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  • 17w, 6d

    I wrote this blog before actually returning to the site. (It is rather odd to write in the past tense about a future event, heh, this must be what a Time Lord feels like all the time. No wonder the Doctor is so weird.) Chances are I will feel the same way I do now about the Fandom if or when I return, so pretty much all of this still applies... to the future. Later future edit: Yes, I do feel the same way. In fact, my conviction and resolve have only hardened over the course of the last fifteen weeks that I was away.

            I mentioned in my hiatus post that I did not know if I was coming back, that I was decidedly unhappy with the community on Fimfiction and the Fandom in general. The time has now come, for I have finally managed to articulate what displeases me, for you—the few who bother to read what I write—to know why.

    The short and long of it is that this community no longer serves its original purpose. Fimfiction, when it first appeared, was a site for sharing any and all stories for MLP: FIM in an an environment of like-minded readers and writers. Ultimately, the purpose of a community of like-minded people is to improve on itself. People come together to share ideas and work in order to synthesize those ideas and works into new things. This is commonly referred to as innovation and is the most powerful tool humans have. We would not be where we are today if we did not have it. Now, at the beginning of the site, things weren't very streamlined or elegant, but it was at least a good place to go discuss, share, and improve fanfiction. The ancient Romans called such a place a forum. There have always been users on the site who weren't particularly interested in improving anything, just for having fun, sometimes at the expense of others who were serious, but such is the norm. As time has gone by, however, the attitude, atmosphere and overall vibe of the site has changed from one of open, harmless fun to something sinister, closed-minded, and harmful. Before anybody jumps on the argument that my perception has changed as I became more familiar with the users and their antics, let me point you to the Featured Box.

            That box has not changed remarkably in terms of programming; it features what is popular based on an algorithm that factors the number of views against the story's total lifetime. This might have been tweaked and polished a little bit over time, but it functions the same no matter the optimizations. When the site was young and small, a bit awkward but nonetheless vibrant, the featured box contained stories that one would find quite delightful perhaps about 90% of the time. They were stories that thought deeply about the characters we have come to know and love, on top of introducing whole new casts as deep as the first to populate Equestria, a world of a thousand facets. Meaningful and useful conversation and debate was a regular occurrence in the comments section and there was no restriction on images or the need for an upvote system to regulate it. More users appeared, more stories were posted and, at first, everything was very exciting, but then something changed. The stories featured in the box started to look the same, for only a few writers on the site could get into it due to the several authors with large followings who read every story their favorite author could come up with. Normally, there isn't a problem with this, but unfortunately fame has this tendency to promote drudgery. One or two authors even took it upon themselves to prove how broken the algorithm was by posting stories that were not even close to the quality of work they had once made, deliberately, and still were featured for weeks on end. This brought a change to the box where “heat” was applied and stories had a specific half-life in the box, but this just allowed for a higher volume of such popularity-seeking stories to attain the spotlight.

            It may sound cynical, but the truth is that when a medium becomes mainstream, what and who made it good often makes newcomers look for a way to differentiate. Two paths present themselves to the medium and the community creating it: sensationalism or innovation. The easier path is to sensationalize; innovation is a lot of work, after all, and requires a certain level of talent that many do not have. Sensationalism, as I am using it here, refers to the practice of making something arousing "by lurid details, a quick, intense, and usually superficial interest, curiosity, or emotional reaction" (as defined in Merriam-Webster's Collegiate Dictionary, 11th ed.). A good example included with that definition is a tabloid newspaper, you know the ones; they sit in the racks at the cashier's aisles in supermarkets with loud, bright covers—often featuring gregarious cleavage of one sort or another—and large type titles claiming so-and-so broke up with what's-his-face because that-one-guy might have gotten so-and-so pregnant oooo. Such differentiation is based on being scandalous, combatative, loud and edgy. A hallmark of the tabloid is the complete lack of substantial content, whether it be based on fact, hearsay or just random stuff.  There was a whole episode of the show devoted to the sorts of things found in sensational papers and how such things come about. I mean, seriously, if anybody is actually paying attention to the show, characters, stories and what they say, how is it that they can't see that the fandom has fallen into the same situation as the CMC during that episode?

