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TheMessenger


Amateur fanfic writer and reader. Sometimes I get dreams, dreams of ponies, and wish that someone would write a story based off them. So why not me?

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Rainbow Dash does not have a crush on Soarin'. Sure, she thinks he's a pretty cool stallion, being a Wonderbolt and being an awesome flyer and all. Sure, maybe she catches herself admiring those powerful wings of his and maybe even imagining what it'd feel like to have them rub against her own. Sure, she can't help but try to take a peek at that toned, muscular flank of his, but come on, who hasn't? That doesn't mean she has a crush on the guy.

Rainbow's going to have a harder time deny all that now that she's gone and declared that she can make a pie better tasting than Applejack's, knowing perfectly well of Soarin's love for pie. The fastest way to a stallion's heart is through his stomach, after all. Too bad Rainbow Dash's awesomeness doesn't apply to the kitchen.

With only a week before the big bake sale, Rainbow Dash must learn all she can from an unexpected source. Can Spike help her impress her not-crush, or will the two of them discover something else on their journey to make the perfect pie?

Chapters (8)
Comments ( 75 )

I haven't even read this yet and I already know this will be nice!

Gem

This seems like it'll go places, faved!

Keeping an eye on this one! :twilightsheepish:

"Stupid stupid stupid stupid..." "...stupid stupid stupid..." you might want to add a 'moron' to that.

Is this SoarinDash or SpikeDash, plz make it a soarindash. there are not too many good ones like that out there:fluttershysad::raritycry::fluttershysad:

Comment posted by trapcity deleted Aug 29th, 2014

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Don't give me that look:ajbemused:. If you ask me, there are far more good SoarinDash fics than SpikeDash.

4924155 eh but they end in clop. but never mind idc, its just that im not a great fan of spike dash. its weird. are u muslims, cuz of the messegner and the noon?

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Funny enough, no. My current avatar is actually is an Arabic symbol for N, short for Nazarene, which has been used by Islamic militant extremists to denote locations harboring Christians.

4924385 lol
but do u ever think u make a soarindash. i feel this along with a couple others, could make the top three soarindash stories

Spike might as well have been wearing a toque, seriously...

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Well, there are far more SoarinDash fics than SpikeDash fics, so naturally there are also more good SoarinDash stories than SpikeDash stories. It's proportions, bra.
And being as much of a fan of SpikeDash as I am, I'm rooting for the little guy.

Twilight nodded. "Pinkie Pie Swear?" she asked, raising her hoof to her eye.
"And risk Pinkie somehow finding out? No way," Rainbow said. "Just...let's just get this over with."

Awesome.:rainbowlaugh:

"Oh come on," Rainbow said, tearing the book away. "Here, I got this. How hard can following a few instructions be anyways?"

Oh no.

Oh, this is turning out to be a lot of fun. Keep it up.:moustache:

Sweetie Belle's cooking is way worse that Rainbow.

Love it. This fic has everything I want.

But man... you've left the pairing sort of ambiguous. I see a few hints of SpikeDash, and that's what I hope you'll go with.
I'm only worried because this hasn't been added to either the SoarinDash or SpikeDash groups, suggesting that you're still pondering the outcome...

... or maybe I'm reading too much into it.

Carry on, my good man :rainbowlaugh:

I counted about three conjugation fails. You left some past tense verbs in the present tense. Which is funny, because there's also a past tense name in here!

Twilight Sparkled giggled.

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If you could point out the rest, that would be greatly appreciated.

Heh, Spike's gonna have to draw a Hydra off from the town, while trying to save those two idiots, in the middle of a bog. He'll need a bath now!

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Calming down, the pegasus step inside.

sweet bread coated with whip cream

sugary foods and books and Twilight and the new castle that's looks a lot like a tree

"Hey, my mane color's total natural!"

Yeah, gonna be sellin' my [the] best bite-sized apple fritters you've ever tasted there.

"Sure, sure," Granny Smithsaid,

My pappy didn't think me bein' around a stallion my ages

"Didn't see hear you come in."

"You've never shown any want before."

Not sure about this one. Is "want" used as an synonym for "interest"?

"Just be care, okay."

Whoa, man. Conjugation and punctuation. :pinkiegasp:

She and the stallion she had flown into (or had flown into her) both grunted in surprise and shock as the two pummeled down onto the soft cushioning clouds.

You mean "plummeted".

Original concept, writing that well-balances comedy and character, love for the much-abused Spike...

Yep, I'm sold.:eeyup:

"Yep, I'm a mare of many talents. Bet I could make a pie twenty times better than Applejack's in ten seconds flat."

Kudos for rewording it, but the whole "20% cooler in ten seconds flat" thing is one of the most tired tropes in pony fiction. This story is starting of very well, and I'm eager to keep reading, but something like that in the first chapter has the possibility to turn other readers off. Might wanna change it. :ajsmug:

I'll just put Spike in a dark room with a painfully bright lamp and a bowl of gems and make him confess later."

:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

Rainbow Dash came to a sudden stop, launching her passenger into the display table exhibiting a pyramid of milk bottles.

:derpytongue2: - And the Rainbow-maned pegasus wins this gold 'favorite' plushie-star! Even though most contestants use baseballs, we don't have anything in the rules prohibiting young dragons!

:rainbowhuh: - Since when is a carnival game part of the market?

Spike took out the list. "Milk," he read. "Diary's at the red tent over there, and we can get some butter too. But--"

Later that day... a certain mare writes about her Dairy store

Dear Diary, Today, my dairy store made a few thousand bits. However, I've had to pay 300 bits to change my sign. It was misprinted to read 'Diary' instead of 'Dairy' Time to sleep! 'til later Diary Thought of the day: Creative meta jokes about spelling issues are hard to set up well.

"I think you're cutting off my blood flow."

I find that sentence funny for some odd reason. :rainbowlaugh:

"The brown tent with blue stripes on your right," described Spike.

How would he know that it's not a blue tent with brown strips? :trollestia:

eh Spike?

That reminded me of this:

'I can't shop on days that start with the letter T, it's a medical condition'

:unsuresweetie:

"Hey, teedayitus is total legit," retorted Rainbow.

i.imgur.com/GtYMfvk.png?1

Spike took out the list. "Milk," he read. "Diary's at the red tent over there, and we can get some butter too. But--"

*Dairy
:pinkiesmile:

Great chapter as usual! Can't wait for moreeeeeee :rainbowkiss:

Rum by me again why Spike is agreeing to help Dash when she's just being this much of a dismissive jerk.

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Because regardless of her attitude, Rainbow Dash is still a friend, and Spike's not the kind of dragon who'd let a friend get in trouble when he could help.

Still, I'll try to ease off on Rainbow's jerkiness.

5159307 Bad excuse. There are limits for everything, including patience with "friends" such as she is being right now. That kind of "friend" is the one you dump behind you and don't look back.

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We've seen that kind of behavior in the show. I'm not entire sure how I've written Rainbow is really any different from how the ponies treat Spike in canon.

Well, for me this story is good enough. Keep it togheter!!:twilightsmile:

5155824 YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

5193928 Do you know who I am?:trixieshiftright:

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HOW DID YOU FIND ME?! :trollestia:

5197123 Didn't I tell you? I'm a professional stalker.

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ME TOO! :trollestia: (that emoticon goes with literally every sentence)


seriously, how did you find me?

5197293 Idk I just happened to see your pony icon and yeah.

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Dem stalking skills tho. *claps vigorously*

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