I'm am an autistic brony, looking to write fantasy and everyday life novels for my kind. I became a brony when I related well with applejack and twlight, and I love the show.
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And that, fillies and gentlecolts is what a perfectly executed One-Shot is.
Part 1: Setup! (Scene, Problem, etc.)
Part 2: Action! (Love Potions. Chaos ensues!)
Part 3: Turn of Events! (Discord acting for Fluttershy's sake)
Part 4: Punchline! (Celly joins in)
Additionally it had just the right pacing and every emphasised point was spot on.
Fav'd, Like'd, put into 'FlutterCord' and 'All things Discord'
EDIT: Don't take this the wrong way. This was well written and technically flawless. But nothing extraordinary. Just a nice little 'Slice of Live' piece.
5626166 hey, I can live with my paceing a great and excursion being great, though, I u knew anyway to make it better, love to hear it. Otherwise, story goal archived! :D
Almost think this deserves a sad tag. It is kinda heartbreaking.
Could use some polish, there are quite a few odd little mistakes and wordings that could have been smoother. Still, good effort and you have some subtlety too, what with setting up Fluttershy's date with the mention of what she thought of the love poison incident.
All in all, well done.
Pretty decent
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