            The fandom has entered a state of duality. Bronies see themselves as they once were, a community that challenged the accepted social norms of a severely gender-segregated society, champions of tolerance and acceptance. Perhaps there are many who still are this way,  but based on the general attitude of the fandom and the users on Fimfiction, those Bronies are few and far between. A vast majority of the stories featured became more and more outlandish and “edgy” treating themes that merely bespoke the changing attitude of the fandom. The authors concern themselves with tales regarding controversial topics like sexuality, political agendas and religion—many times featuring some form of wish fulfillment—all of which are not in and of themselves "bad," but they are presented in a shallow, aggravated way that only seems to display the mindset of a militant. For some reason I cannot fathom, this has become acceptable to a majority of the users on the site. Don’t try to say it isn’t so, the feature box has been flooded with such stories. It seems to me that the fandom has been in the mode of "us or them" for so long that the mantra is no longer "love and tolerate" but now "holier than thou/haters gonna hate." Being part of the community has become a status symbol, a means to deviate for the sake of rebellion. The topics treated by these 'sensational' authors are simply attention-seeking outcries with no purpose other than to satisfy a craving. I have ranted before about "shipping" and why it is always bad. "Shipping" characters accomplishes nothing because it exists for the arbitrary reason of "because I can." Writing about a topic for the sake of the thing is not how one achieves depth. No thought is invested in such an act beyond the point of doing it. There's no point to the narrative, no direction, no movement, growth or change. The stories that are now being produced by an enormous number of authors on the site are suffering from the “quantity over quality” paradigm. The site is no longer a forum for improvement or discussion; it has become an arena for popularity contests. The name of the game is to write as many over-the-top edgy, sloppy and audience-pandering “stories” as possible for that golden shot at the feature box. Too many users have either lowered their standards or never had high expectations to begin with. Just as with mainstream media and Hollywood, majority rules for the bottom dollar, but in our case the currency is hits. There have been others who saw what I see and they tried to do something about it. They are what we call “critics” they offer their opinions and sometimes advice in order to serve the ends of improvement, but far too often, an author will not accept criticism of any sort.

            I understand that many of these authors are amateurs, that we are not here to be professionals, but this is not an excuse to be whiney two-year-olds. When posting something on a public forum for others to see, you knowingly or not agree to the consequence of attracting criticism. It is what we do as people. We analyse everything all the time to make decisions about life. It is ingrained in us, an essential part of our very being. When somebody takes the time to think about something an author wrote, the author is only hurting himself if he dismisses it without consideration. On the flipside, there are those who are only commenting to troll. The random comments that say nothing specific about anything can be safely ignored, in my opinion, but far too many authors fall into the trap. Writing, as I have said before, is terrifyingly personal. It is natural to feel protective of a piece of writing, but there are absolutely no grounds on which to stand that support being belligerent or condescending to concerted review.

            In the end, I, Laichonious, have been burned far too often from exposing my thoughts or explanations to the caustic environment that Fimfiction has become. I want no part in this game, because everyone loses in the long run. I will keep my promises and write what I have planned, but I will not create any new stories for MLP. I will not be participating in the community beyond the occasional chapter post. This will be my last blog. From this time onward, you will hear no more from me. I will read comments of substance and consider feedback but it does me little good to respond to anything. There are bigger and better things I can use my time on, such as my own work, than getting tangled up in internet dramas and disputing asinine rhetoric with fanatics. There was so much promise here, but it has been squandered and swept away. All I can say is that I am disappointed. Severely disappointed.

    I dust my hooves of thee, Fimfiction.

    --Laichonious the Grey

    P.S. Here is a revised list of which stories will be completed. I may release the prewriting content for the stories that were cancelled at a later time.

