Oh hey! I know it isn't a good start but anybody who can offer some constructive criticism please help out ok!?

I just read the first chapter, it's cool. i will read the other latter (because this cahir is giving me pain in the back)

>>248248 OMG THANK YOU THANK YOU~ haha You made my day!

Hmm... Needs the Mage now. She'd totally fit in with the ponies; especially if she was a Witch.

>>256256 Oh you are reading my mind, guess who I'm making the witch hehe

Well shoot, a chapter devoted to building Richter's personality. Sorry guys, no real story advancement this time

Ok, even I dont want to do the character developing chapters, but it has to be done...

I seriously want to get this story out of Elvenguard so I can actually get going with it, but it would be weird to rush the things I want to get in

Editing Time! So you guys don't have to deal with my grammar errors any more!

Whether or not you like it, I think I am getting better. And I AM posting more stuff, dealwithit.jpg

What is this a crossover with?

>>226574226574

I believe this is a crossover with Arad Senki(anime/online game?)

Update soon please? :)