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    • Silent Ponyville: Inferno
      When Applejack returns home from Canterlot, she finds the town deserted and covered in a thick fog.

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    Written with permission form Jake-Heritagu.

    Applejack returns from Canterlot after having gone there to raise money to help rebuild Ponyville after a fire rages through the town. Upon returning home, she finds the town abandoned and covered in a thick fog, and ventured into town.

    This is my first fanfiction, so any feedback would be greatly appreciated.

    First Published
    18th Apr 2012
    Last Modified
    21st Mar 2013

    Comments ( 10 )

    #1 · Chapter 1 · 57w, 2d ago · · ·
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    This is very good! I can't wait to see where it goes, props to you for your first story. :pinkiehappy:

    #2 · Chapter 1 · 57w, 21h ago · · ·
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    Very different from the mind delve way, but leaves plot holes. How will she get the device that lets her know when creatures are near? Silent Hill and Ponyville are always foggy and something always happens to the protagonist that makes them black out. For example the mind delve spell or a car crash(from the movie). When they wake up there either in a puzzle room or outside and notice that all of a sudden it got really foggy. But so far so good. I'll wait for more chapters before I do or do not give you my thumbs.

    P.S. Love the :ajsmug:x:duck:

    #3 · Chapter 1 · 57w, 21h ago · · ·
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    >>469940

    Thanks! Feels good to know my first attempt is good. :ajsmug:

    >>473509

    Thanks! I decided to go with a more SH2/3 route for the beginning, with her just walking into Silent Ponyville, instead of waking up after an accident, like in SH1 and Downpour, and don't worry, the broken radio will make its appearance soon. And I'm glad you like it so far, hopefully the upcoming chapters will be just as good or better. :pinkiehappy:

    #4 · Chapter 1 · 57w, 11h ago · · ·
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    UPDATE

    did some minor editing to chapter 1

    #5 · Chapter 1 · 53w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Hmmm it seems you stole my idea....I WANT IT BACK!!!

    #6 · Chapter 1 · 49w, 4d ago · · ·
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    #7 · Chapter 1 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>728943

    Hi, sorry I haven't been able to update in awhile. I've just been really busy with school recently, and haven't been able to work on it for a long time. I'll be starting work again soon, so I will hopefully have another chapter up within a few weeks. Sorry for the delay, I really am.

    #8 · Chapter 1 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>742787

    It's fine I just wanted to know is all.  Im sure we all have experienced reading a great story only for it to die permanently.  Bad feel that is.:raritydespair:

    #9 · Chapter 1 · 5w, 6d ago · · ·
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    I am starting to like this story!! MUST READ MORE!!

    #10 · Chapter 2 · 4w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Just a quick update: I'm about a third of the way done with chapter 3, been busy this past month with trying to keep my grades up and maintain my 3.3 GPA. I have 2 lab finals this week, and class finals in a few weeks, so progress will be a bit on the slow side until finals are done. I can promise that the chapter will be up before June, thanks for you patience, all :twilightsheepish:

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