    1. The Delightful Dragon of Ep

    2. Magical Wizard Brony Detectives

    3. Legend of the Tree

    4. Legend of the Moon

    5. Legend of the Sun

    6. Beyond Us -- CANCELLED

    7. Point of No Return -- CANCELLED

    8. Wizard at Large -- probably not, but mostly CANCELLED

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  • 35w, 4d
    A Heinous Hiatus: Goodbye for Now

    After some deep metathought and an examination of some records I have been keeping about various things and stuff (this is all very technical, I would have you know), I have decided to put everything on hiatus until the weather can figure out what season it wants to be.

    That may seem like an arbitrary reason, but its means more than you think. With the weather all out of whack, my hands have not been on their best behavior. Wild weather aside, my Raposa was missing for a week as she changed residences and that wasn't a fun experience either. I have noticed that I do the most writing when I sleep almost like a normal person because I then have time to dream about the stories and characters I'm writing about. I have said many times that I'm more like a reporter or a tour guide in relation to these stories and adventures, learning and experiencing the story just like any of you, the readers; I'm just a few steps ahead of the rest of you. However, with my sleep as fragmented as it is, I don't have the opportunity to see the events unfold and therefore cannot write about them. I could force myself to write about it but it wouldn't be the same and the quality would be atrocious.

    I don't know if a standing weather pattern will bring any lasting relief, but as things are, I can't go on like this for much longer and expect to be sane at the end of the semester. Hopefully, taking a step back, getting some rest, and fixing my sleeping patterns will bring me back to a more productive state. If worst comes to worst, I won't improve and it may not be until I'm set up in Brasil with Raposa by my side before I can start producing anything worth reading.

    So, for the time being, adieu, FIM Fiction.

    --Laichonoius the Grey

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  • 36w, 6d
    The Sky, That's What

    As per my custom, I have remained quite silent in the wake of my most recent rant. But that doesn't mean that I have been idle. While valiantly going about my business in defiance of the tyranny of pain that  my hands inflict on me daily, I have been tutoring on writing, writing on tutoring, coming up with silly NaNoWriMo-ready stems and generating more lore for Yeodoor. I have also begun work on consolidating, unifying and compiling all the material I have written about Sebbian magic (the magic the ponies and other races use). I will first create a grimoire of pony magic, specifically the magic of the unicorns and alicorns. I already have a working outline and am now in the stage of conceptualizing its layout. This is a book that actually exists with in the world, not just another resource for me to aid in continuity between my stories. It is a pivotal tome, a singular work, that has been the mainstay of magical learning since Starswirl's time. Here's a little description of it that I wrote up:

    Nur Grimmor zut Fernuem Kemamae

    “The Grimoire of Ancient Knowledge”

        It is a tome of such prodigious size that only two fully compiled volumes exist as a single bound book. One resides in the Canterlot Archives under lock and key as it is the original source volume from which all other reprints are derived. The other, a copy made by Celestia herself, resides in the Royal Academy at Satu Mare. There are rumors that a third copy exists, and that it might be in the custody of a certain librarian in a small town on the plains just east of Canterlot.

        The Fernuem Kemamae, as it is commonly referred, is usually bound in chapters as single books. Some annotated versions are printed in sets based on category, much like a magical encyclopedia, with additions by accomplished mages. As required reading for all students of magic, it has been the single most successful book ever written in Equestria. Over three quarters of the grimoire was written by Starswirl the Bearded many centuries ago and has remained nearly identical to his time. It covers every subject from beginning to work with magic and its fundamental properties, to advanced techniques that begin to delve in to the dangerous realm of magical theory.

        The last few chapters of the grimoire are rarely seen. Some even suspect that the last few pages have not been read by anypony since Starswirl penned them. The complete volumes have a sealed section that may only be opened in the presence of one of the Princesses, the spells inside deemed far too dangerous for the average unicorn.

