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  • 3w, 4d
    Rockabye Bandy

    I'd like to take a moment to share a song with you. It's a nice song. It's happy. It helps.


    Happy Wednesday.

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  • 9w, 1d
    Bandy Goes to College, Vol. 1

    No, I didn't drink the kool-aid. I've just gone to college! Moving in and starting classes and having those little panic attacks where you don't know whether or not you're throwing your life away over a useless degree have been somewhat taxing, but I've been able to find time to write in between dying on the inside and finding ways to excuse not eating to save money.

    I present an Acreuballian amount of vernacular, all set to the bop on the top stylings of John Coltrane.

    Jazz Lounge

    This will be loosely connected to the cannon of a larger, future project. Stay tuned!


    Happy Sunday, and go Bulldogs!

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  • 13w, 5d
    Birthday day

    Happy Wednesday to me!




























































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  • 20w, 18h
    On Regraduationing

    It happened, probably by accident. I passed my calculus class by four percentage points, and I got my diploma. Before I prostrate myself before the mighty gods of Student Loans and prepare myself for the inevitable kick in the financial testicles, I'd like to look back and briefly (thank God) reflect. Grab a drink, kiddies, and let uncle Patrick serenade you with my anticlimactic, if not cathartic, not-horse-words.

    You guys all know me as a writer. I identify as a writer. That's awfully cool. Writing has helped me get through the tougher parts of these years. Shame I didn't discover it sooner. Two and a half years after starting my first fanfiction about an OC alicorn with a mysterious and tragic past, I'm editing a real-life honest to goodness novel that might even become a book one day. I've gotten a lot better since I started, and I view it as my greatest accomplishment to date. That, and not drowning when I was two. Thanks for the tips and tricks (and for my aunt, who dragged me out of the pool).

    I was gonna write a lot more sappy crappy emotional stuff about how grateful I am and how much you all mean to me, but then I realized how silly that would be. The best way to show my appreciation would be to continue writing. That's how I know you as: readers. And friends.

    See you around, and happy Monday.

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  • 25w, 1d
    Popcorn: An erotic fantasty tour de force by TheBandBrony

    Set the scene!


    He pushed me onto the bed. My legs trembled as he leered over me, grinning his same salacious grin he had worn for the past hour. He could smell me, and he made no effort to hide the effect the scent of my arousal had on him. The carpet, already stained with a previous bout of lovemaking, would be sullied even more. The stench would linger in the shag for years. And, for once, I was absolutely okay with that.

    "I want you," I spoke, my voice quivering as much as the throbbing pulse between my legs. "Today was utter garbage. I just need to relax and get you in my lap. Warm me up from the inside out, and the outside in. If you know what I mean."

    He knew exactly what I meant. If you know what I mean.

    "IMMA FUCK U GOOD BEYOTCH U GONA B SORE" he replied. His primal growl resonated deep within the cockles of my soul. It popped and fizzled, like a tone-deaf harp player with Parkinson's.

    "Say it," I groaned. I would have begged in an instant, if only to hear his buttery voice echoing in my ears once more. "Say your name."

    "MY NAMES ORVILLE REDENBACKER BITCH"

    And then we fucked like rabbits. Except the rabbits were made of popcorn. Satellites orbiting overhead detected the obnoxious crackling sound of our raunchiness intimacy.

    The stench never came out of the carpets.

    Happy Sunday.

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A young Twilight Sparkle learns the magic of pyrotechnics.

Sorry, CosmicAfro.

First Published
22nd Apr 2012
Last Modified
22nd Apr 2012
#1 · 130w, 6d ago · · ·

Yes.

#2 · 130w, 1d ago · · ·

Everypony loves explosions! :pinkiehappy:

#3 · 130w, 1d ago · · ·

Am I the only one who read Powder Keg's lines with the Demoman's voice?

#4 · 130w, 1d ago · · ·
#5 · 130w, 1d ago · · ·

Poor Celestia. Now she has to go and do more paperwork from Twilight's little stunt...

#7 · 130w, 20h ago · · ·

Twilight didn't notice half the tower falling off? Or realize that this was a bad outcome?

Were it anypony else I'd complain. But I can believe filly Twilight being just that naive. :twilightblush:

#8 · 129w, 4d ago · · ·

>Will read this really, really, soon I promise

#9 · 129w, 4d ago · · ·

As far as the technical stuff goes, you've got a lot of passive voice language such as "That was, at least, until", "In fact, she was awed", and so on. I'd go through and try to have more action-ish language and character-driven language. Like turning "That was, at least, until" to "This all changed one fateful year during ____".

