bit with Twi at the end of chapter 3, her reimagining of Daring Do, and ... I think it'll all be okay, in the end. "The course of true love never did run smooth ..."

On a mostly unrelated sidenote, I LOVED that Twilight put "Pinkie Sense" under both the pros and the cons on Pinkie's list. That was very, very funny. Also, Twilight was entirely right to do so.

i love this story

and how twidash a good example of the opposites attract kind of couples

I loves this story. I can see akward moments not long in coming though.

Well, looks like the scientific nature of 'completing the List' is starting to take a more...romantic turn.

>>474144474144

oops missed this one the first time. Shessh, go to sleep for 5 lousy hours... :P

No. "Girlfriend" is the word I wanted. Hearts and Hooves showed that "boyfriend" is in use in Equestria and I decided Dash uses "girlfriend". Other characters may or may not use "marefriend".

>>474816474816

I used to think shipping (not just ponies) was all bad too and that I didn't like it. Then I read good shipping. I'm glad you liked the rundown of her friends. I worried about pissing on people's OTPs a bit writing that. It's why Fluttershy's ended up as kinda a cop-out.

>>474869474869

>>474911474911

hehe >spoilers

Oh crap! I didn't realise it wasn't finished! Now I'll have to wait!

>>475042475042

Won't be too long. It's all written, but I'm having some friends proof it for me since I was absent the day they taught us how2grammar.

I'm hoping for chapter 4 and 5 tonight. Maybe 6 if I have time. There are 12 parts in total.

My good sir...

WHY THE FUCK ARE YOU SO DAMN EPIC?!

Good show.

Wow your style and flair sure do bring this story idea to life. TwiDash is one of the most adork-a-d'aww-some pairings around. You have my interest, thumbs up, and I am eager to see where you take this story hook.

Yeah, i ended up reading it just because it is well written. Good work, you made me read something I never planned on reading.

Oh how delicious this whole thing is going to be.

>>475117475117

Thanks! It helps that I've hit 3,000,000 words read (on fimfic alone) and that I wanted to 'go for broke' instead of settling for 'good enough'. For three months I've worked on this fic every single day.

>>475193475193

Thanks! If I may ask, which parts do you find particularly effective? Anything that needed more flair? Not that I'm changing what is published, but I love improving my craft.

>>475195475195

Excellent! If you'd like more well written fics within this genre check out Cloudy Skies. he is a master of emotionally charged, in character shipping.

>>475266475266

ON NOM NOM

I'd have to say your descriptions and how the characters interactions all feel so natural is what struck me the most about your writing. There is an elegant simplicity to it at times that just works and creates a vivid image in the mind.

This will all end in tears, I just know it.

"And it had been entirely due to her family's pride and stubbornness that she had risked the farm in that cider contest." That was not applejack that was Granny smith.

Edit: and it wasent the Farm it was the right to sell Apple cider.

>>475351475351

Meh, there will probably be some tears and broken hearts along the way, but that's not likely how it's going to end.

points to lack of [Sad] tag

... Alright. First chapter seems legit enough. I'll keep reading.

XD HAY! Don't make fun of foals! At least THEY have it right! FIRST comes the love, THEN come the MARRIAGE, THEN comes the baby in the baby carriage! Not 'Then comes the baby, then comes the marriage just to hide it all up' or whatever. I'm intrigued by this story...

Image: http://arch.413chan.net/I'm_Liking_This_Idea-(n1309917639647).png

Dam it Twilight.  If you break Rainbow's heart I don't think I'll ever forgive you.  (I probably will)  I love this story so far but I'm cringing on the inside, just waiting for the truth to come out.  Poor Rainbow and poor Twilight.  How are you going to deal when it comes to light that Dash really is falling in love with you?

Dam it Twilight.  If you break Rainbow's heart I don't think I'll ever forgive you.  (I probably will)  I love this story so far but I'm cringing on the inside, just waiting for the truth to come out.  Poor Rainbow and poor Twilight .  How are you going to deal when it comes to light that Dash really is falling in love with you?

Dashie interrupted Twilight? That can't be good... *Keeps reading*

*Finishes* Well now... Yeah...

Image: http://images.4chon.net/h/src/1330947880065.gif

OMG this story is so awesome ... at the end of chapter 3 cried realizing it wasn't complete  

I NEED MOAR!!!

This is a delightful piece of work, it's quite a rarity to see a fanfic that actually has proper grammar, so bravo for that.

As for the story, I love it! I've never read a TwiDash before but this has certainly encouraged me to look for some more.

All in all, it's very well written, the characters' personalities were nailed, the style of writing sets my imagination on fire and I am eagerly awaiting more!

>>475339475339

Thanks! I strive to make my ponies behave as close to their canon selves as I can! I'm glad you liked the visuals!

>>475351475351

I'd comment more except

>spoilers

>>475379475379

They made it quite clear that losing the right to sell cider meant losing the farm.

>>475533475533

I need to start using Scootaquotes more. Glad you're liking it.

>>475538475538

>>475553475553

And then they all fuuuuuuuuuuunded a charity.

>>475581475581

Stay tuned. The whole thing is written. I'm just doing final edits to make sure I don't have hundreds of spelling and punctuation errors.

>>475589475589

Glad you're liking it!

If you want some suggestions Building Bridge is an amazing TwiDash story too. Everything Cloudy Skies writes is amazing. If you've seen Twilight with a single feather in her mane, it's probably because of that fic.

>>475686475686 For... What? Come on, you're leaving out all of the juicy details! I need to know how long it took them to fuuuuuuund a charity, and where it happened, how they went about it, EVERYTHING!