    This book will be a constant feature of the world, a thing so pervasive, it's like an inside joke turned inside-out. Everypony, whether earth pony, pegasus, donkey, zebra, alpaca, they all know of this book. Many have even read portions of it since Starswirl's fundamental instructions on the nature of magic, and how to approach spellcasting, is largely universal. The grimoire is by no means a main focus in relation to my other projects, but it will be an outlet for me when I have these bouts of writer's block. At the very least, I'll be getting something done, and something more doable than an all-encompassing Wiki of Yeodoor. The grimoire is also going to be an interesting challenge as I am writing it from the perspective of Starswirl the Bearded principally, and from the perspective of several other ponies throughout Equestria's long history.

    My question to you, the friendly stalkers, is if you would be interested in seeing this tome once complete. I plan to take all of the information I gather and create a PDF that is as detailed as I can manage, complete with illustrations and practical instruction. I will only be including the core principles at first, but as time goes by, I might be able to create the other volumes that deal with more advanced portions of Sebbian magic and theory.

    Make you thoughts known in the comments. (also I have this insane dream that I could make a print version, on actual vellum or parchment, wood-bound either a foot tall or two feet tall... or at the very least I could have it printed just for fun)


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  • 38w, 5d
    Things that Happen Every 24 Hours in the Land of Small, Colorful Ponies

    Hello Stalkers,

    A few months ago I had quietly submitted The Delightful Dragon of Ep to the fellows over at Equestria Daily. A week has passed since I received a refusal, albeit the closest I've ever gotten to being accepted. During this week, I have been mulling over the reasons given for rejecting the story, and I sit on the proverbial fence. Essentially, all of the problems are in the first chapter: it's boring, tells you things that you already know, and is full of lavender unicorn syndrome. While I agree that the final point is a problem, one that I have started to rectify, I am having a fundamental disagreement with everything else. The pre-reader's assessment was correct, I'm not contradicting the facts as they stand, but I think that he missed something vitally important to why I wrote the first chapter as I did. Instead, he suggests that I do one of two things, scrap it or rewrite the whole chapter in the style of the following chapters. I will do neither of these things, so I suppose none of my work will ever be featured on Equestria Daily.

    I agree that the very first paragraph is a "solid block of of telling the reader mostly things they already know" but consider how I gave that information. Look at the first paragraph of my story, then look at the first paragraph of L. Frank Baum's original Wonderful Wizard of Oz. The similarities are not a coincidence. Now, before I will accept any "but imitation isn't a good enough reason for being boring" or "you're just being lazy and a wuss 'cuz they denied your fic" altercations, let me point out how the narrator gradually changes over the course of the next few chapters. I like to believe that I am showing my readers what is happening in this strange land and how Rarity thinks of it. I won't get into specifics, but the crux of the story is embedded in that theme of gradual change. It would be nice to say that I'm being terribly clever about all of this, but the truth of the matter is I'm only following professional standards pioneered by far better authors before me. Everything I do is an amalgamation of far too many hours spent reading far too many pages of many different types of stories and authors.

    Which brings me to the meat of my current predicament. I have this overwhelming feeling that it is the collective opinion of this fandom that fanfiction is tantamount to amateur, mediocre writing at best and indecipherable gibberish at worst. I am here to say that this is not the case. There is no reason whatsoever that fanfiction cannot be elevated and written at a professional level while still preserving the creative freedom we enjoy currently. The culture of celebrating the mediocre at the behest of "originality", under the pretense of innovation, that this fandom has historically favored, ultimately led to the arbitrary standards that showcase sites, such as Equestria Daily, have been forced to adopt. Due to the repeated abuse of "creative freedom" we have limited ourselves culturally. Paying homage to a previous author and using that homage as a tool to shape the mood of a story is not tolerated by the "critics" because of how much it resembles laziness. I fear that many good practices are being culled from our fanfiction writers because they are striving to attain the approbation of a group of individuals who have been forced to create a set of unsustainable criterion for judging what is "good" and what is "bad". The budding author's nigh insatiable need for recognition is driving his story, not the vision of the story itself. At this point, we begin to see the dominant trends of cookie-cutter fics, variations on a theme, half-hearted continuations of previously successful stories, and the blatant attempts at shock value by basing entire plots on controversial and edgy topics.