Some other things that stick out (but I may be wrong on these):

weresqueak. "Then it'll => weresqueak. "Then, it'll  

Canterlot, but being the obedient filly she was, => Canterlot, but, being the obedient filly she was,

as she noted that as of then, nothing => as she noted that, as of then, nothing

like he had just rolled in mud, his whole coat was caked => like he had just rolled in mud; his whole coat was caked

just to be safe... You’re not going to => just to be safe... you’re not going to

If Powder keg had been => If Powder Keg had been

shock, a small, Almost sad smile => shock, a small, almost sad smile

Got to be honest and say that while I liked it, I really doubt it'll get on EqD. They're probably say something along the lines of: "It comes across as too stilted, you need more variance in your sentence structure, Twilight seems too OOC, and Twilight's characterization doesn't include canon episode events enough." But if you want to go for it, then go ahead. :duck:

Again, it's a really nice story. Thanks for dedicating it to me, by the way!

#10 · 129w, 21h ago · · ·

>>500375 "Got to be honest and say that while I liked it, I really doubt it'll get on EqD."

Oh, ye of little faith.

#11 · 129w, 21h ago · · ·

>>480944

Ah, so someone else did too.

#12 · 129w, 21h ago · · ·

eqd'd...

Pyrotechnic twilight is best twilight:twilightsmile:

#13 · 129w, 20h ago · · ·

Needs more Firecracker Burst.

#14 · 129w, 20h ago · · ·

WOOO! FIREWORKS! 8D

#15 · 129w, 20h ago · · ·

>>520410 This pony just screams "Hilariously tragic backstory." I might just need to write about this.

#17 · 129w, 19h ago · · ·

Filly Twilight is best Twilight.

Very amusing.

Congrats on EQD.

#18 · 129w, 17h ago · · ·

:twilightoops: Oh dear...I'm having flashbacks to the time I set a can full of pine sap on fire...

Anyway, this story is awesome. The idea of Twilight using explosives is hilarous, and with the fact that she had the eyepatch in that one episode...Well, that calls to mind a certain game character. I can't help but wonder if Powder Keg is somehow related to Trixie. (Maybe he set up the pyrotechnics for her cart-display?)

#19 · 129w, 15h ago · · ·

>>520215

I'm not sure how to respond to this fact, so I guess I'll just back away slowly without comment.

#20 · 129w, 15h ago · · ·

-2 points for not making the title "Filly's First Firework Foray".

Other than that, good job :pinkiehappy:

#21 · 129w, 8h ago · · ·

I LIKE IT :pinkiecrazy:

Conrats on EQDaily, btw

#22 · 128w, 6d ago · · ·

Blowing up a tower with fireworks?

Is there anything Twilight can't do?

#23 · 128w, 6d ago · · ·

>>500375

Neither of those are actually in the passive voice. :ajbemused:

#24 · 128w, 4d ago · · ·

Gimli the dwarf shakes his head in disgust, "Aye!  That be what they get for not using dwarves to plan and build the castle.  Why, with myself and a hundred of my kin, we'd have built the north tower such that a hundred such fillies armed with fireworks wouldn't move so much as a cornerstone!"

#25 · 128w, 3d ago · · ·

I agree giving fireworks to kids is always a good idea

#26 · 128w, 3d ago · · ·

This was amazing.  All my yes!

#27 · 128w, 3d ago · · ·

>>543322 Yes accepted.

#28 · 128w, 2d ago · · ·

That was bloody fantastic. more please.

#29 · 128w, 2d ago · · ·

>>545793 If you'd like, I can PM you my latest work. It's another cute little story that's not quite done yet (it's still pretty rough in that respect), but if you ant to read it, I'm sure that can be arranged.

#30 · 128w, 2d ago · · ·

>>545837 Um um sure? No sad please? >.< I have yet to find a crying towel big enough for the amount of tears I ted to shed at even remotely sad stuff.

Happy to edit and gush though :twilightblush:

#31 · 128w, 2d ago · · ·

>>545842 It's funny, don't worry.

#32 · 128w, 2d ago · · ·

>>545877 Woohoo! send away! i'm off to sleep for now but after collecting some fre comic books tomorra I'll be all over it.

#33 · 127w, 3d ago · · ·

>>486055 Well, your sort of right in the idea of her as a filly being a factor. You see, she was young and she expected a huge explosion with lots of color, (which is what she got) so she was really happy and mainly focused on the fireworks not the tower because she was distracted by the light show. She would probably realize what she'd done, but not before the excitement of the explosion went away. A sort of "WOOOOOHOOOOO!:pinkiehappy: ...wait... Oh, SH*T!":pinkiegasp:

#34 · 126w, 4d ago · · ·

Jamie want big boom.

#35 · 126w, 3d ago · · ·

Celestia will be not pleased.

#36 · 126w, 1d ago · · ·

I would expect this kind of stunt to be pulled by Pinkie (even when she's an adult), not by Twilight (even when she's a filly). :twilightblush:

#37 · 124w, 3d ago · · ·

Now that's funny.

#38 · 101w, 4d ago · · ·

Explosions make everything better! EVERYTHING!:pinkiecrazy:

#39 · 48w, 3d ago · · ·

>>486055

Given that she knew what fireworks were already, I'd think she'd have thought through the effects of setting them off inside the tower, rather than above the tower...

#40 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·

hahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha......*coff*....*coff*...hahahahahahahahahahahahaha

:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

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