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Bad


Sweet nothings.

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Our Queen is a mystery. She manages to run our kingdom while being rarely seen in public. None knows much about her. How long she has been reigning? None has the slightest idea.

It seems I'm the only one who is genuinely interested in the Queen.

I know it's weird, but I'm really worried about her. She's been acting off since the failed invasion of Canterlot. Usually subtle and centered, she now breaks in random talk and looks a bit delusional.

Incidentally, I've been called to serve at the royal throne. I'm unsure if I want to use this assignment as an excuse to learn more about her.

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 7 )

This is a very intriguing story you have here.

And I cannot wait for the next update!

Cheers

Noooooooo! Not a cliffhanger!

Meh. I can deal with it.

For now.

Anyways, this story is going to turn out amazing, I can already tell. Keep up the awesome work!

Comment posted by Bad deleted Nov 29th, 2014

At times this is confusing as if fragmented. A lot of what Chrysalis does or why sounds weird. Half the stuff happening and the deductions out of them feel... Well as if i dont know how one's mind could end that way.

The thoughts about peace with the ponies sound... Random. I mean I am not entirely sure how you make the connections.

In the end i might just need to read it again because its left to the viewer to think what the situations with other species are. I mean are they failed invasions as well?

If i may... I understand that this is your headcanon and all but you are not doing yourself any favors in terms of originality by making this character feel like a special little snowflake. I mean shes the only one to speak? I thought changelings could speak as they did in Canterlot or the comics. Also I dont understand how this character is the only survivor of her generation.

All in all I am neutral so far.

The strangeness continues. Where does this lead? Hmmmm

The weirdness continues. It seems extremely lucky that the guess is right. I mean that this is a dream.

Dunno.

It seems odd to stop the chapter here. You also never described her colors i think. Hell i doubt you described the changeling or Ananke.

More weird stuff happen.

However in this chapter some grammar errors are presenpresent more than others. In any case they are minor and i will continue.

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