Platitudes

nopeeeee

nopeeeee #1 · Aug 4th, 2014 · · ·

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Nice!

gamexpert1990

gamexpert1990 #2 · Aug 4th, 2014 · · ·

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That’s my platitude for you. That’s my easy, stupid answer.

Sometimes, that's the very type of answer some of us might need.

Thank you for writing.

Fervidor

Fervidor #3 · Aug 4th, 2014 · 3 · ·

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It's not bad for what it is. I'm pretty sure unicorn horns grow back, though.

Also, I always wonder why magic seems to be able to do everything except fix stuff like missing or crippled limbs. If nothing else, all it takes is Fluttershy asking Discord nicely and then Rainbow has a brand new wing.

Tom the bomb

Tom the bomb #4 · Aug 5th, 2014 · · ·

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This was amazing. It captures a scope of acceptance and reality that both irks and inspires, but what makes it truly incredible is how well the reader can buy into the characters in such a short amount of words. This is also how I picture RD in similar situations. You crushed it.

Stay frosty!

cleverpun

cleverpun #5 · Aug 5th, 2014 · 2 · ·

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Eh, I like the concept, but the execution left something to be desired. It felt more like a checklist than a story--there's no buildup or pacing, and everything felt rushed and un-detailed. That might have been intentional (show how Rainbow Dash is equally blunt to everyone, including ponies she doesn't know and/or how she doesn't put much value on emotion after everything she has been through), but it doesn't really feel consistent. RD leaps around from being guarded to melancholy to optimistically helpful. Again, that might have been intentional, but even with all the explicit references to her identity crisis and emotional evasion, it doesn't really work for me.

Downvote from me. There's the beginning of a good story here, and with a slower pace and more words it could work well. The explicit reference to and interactions with platitudes in particular fits in with Dash's personality. As-is, however, it feels too rushed to say anything meaningful.

4801032 Oh, that one's easy.

Fervidor

Fervidor #6 · Aug 5th, 2014 · 1 · ·

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4804741

All I'm saying is, there comes a point where I can't suspend my disbelief for this kind of plot. I understand the desire or tell relatable stories that strike an emotional chord in the readers, but sometimes the setting is so fantastical that it just doesn't seem plausible.

Twilight once turned herself and all of her friends into dragonfly fairies. There is a flower that shrunk Applejack down to the size of a kitten and trippled the size of one of Rainbow's wings as a joke. Discord once plucked Rainbow's wings off an put them in a box. And magic is a form of science to them! How can they possibly not have a regeneration spell or some kind of magical prothesis for exactly this kind of problem?

Feo Takahari

Feo Takahari #7 · Aug 5th, 2014 · · ·

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4804741 This is an entirely fair response. I wrote this story really quickly after reading Tough Little Pony--I was pretty much just trying to expel the more toxic aspects of that story. It probably can't compete with stories whose authors worked on them for a really long time.

cleverpun

cleverpun #8 · Aug 6th, 2014 · · ·

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4805726 Eh, the trope doesn't really bother me in and of itself. There's plenty of potential explanations, justifications, and handwaves available to make it internally consistent.

That said, this story doesn't bother to mention any of them, so I can see where you're coming from.

4806202 A short, under-written story mostly used as an idea outlet? I certainly have never written one of those

Crystal Secret

Crystal Secret #9 · Aug 8th, 2014 · · ·

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I kind of just read a story about unicorns losing their horns so when that came up it really hit me. I enjoyed this cute, little read. It isn't much to fuss over but I still think it has heart. So while I may not give it a fave I am giving it a big thumbs up. Well done.