Pretty interesting....... I'll track it.

Looks promising. I'll track it.

Holy shit that cover art is badass. I'll give you a thumb just for that! I'll read the story later.

nice concept i haven't heard of before, tracking.

Beautifully written Star Swirl has a fantastic prattling humor about him that paints him in the wonderful light of a favorite grandfather or something of the like. Luna's personality is spot on from the Luna Eclipsed episode, very well captured! Favorited and tracked, I have a very good feeling this story will be one of my favorites.

Looks very promissing! I will be tracking this piece of litterature :)

Cheers!

Kyor

Art by Ziom05 @ http://fav.me/d4w9abd

Oh my God that cover art is AWESOME!!! Where'd you get it?

In other news, great story, I look forward to more

Interesting concept and awesome cover art.

Tracking.

this is an amazing story so far it needs more though. this is one of the best fics out there so far.

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Well thank you, I hope I get a lot of views and reviews... nothing to do with me, I just like to see people enjoy themselves

looks like discord hasn't met Luna yet, and if he has just didn't name her here. if my first idea is correct this dun b good

>>471346471346 He and Luna have a strained relationship

>>471464471464

ooh this sounds even more fun, continue good sir or m'aam

well now we know where twlight gets it from i guess...

>>472709472709 Was that too lame a joke?

>>472726472726

Not lame just kind of Nerdy, but it fits Celestia (at least my idea of her) pretty snugly. Endless life, no friends, endless paperwork, she'd have to learn to not mind paperwork to survive.

>>473225473225 She wasn't always alone... which is what this story will be ALL about.

i like how the story is unfolding slowly and how discord actually is part of the meeting amazes me. this is one story that needs to be finished thanks overlord-flinx for making it and i like how you put a little bit of twilight sparkle in celestia

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i meant relatively friendless, she IS the princess after all, and fear does not a friend make, i also don't count Luna because she's family.

As Discord talks to the statue of him,

"...granite, a little hard-headed..." icwhatudidthar...

Interesting portrayal of Discord! Will be watching for more...

Frostwyrm

hey do you think you might finish this story up. Because it can't end here you are just starting to unveil everything so keep going! plz.

Oh gosh I want to favorite this but it hasn't been updated in half a year.  What is the deal here?

>>13169841316984 Very few were interested... So I put it on hold until my birthday.

I love how beautiful the story is and i have been waiting for it to be updated. I don't understand how people are not interested with the origins of these great characters and the best villain ever (Discord).

wait sorry used the wrong pony cry

an.. an update

Wow! Writers coming back from the abyss, how interesting

as the other three i have nothing to be mad about just that fact that this story keeps gripping me and i can't get away from it. in short

THANK YOU FOR STARTING THIS STORY BACK UP

so, is Equestria really a diarchy? Luna seems to regard her sister as her 'senpai' and not really as a sibling...or she's just being weird because she was woken up..

>>20624332062433 It is. It is just that in this time span, Luna regards her sister with pure, unquestioned loyalty and devotion.

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Elements of The Past

Grammar score out of 10: 9 spotted some but no many.

Pros:  An interesting look into the past of Equestria.  A good plot line that keeps you guessing.  Good depiction of Celestia.

Cons:  Luna seems to be off for me, first off it looks like she's in the form she was in during season 2-3, not the pilot when she was smaller and a lighter blue.  I have a hard time believing Chrysalis as the element of generosity.  Discord isn't as chaotic as he maybe should be.

Notes Section:  You took a bold step in going into Equestria's past.  Hopefully the cons I pointed out with Discord and Chrysalis will be answered in time.  Sadly the show doesn't delve much into the past leaving any stories that focus on the past a total crap shoot.  That being said the story is enjoyable and I do look foward to reading more.

Enjoy your review!  Please help me out by looking at my story:

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/82632/fallen-princess

>>21930252193025 A fair point you raise on Discord, Chrysalis, and Luna. I could explain them all, but the two former will be explained in story. Luna on the other hand I explained in "Price of Power". The form she was in at the start of Season 1 I refer to as 'de-powered' form.

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Ah, gotcha, perhaps I shoulda rest that first.  Carry on

I like Star Swirl, something about him just seems very amusing to me, and I have a feeling this story will take a much darker path, with Gods they always rely on mortals to takes care of the tasks, poor Mane Six But this is of the past, I wish to know of the eons of time where the Gods and a legendary wizard have dwelled

I bucking love Discord, the God of Chaos and Disharmony is my second favorite villian, you done a very great job with his creation in this story, loved it,

The Goddess of the Sun, even she has tough moments, I am still not sure if the Gods created the jewels that could even defeat other Gods themselves or if they had found them....or were given them....hmmmm Poor Celestia

And then the four Gods fought, killed Star Swirl and forgot about the elements....or sent them away Why are Gods so prediticalbe (spelled that wrong) at least I think that's what might happen, and the Chrysalis, Goddess of Illusions and Trickery, very bad ass and I always had much respect for Philomeena

Ahhhh.....shit This is good that they got the five but I got a bad feeling about it. I think you meant before hoof or on the other hoof rather then hand. And I believe you are to caplize the e in Elements of Loyalty or something of the same Can't wait for more