    Am I upset about my story being rejected? Of course I am. However, I don't necessarily fault the pre-reader or the site in general. I am beginning to see a much bigger problem. Attitude is everything and as time goes by, I feel that the attitude of this fandom as well as my own has been changing, and not for the better. While I would love to be able to showcase my work to a greater audience, I can't bring myself to destroy something I have created in order for it to fit a particular mold. The Delightful Dragon of Ep may sit in obscurity for the remainder of my time here. It may only become famous posthumously. But it is no worse fate than any number of other authors with good ideas and better skills. My only solace is in knowing that, at the very least, I did my best.


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  • 40w, 1d
    The Ludicrous Life of Laich

    So. So, so, so, so, so etc. Unfortunately I must report that my experiment has failed. The Delightful Dragon of Ep will no longer be updated every Wednesday because I am a crazy faff. My one class is taking up a disproportionate amount of time as my hands continue to get worse, so I haven't had the time and/or, in many instances, the motivation, to write. Which quite frankly pisses me off. Anyway, with a hundred words here, two hundred there, CH11 of DDE is ever so slowly taking form from my nebulous and intentionally vague outline. I hope to have it done soon. I just have to knuckle down and beat this damn writer's block into tiny, infinitesimal, speckly powder.

    Updates when I can from now on. My deepest apologies for those of you who have been following the story.


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  • ...

It is the summer of 2020. The popular TV show "My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic" has finished its eighth, and what appears to be final, season. In the wake of increasingly violent attacks by an extremist Internet-based terrorist group, the founders of the popular pony site, Equestria Daily, decide enough is enough. Bronies from all over the world have gathered in a small, abandoned industrial park in the run-down outskirts of Chicago to find the culmination of their dreams: Equestria. Through the wonders of science, they flee Earth for a land of magic, mystery and secrets. They will be weighed, they will be measured... will they be found wanting or will their dreams come true?

Story Idea inspired by a chapter in Shipping and Handling by PegasusRescueBrigade.

Cover image is a composite of the original Stargate movie poster and 'Canterlot At Night' by Cosmicunicorn, Source

The Sequel: Magical Wizard Brony Detectives

First Published
16th Apr 2012
Last Modified
4th Nov 2012
#1 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·

By Celestia, eight seasons?! :rainbowlaugh:

We might have holographic ponies by then!

#2 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·

Wow, very good. Original as far as I cam tell. I'm waiting for more. Keep up the good work.


#3 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·

this is a awesome fanfic :twilightsheepish:

#4 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·

This has intrigued me :rainbowlaugh: Keep up the good work, you've earned a thumbs up

#5 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·

Sounds awesome, I'll fav for now and read it later

#6 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·

Dag, you guys are quick! Thanks for all the thumbs! :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

#7 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·

This shall be tracked.

#8 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·

Kinda deserves to go onto the top of the site :rainbowlaugh:

#9 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·

I hope this 8 seasons thingie willactually happen..... Id rather see 8 seasons of Friendship is Magic over a new MLP series which may go back to the SUPPOSEDLY bad quality of gens 1 to 3.5 (I cant know as I didnt watch those ones)

#10 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·


This is too much fun! And to think it just kinda fell out of my head today. You guys are the best. I'll be sure to continue it:pinkiehappy:

you all deserve all of my :moustache: all of it!

#11 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·

>>461975 Just keep on writing brony! It's what we do :rainbowlaugh:

#12 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·


#13 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·

Only eight seasons? That's it? There is bound to be at least 15 . . . and then a reboot.

