Twilight discovered a secret. A big secret about Celestia, and now is going to confront her...
What is going to happen?
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Oh boy, the grammar Nazis are going to have a field day here
4888815 Yeah, Sorry, maybe I need to find a cleaner
This story is a huge exercise in Dadaism...actually, no, it's a grammatical mess.
No offense meant, but I'm assuming English isn't your first language? Because "cleaner" indicates that (the term usually used is editor.)
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For me is mostly the same, a cleaner or editor, because the history in theory only need to be cleaned or edited to make it a little more understable and take out the gramatical problems.
And yes, is not my first language.
the only thing that was bad is your writing I mean come on
4889529 hmm english not your first language understandable
Hmm... content-wise, it a rather strong story of Celestia the tyrant. However, I’ll be honest with you, there are plenty of recurring issues pertaining to capitalization and punctuation as well as mixed up past and present tenses. If you want, I can look at it and give you some basic tips of how to find and correct these problems yourself
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I know, it was a old thing in my head that I put in here... It could not be much, but in that time I decided to put it.
It's a surprise that someone decided to read it. Thank You.
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No problem, I don’t blame you for that.
Honestly, I see no difference between reading a new and an old story. It’s not like their message would fade away with time, after all. You’re welcome!