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Is English not your first language? your grammar is all over the place; I'll go though it a bit for you and show you what I mean;
It was a beautifull day, sun rising high in the sky was giving inhabitants of Ponyville the feel of warm and joy.
It was a beautiful day and the sun was high in the sky; its shining rays filling the inhabitants of Ponyville with feelings of warmth and joy.
Wind was calmly moving through the grass and the fallen leaves at the ground.
The wind was calmly moving through the grass and the fallen leaves on the ground.
It was the middle of the spring, but there was still a lot to work on since the winter wrap up celebration.
Even though it was the middle of spring there was still a lot of work left over from the winter wrap up celebration. (Lazy Ponies ! This is literally your job to get this stuff done. Also if the winter wrap up work isn't done shouldn't it still be winter? And there are fallen leaves on the ground so its also autumn ? They are in a right mess.)
Ponies went for their daily jobs as usual, but one pony had stayed in her house today.
Ponies went about their daily jobs as usual, but one in particular was staying in her house today.
It was a mailmare, called Derpy Hooves.
She was a mailmare (Derpy is not an it
)
It's been six months since she started working, so her boss decided to give her a free day today.
It had been six months since she started working, so her boss had decided to give her a free day today.
Lazily lying on the couch next to her chimney, she thought what she could do for today.
Have a gold star first sentence I wouldn't change
Deep in thoughts, she didnt even noticed when her daughter, Dinky, came back home after the school has ended.
She was so deep in thought that she didn't even notice that her daughter Dinky had come back home after school.
Little filly had slowly approached her mom upon the sofa, and with a wide grin on her face, she started to tickle her mother.
I think you need a proof reader!
Will put it on "read later"