Dinky would be just fine staying at the house by herself, but instead of leaving her alone and bored, Carrot Top decides to take her on an overnight trip to the great city of Canterlot.
An Applejack/Mayor ship... I hope that doesn't develop much...
This is great! We get show quotes, background pony commentary, and Dinky! I shall watch this, posthaste!
Pretty much any ship can be made to work, but a Mayor/AJ seems too much of a stretch.
Especially after "A Friend in Deed" where we see the Mayor with her husband and daughter during the "Smile" song.
So far this is good.
>>454641454641 Don't worry, it won't.
>>455329455329 Good to know... Otherwise, a very solid start - would love to see more of it in the future... Fav and Like from me...
Have a moustache
If you'll allow me to nitpick a little, "varietly" should be "variety", and "Redeo" should be "Rodeo".
That said, overall I quite like it. A cute little story about background ponies, (I love the background ponies, I feel such kinship with them) specifically my favorite Earth pony and favorite filly! Thumbs up, favorited, and looking forward to more!
>>462380462380 Thank you for your complements and pointing out those typos! They will be corrected.
wonderfully cute and fun to read. faved for sure.
"Carrot Top, as well as Carrot's coltfriend, Written Script, a unicorn stallion with a white coat and dark purple mane."
>>11187331118733 what don't you want???
I can't finish reading this without commenting right here:
YOU USED WRITTEN SCRIPT! Freakishly happy about that! Okay, continue.
Oh man, if you're doing what I think you're doing I LOVE IT AND YOU SHOULD CONTINUE.
OH YES YOU ARE!
As for the ship, it's a crackship if I ever saw one on first look but it sounds like it actually make sense. I'm not against any kind of ship, by the way and I REALLY love this idea you're going with.
>>13762711376271 Looks like I had better overcome this mountain of procrastination and neglect and actually finish this thing, then.
Glad you're enjoying it! That ship between C-Top and Script was a little something that I thought worked well - Good to see I was right.
>>13766251376625 OH well I was talking about Applejack and the Mayor. Written Script and Carrot Top, as background characters, make perfect sense.
I'm not sure how clear this was, but I LOVE that you're doing a story from the show from the background ponies' view. I LOVE those kind.
>>13775351377535 Ah, well, the Mayor/Applejack thing was actually a joke, playing off of the constant bedroom-eyes the Mayor gives AJ in The Last Roundup. Maybe I didn't make that clear enough.
>>13775601377560 It's only the prologue. You have plenty of time to play with the joke, depending on where you're going with this.