Hmmm I will read and track this (because I brok my ankle and I need some fics to occupy me)

#14 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·

Inb4 Brony international guard reference.

I like the idea of a crusade thing going on, that was a very lucrative time for history in the wold of fiction and whatnot (see: Templars) but the only reason I did not like those times was the stupid amount of people that refused to even lie about their religious nature to survive. Or am I missing the point?

Aherm, idiotic ranting aside I shall read this.

#15 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·

8 seasons must be a thing for writers setting their fics in the future.

#16 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·


Reaction 15 much? :trixieshiftright:

As for the fic, love it. :pinkiehappy: Or, love the idea of it.

I shall read immediately!

#17 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·

You sir have gotten my attention, I like what I see in this story and can't wait for more! :moustache: approves

#18 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·

Give me another chapter.

RIGHT NOW:flutterrage:

FLURRSHY COMMANDS YOU!!:flutterrage::flutterrage:

If thats ok with you that is... :fluttershyouch:

#20 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·

I'm not sure whether to be happy about being able to go to Equestria or to be sad about basically getting banished from Earth by haters. :applejackconfused:

Eh, I'll go with happy.

#21 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·

>>462096 I've been looking for that .gif for a while now. Thank you. As for the story, interesting.

#22 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·

I love it! only the best stories make me shudder, so much is yet to be done and can be done with such a great plot and start to what I Think will be a fabulous story.

#23 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·

I've seen a lot of fics on this site and if this one doesn't make it to the top then we might have a problem. If you need any advice or help just contact any fellow brony.

#24 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·

*modestly sips at a can of root beer*

"The air inside ionized and the distinctive smell of ozone filled the building."

Hurk?!? *spews soda* PPPPPPPPPPPHHTTTTTT!!!

*cough* *cough* OZONE?!? O₃ is a poisonous gas!!


That all said I LOVE THIS!! Great ideas do come in the spur of the moment! Originality is the best policy!

#25 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·

>Post new story

>Say it's a side project until your other story is done, and will continue if it's popular

>New story has over 5x the amount of likes as your other story in an hour


I am intrigued by this concept, and shall be watching this.

EDIT: and featured to boot =P

#26 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·

Well, look at that.

I just happened to be glancing down the front page and noticed something mentioning my fic, Shipping and Handling.

To be perfectly fair, I didn't make up the Portal to Equestria thing, everything I used concerning EQD in chapter 10 is pre-existing "Equestria Daily lore" invented by Seth and Cereal.

Here's Cereal Velocity's actual video from "Equestrian Innovation's Portal to Equestria Project".

Presumably, the portal from that clip got working well enough to send Seth to Equestria before shutting down again.

#27 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·

>>461975 So, are they leaving because they are hated, or is there a real life, violent backlash that forces bronies into hiding? Other than being confused by that, great fiction!

#28 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·

So "Conversion Bureau" meets "Stargate" meets the EqD-Staff? Not oooverly original but I like it. [+1 thumb]

Only thing that makes me wonder: If there is a Anti-Brony-Movement, I'd make sure they never ever, ever, ever, ever find the GATE. Some dead-mans-hand device that destroys the ring, burns out the drives that had the program and the space-time coordinates for equestria and then fillsthe sub-basements with cement. Just to be sure, you know.:twilightsheepish:

A "Goodbye and thanks for all the apples" would have been classy as well.:raritywink:

#29 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·


LOL in the face of Snape, how could I?


Wow, you hit it on the nose there dude. That is the underlying message I guess, don't let go of what is really important and good. To me, that's what this community is all about.


yeah, 8 seasons does seem to be kind of a thing...I rolled with it:pinkiehappy:


I'm with yah. I've thought more about what I wrote, I have to do this sometimes for I write good ideas way faster than I think them, and I would agree that it would be a bittersweet departure. You know you are going to a better place but it sucks to leave everything you know behind.


Will do.

