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Dear Princess Luna
As I recounted in my previous letter to you, I have for some time now been travelling through the Desert lying in between Equestria and Arcadia in search for old abandoned Gryphon encampments in order to research their culture and history, for the impending signing of the peace treaty.
I am writing this letter to you this evening, to tell you that we have discovered one of these campsites earlier today and have set up camp nearby.
We have not yet begun our actual research work, but a preliminary look at the remains of the camp and the items left behind support the theory of a nomadic lifestyle, despite the surprisingly large size of the abandoned campsite. Perhaps three or more groups had crossed each others paths and camped together before parting ways again.
There’s quite a lot of distinctively Gryphonian artifacts in the abandoned camp, as well as remains of wooden mechanical structures that are too damaged to guess at their function without much closer inspection.
I believe we may have found an encampment that alone should provide us with more than enough knowledge about their culture and history. I go to rest now that I may have a clear mind for the work ahead of me.
Your faithful student
Dusty Dunes
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Alright, alright already... I'm going... sheesh...
Image: http://i41.photobucket.com/albums/e261/CFriis/16171675.jpgI think you der'd that one a bit.
you troll....
it is your story...
it may be humans or, camels.......
but if it where human they would travel everywhere not just in the desert, camels.
but anyway, this is some of humans fun stuff to mess with
Metamaterial
neodymium magnet(got one at school, it is fun to play with :D)
and of course cane swords
This is why I loved technology: if you used it right, it could give you power and privacy.
I don't see what all the complaints are about. It might, perhaps, have worked better at the end of a chapter rather than as an entirely separate one, but it's the fairly standard "this is a plot thread that will eventually become relevant" device. Either that or a "fleshing out the universe" one.
It really doesn't matter how he got there, all that matters is that he's there... so I leave it as a mystery for the readers to guess at.
I could have put it at the interlude letter at the end of Chapter 5, but I chose not to because of reasons that I will not reveal yet.
Those are some interesting guesses you come with there, care to tell me how you came to think of them?
*evil grin*
Prediction
1. twilight will get angry and "Unstable"
2. dash will get in truble.
3/0. dude you got viking blood! use it! 
4. ***********************
5. HE will go assassins creed to steal back most of his stuff!
6. liar paradox.
btw Luna got a pet! yay, i can feel that luna's "pet" will work with the human in the future..........
http://browse.deviantart.com/?qh=§ion=&q=satw+meal#/d4alsl0
I'm loving this story very much!
The language barrier, a undeniable eventuality that occurs whenever 2 cultures clash, makes it even more challenging for our protagonist - and more fun to read! You're doing superb job with gestural communication. Ha ha! I loved it when the dude had to sample his own blood with Fluttershy almost fainting! 
As to the interlude, I completely understand it. "Meanwhile, during an archeological expedition in the desert..." One serving of Gryphon culture coming up! 
I eagerly await more of your work.
(The cover art will be made relavent)
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on a totally unrelated topic as that seams to be the theme of these comments I wear my sunglasses at night.
Actually no... the desert environment in his dreams are from the game called Journey, while the desert Dusty Dunes and her team is in is the one between Equestria and Arcadia... so two different deserts. I'll be sure to try and make this clearer in the future.
Thanks... I hope it continues that way.
Muahahahahahahahah!
Sorry, there are going to be updates in the form of interludes (more letters to Princess Luna).
I wonder who helped him too, well actually I don't, I know who helped him... it was Derpy Hooves.
Why's everypony so mad? It's labled as an interlude. While yes I would have been much more pleased with more science and stuff, I'd imagine that this works its way into the story somehow eventually. If not, oh well. That's just the style of writing we're reading I guess.
People are mad about the interlude? I got no such vibe from any of the comments. And yes, it will work it's way into the story in a really neat way.
I want to make a little thought experiment with this fanfic and not just make it "What happens if a human appears in Equestria?" but "What might the socio-political climate be, in a world where the rulers of a single nation control the sun and moon? And what could happen if a human with knowledge of advanced technology gets dumped into the middle of it? What are the cultures of some of the other species in the world likely to be like compared to the one in Equestria? And how might the differences in culture affect the socio-political climate?" This all of course sounds very boring, but I'm going to try to make it entertaining and exciting for all of you.
I know! Ever since I read Arrow 18 I've fallen in love with the idea of a language barrier as a plot device in HiE fics.
Yes! Yes you do... it is so very much worth the money it costs on PSN.
If there is something in particular that confuses you, I'd love to hear it... there's a good chance I haven't been perfectly clear about something and could do well to revise my writing somewhere. Feedback is always appreciated.