Image: http://i.neoseeker.com/mgv/60953-Shadow%20of%20Death/953/102/twilightcrazy_display.gif

>>475686475686 my first point is still quite valid it was not Applejack it was granny smith.

THIS BE GOOD.

Your writing style is what I've always strived for, and I love the fact that Twilight just pretty much knows she's a lesbian. Just straight out like that, Didn;t give any attention to Caramel or Big Mac or any other, maybe OC colt. Just mares.

This kills me. Fav'd (and I don;t do that often).

WOW! This story is by far really good! As soon as I read about Twilight saying that Rainbow was a good actor and actually thought her and Twilight were actually going out , I perked up. I can't WAIT to see how this turns out. Will Rainbow figure out this is all just an experiment? Will Twilight realize that Rainbow actually thinks this is for real? SO MANY QUESTIONS! I will be waiting for the next chapter!

THAT, madahfahkah, THAT's what I'm-a-diddly-a-talkin'-about. Love this story. I love how you basically skipped the actual dating thingie 'cause they know each other so well. That's coolio, and it makes sense.

It's distressingly rare that I make it through 10k words without my inner armchair literary critic piping up with some unsolicited comment about how a sentence could have been worded more to my liking, or how someone did something that might be just a teensy bit out of character.

Thanks for shutting him up for five minutes.

What has this bronydom done to me? I sign in on blogger, intensedebate, deviantart, tumblr and now fimfiction and i can´t stop! Ponies all the way! Gonna catch all pony websites! So much to catch up!!

Anyway thanks for being the last pusher to finaly enter the dome of pony fanfiction~ <3

You story´s more than worth it ofc. Favorite and hoof´d up!

*She needed to be cool, she needed to have style. Absolutely smooth. "Buh-huh."* <- my favorite line of your fic.

Though i also liked that explanation of Rainbow about Twilight, how she was *the ME in Magic!*, it really sums up alot about Twi. Ofc it´s not the only thing like you showed with how differently they treat their skills/power in them. You´re a great writer with good ways to describe the characters IC and alive feeling while adding lots of canon moments we remember and cherish from the show. Also i learned a new english words thanks to you, lol.

Hope the next chapter will be up soon.

Also 3 months, every day, for 12 chapters?! Oo

That´s alot of devotion, awesome!!! (<- i luv this Spike emotion xD)

This can only be goooooooooooooooooooooood~

Or end in lots of tears and heart-pieces. <.<

But i hope you won´t do the *RD finds out this was only a list-thingie of Twi and gets mad* and do more of a *Twi falls seriously in love with RD during the dates, continues them but is scared/sad since she believes RD is doing this as a good friend to help her out and doesn´t know how to tell her her feelings while RD and everyone else truly believes they´re a couple and is worried why Twi seems to get sadder and sadder with each day they´re together...etc.*. Well, just continue like you did so far and surprise us.^g^

Anyone else come here expecting a crossover with Schindler's List?

Can't seem to finish reading it all, being stuck at the point where RD and Twilight dance.

It's just ridiculously cliche and the feeling of it all being 'meh' at best springs to mind.

If the author can openly reveal the plot of the entire story in just a measly few words in a comment, it really shows me how little they care about it.

At this point adding suspense would be worthless.

I really don't see how this got featured, but with that 'shipping chart' that was shown a day or so ago, a story written with a lot of sap and cliche would probably have any brony be sucked right in to it without much room for thought.

Also, the idea of RD being the 'submissive' type is also an easy string to pull at.

I came reading expecting for something fresh...

"Twilight Sparkle prides herself on following and sticking to her plans, but she isn't as organized as everypony thinks. Her master list, the plan for her life, has an item that she has never been able to check off; and the time has come to fix that. How hard can it be? All she needs to do is go on a date and get a kiss."

...to only find a 'Friends w/Benefits' story.

I guess that's what I get for hoping the cover wouldn't be a brief summary of what the story would be about.

Shipp fic after ship fic . . .

Image: http://www.userpedia.adriels.com/wiki/images/2/28/GodDamnIt.jpg

But hey it's okay if y'all like it.

Shipping for science is best shipping.

A most enjoyable read thus far. I look forward to seeing how much more objectivity Twilight is going to lose.

I see all the beautiful pieces in motion...

And I see the point that will come, where the revelation that Twilight isn't taking this seriously comes out...

And I see the beautiful chaos that will come in that moment.  

And I smile.

But seriously, this is a really well-executed take on this concept.

>>474936474936

For what it's worth, TwiPie isn't my OTP but clocks in at #2 in my affections, and I wasn't bothered by that section at all. It didn't feel like you were taking swipes at others' OTPs but just having Twilight do a weirdly (but characteristically) analytical rundown of her friends' pros and cons as potential dates. And all of the points made felt like points Twi might think of.

Interesting that you weren't always on Team Shipping! Me, I've always been a sucker for romances. Used to go through Sweet Valley High books like water, back in the day--much to my eternal shame now, of course.

>>473117473117 I like shipping Twilight my fav pairing is TwiDash though

Just wondering when will the next chapters be put up? wanna read the rest =)

not ignoring the rest of you guys, just hitting this one real quick

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I should have 4 and 5 ready to go tonight. 6 is a possibility.

>>476465476465 Awesome can't wait to read the rest of it =D

I may have to print this out so I can hug it.  

I look forwards to more of this story- the characterizations are good, squee!Rarity is hilarious, the plot has interesting twists, and it doesn't even matter that it's not completely a new idea, because you're executing it really well.

Good characters + good plot + good execution = good story, and you're managing all three quite nicely.

Write moar!