This is an amazing turn out guys. I didn't think this would get so much attention, seeing as how 'bronies go to equestria' is quite the popular strand to go on. I was half expecting "cliched plot is cliched" but got all of this instead. It gives me this warm glowey feeling inside...I like it:pinkiehappy:

#30 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·

Won't deny the fact that this is by far one of the most interesting works I've read. You're doing some grand work.

Good luck on the story, my friend.

#31 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·

I came expecting a half-baked idea.  Congratulations, it's fully baked.  I expect to see more on my desk this time next week. :pinkiehappy:

#32 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·


really?! that's cool, I saw it in your fic first, then again I'm new to the herd, been a brony for only 4 weeks now, so there is a lot of fandom lore and jokes that I don't know yet. Thanks for the info, will credit were it's due


yeah, the facts are muddy, this totally fell out of my head in like three hours so there's bound to be holes in it. There was a violent backlash in which several people were hurt, not killed. I think I will elaborate on that in the next chapter though




it's funny you mention that, I thought about that too, but then I thought; no there might be stragglers. They would want to get as many bronies to the other side as wanted to go. also, ominous foreshadowing?

#33 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·

>>462265 Foreshadowing?...:pinkiegasp: OHGOD! What if an anti-brony group goes into Equestrian IT?

#34 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·

Not sure if trolling or not. I can only assume it is, since it's the only way I can find this humorous.

#35 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·


Who's trolling? me or somepony else? :rainbowlaugh:

#36 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·

Human fanfics are always the best I think! Good work!

#37 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·

:moustache: That is all.  You have earned it.

#38 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·


hmmmm, didn't think of that...I think I meant O2? idk, chemistry is not one of my strong suits...must research this...

#39 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·

>>462409 O2 Is the regular oxygen molecule, which is what we use in respiration. O3, or ozone, is only toxic in large amounts.

I hope that helped! :pinkiehappy:

#40 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·


No you are right, lightning does form ozone gas. I believe that he misunderstood your use of the word "filled". Obviously it did not fill the whole room, just the smell of it. Besides, small amount for a short time the ponies will be fine.

#41 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·


Clearly, neither are the specifics and nuances of the English language. Eh.

Anyways, color me intrigued. If you can up your writing abilities, and keep this going for a long while, consider yourself damned to the tenth circle of hell; that is, my faves list and a review with some criticism.

Good luck~

#42 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·

This is amazing! what if this actually happened in the future? :rainbowhuh:

#43 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·


I don't think its all that surprising for it to get this much attention.

I think one of the things that let it stand out is the uniqueness of the story.

First you got a massive number of bronies, usually a BiE story has only one brony.

Second you have considered the ramifications of the exodus to it's full extent. It can only get more interesting.

Third BNG was a great one shot. and it brought forth a very attractive idea, what would it be like if a ton of bronies just kinda appeared in equestria one day? These bronies have been ponyfied so there is a difference and honestly I really am lookin forward to this. if you are unconvinced then refer to my previous comment above.

#44 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·

We would've gotten farther than 8 seasons!

#45 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·

Man, screw earth! ive always hated how everyone expects you to be the exact same as them, in Equestria i could be who i really am and not fear haters!

#46 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·


You, for the content in the story. I'm not sure if I'm supposed to take all the over the top elements seriously or not, because it comes off as a bunch of wangst to me.

#47 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·


Like they say "Your worst day in Equestria is still better than your best day on Earth"

#48 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·

Hey! Remember to keep a chance to go through this portal for good ol' BronyRanger,  Y'HEAR?

#49 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·


The bubbles in soda are carbon dioxide, (CO2)

Just to clear that confusion up.

#50 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Exodus ·

You know that this is a fiction because by the year 2020 everyone on earth will be a Brony/Pegasister making it so no one would try to get rid of Bronyism in the first place, and their will never be a final season of ponies the ponies are far to good for that. :rainbowdetermined2:

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