Thank you kindly... I'm certainly looking forward to putting out the next chapter... a little look into the mind of our dear Rainbow Dash.
this story is awesome and you really did a good job in writing this,
everything up till now have been pretty normal, he gets transported there, he gets captured, and they try to learn what he is etc.
the language difference in another aspect i like, i think its more fun when there's some linguistic barrier in the designing, i was expecting this to continiue like most HiEs do where he gains there stust movies in to ponyville etc.
but i like that you dident do that its so dune and him braking (getting freed) out and now setts out on a jurnye to explore the land just semas so much more entertaining, Celestia/Luna will probobley send out someone to try to hunt him down and whit this "peace treaty signing" comign up i wonder if he's will involuntarily make political tensions rise when the greffins know of him.
only think so far i think is a bit sad is that Luna is not tagged in this, Luna is awesome and its sad hes not in this, (but you might add tags later how knows)
but to make up for that we have Gilda and Chrysalis, Gilda i pretty cool but nothing too special, but Chrysalis on the other hand is awesome best villain ever and easily on my top 5 Character list.
so it will be very fun to see where you take this and wath role she will play in it, i hope the human (which name i cant remember
) will join up whit her in someway that whod be quite the epic plot twist.
Anyways grate story Cordovan Splotch job well dune
Human = war
Human = Madness
Human = paradox = Evil and good is just words = Grim Reaper = War
Madness is not chaos!
:D
Oh i hope there will be a war.
Just think about all the stuff they can get from his head alone!
BUT WAIT, he think they are aliens!
So "gray alien style"
Nide de madness
9th lord of madness
>>630126 "What might the socio-political climate be, in a world where the rulers of a single nation control the sun and moon? And what could happen if a human with knowledge of advanced technology gets dumped into the middle of it? What are the cultures of some of the other species in the world likely to be like compared to the one in Equestria? And how might the differences in culture affect the socio-political climate?"
Thank you very much for reading and liking my story so far.
You are however wrong about one thing, Chrysalis is not the best villain ever, that title goes to Nightmare Moon. Chrysalis does take up a comfortable second place though.
The human will certainly be interacting with Chrysalis quite a bit in the story, but not for quite a while yet.
Yes... as with all denizens of the internets, there is quite a lot of stuff in his head.
Yeah... now I just hope I can live up to all that tripe I just spouted.
>>630780 well that's good news, i hope they end up being friends/allies or at worst have a indifferent view each other.
As for NMM being best villain if you don't mind me asking, why?
I know nothing you say will change my opinion on this and i know nothing i say will change yours and im not trying to, im just curious as to why you see her as best villain?
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Nightmare Moon is the best villain because she has the most interesting backstory and a motivation that most people can relate to. She felt neglected and unloved compared to her sister and jealousy took her over. If the populace would not love her and appreciate the work she did for them, she would force them to do so
Chrysalis is interesting too, the Changelings basically being a sort of mix between a virus and a parasite, multiplying by feeding off of their victims until they turn into one of them. Leaving no way for them to peacefully co-exist with the other species of Equestria and the world around it.
Discord is basically just a vandal with god-like powers, he's pretty much just the person throwing rocks through store windows and painting penises on your front door... just because he feels like it.
He didn't press the button for orange soda though.
Rainbow Dash did not in fact knock out the human in this fic, she did hold him down while Soarin did the knocking out though.
I do read your story, but I'm not quite sure what you're talking about when you mention a reference to it.
Anyways... you'll know why Rainbow Dash was upset soon enough.
Updates might come a bit slowly for the next couple of weeks as I need to do some heavy editing of my first chapters.
The fic as it is now was turned down by EqD's pre-readers, with good reasons. So while I write more chapters I will also be redoing the first ones.
Thank you however for your enthusiasm. I am very glad you are enjoying the story so far.
Thank you, I'll take care of that one soon.
There are plenty of other errors though, I got rejected from EqD because of comma errors, its-it's errors, bad formatting and my writing at times being unclear. So I'm spending some time going over everything I've written so far, reworking the things I know how to before questing forth to the lands of Ponychan for some skilled grammarturgist's aid.
I'll mostly be needing help with the commas and formatting, with some work I should be able to fix the rest of it myself.
You're right... the ponies were way to hostile for the situation at hoof, and I will be addressing that issue when I rewrite the story as it is so far.
Other things I will be reworking is how close Rainbow Dash gets to the human before his escape.
In short, I have been made aware of a few different issues, and I am planning to address most of them.
The theft of a few pens will be staying though, as there was hesitation. I just didn't make a huge internalized existential discussion/crisis out of it. It's basically a trifle, and will be treated as such.
Ah, so nice to know I'm not alone in wondering about this issue.
He's been in that facility for over a week by now, the battery is dead anyway.
>>1276891 Nothing concrete... I started school again this month, and as soon as I get into the rythm of it I'll probably be writing bits and pieces whenever I get in a class of stuff I already know. There'll be plenty of that, since the Multimedia Design and Web Development educations are pretty alike in the beginning.
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