Bio? What? I dont know. Am I the only one that thinks that Twilight Sparkle is best pony?
When Nightmare Moon was defeated Luna thought that part of her was gone for ever. But, it wasn't, all these years it has been growing, gaining strength in order to take revenge upon Celestia, The Elements of Harmony, Equestria and most importantly, Luna.
This is my first piece of writing. I am sort of just going with the flow here, I haven't exactly planned it out but hey, why not? I've gone over the stuff several times and I think its okay.
Feedback would be greatly appreciated.
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This is actually really good for a first writing, and I gotta say I'm a sucker "Nightmare Moon Returns" stories! I do have a tip for you, though:
Punctuation when someone is saying something. You do it right sometimes, but only when there's an exclamation mark or question mark. You also need punctuation, which most often comes in the form of a comma. I'll show you a couple of random example.
"Let's go to Sugarcube Corner," Twilight said. (There's a comma between Corner and ")
"I have a bat and I'm not afraid to use it." (There's a period when nothing comes after it, or there's nothing describing how it's being said such as 'Rainbow said' or something like that.)
"I love pie," Pinkie Pie said, "But I also love cake." (If you split the sentence in two, then the next part should have a period.)
I hope that helped a little!
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K, I'll try and get it better from now on. Thanks for reading and posting.
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Noooo problem, always happy to help! This is super awesome, so I wanna make sure it can be super duper awesome too!
If you do need more help with it, or you're not sure or whatever, feel free to ask me for help on just about anything. I'd be happy to lend a hand in any way possible.
i'm waching this its quite intriguing. i wonder what you have cooked up.