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Shadowmane PX-41


Just your average british lad. I write things for a living. It’s the strangest living you’ll ever find, second only to my inability to take myself off of the grid.

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If the cover isn't enough of a dead giveaway, there are ponies in diapers in this fic. There will also be some elements of wetting and age-play involved. I hope you aren't offended by this.

Applejack is invited by Rarity to a special youth club for ponies to forget about their troubles and their stress.

However, once Applejack is about to join the group inside, she realizes there's an emphasis on the word 'Youth' in this youth club.

This fic was inspired by Twilight And Rarity Go To The Spa, by TheConflictedWriter. Be sure to check him out as well when you have the time.

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Ok, I will read this to get a better idea on how to finish the cover art for you.:raritywink:

Ok, got it. The pic will be on its way soon!

is this inspired or actual sequal?

4786274 inspired.

He's trying to make a sequel, but he's falling behind on it.

i really enjoyed this story:rainbowlaugh:. and i could try to make some pics can they be pixelated kinda?

4788158 unfortunately I don't take pixelated art unless it's a videogame fic.

You can try and make it as high quality as you'd like though. Maybe with the art style the show would use.

rartiy makes dolls dance for her? is she the Master Of Puppets?

I'm sowwy, I also sang the lullbye as a metal song, when will everyone will see that babies and metal work so well?

p.s. I just see another fun thing, imagine this playing in the background while rarity rage war vs applejack with her puppets

"But if you need anything, just be sure to talk to Tender Loving or Helping Hand. Helping Hand

what are hands?:rainbowhuh:

4788872 "You know damn well what hands are, Rainbow Dash!"

+1 sin.

This story was adorable! I don't seem to be the only one who likes the idea of Rarity in diapers and acting like a foal. Though, I think there should be more stories of Spike and Sweetie Belle in diapers and acting like foals, hence why I'm working on one such story now. I would love to see some fan artwork of this story. That'd be so cute!

cover art? where?.....

4790004 It's coming, darling.

I have a crack team of Breezies working on the cover art. It should be ready soon.

4790153 ...breezies?....

4790173 You know, those half-pony half-butterfly hybrids that made an appearance in Season 4.

And yes, Breezies are my children, they gladly work for me in exchange for my loving care and support for them. Which, by the way, is NEVER going to stop.

okay :fluttercry:would u rather perfer hand drawn drawings?

4791723 No. I'd like something that looks like it would have been on the show itself.

well my drawings are top quality ill send u a sample:ajsmug:

Dawwwwww, I love it. I thought there were a few issues with some of the dialogue, but nothing to get in the way of such an adorable story. Good job. :)

IT IS DONE!!!
You would not believe the amount of overtime I had to put in to finish this story. The whole scrape with Doctor Zomboss today was no help either.
I mean, HE HAD A FREAKING DRAGON WAITING FOR ME!!!
"And it would have had your brains as well, had you not been throwing down those Puff-Shrooms to fend of my jesters!"
Yeah, that's the one problem with you, Zomboss. You give all of your zombies very exposable weak points now and again. I noticed that Jester Zombies were unfazed by projectile plants, so I resorted to Puff-Shrooms to fight them.
"But still, at least I got close this time."
Yeah, you had me on the ropes with only 2 Lawnmowers left in the end. Not to mention the number of Gargantuars and King Zombies you pulled in that fight.
"I almost had you in the end, if not for that Plant Food you brandished in that fight."
Oh well better luck next Time Period. Eh, Zomboss?
"You're on. But for now, I need to rethink my tactics and invent some new Zombies for the upcoming battles ahead of you."
He'll be back, I know my Zomboss, and I know him VERY well.

Damn it, spoilers to Plants Vs. Zombies 2.
And is it weird that I want to go to that place?

4811534 heads up for you. The Dark Ages is a pretty hard Time Period for me.

Besides the things I mentioned, there's also NO SUN dropping from the sky, as it's the Dark Ages. So you'll have to strategise or resort to power moves.

I'll give you a meh. This isn't terribly brilliant, but it's not offensive either. You've made a lot of mechanical errors amd your style needs more life and less tropes. I'd go into more detail, but I'm tired right now.

If this fic gets 100 or more likes, I will begin writing a sequel. And if THAT gets 100 or more likes, I'll make another sequel with all of the Mane 6.

(I could add the CMC into the second sequel as well, but that will all depend on your opinions.)

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What are you chattin', Kumo?

Well, over all a pretty nice story. Seemed a bit... Fast, at times. Applejack's "fight" (if you could call it that) about being a foal seemed a bit forced. Also, there was one scene in particular that just screamed "Brainwash!"

However, there were some very sweet moments as well.

4927698 Sorry I havn't read hte story yet but saying stuff like "i'll make a sequeal when X thing is reached" is kind of umm bad in my book, it like your are holding something hostage till you get what you what, and if you do. Really should jsut write if you have motivation or inpseration to do so rather then how much traffic you get.

I'll say it....this was adorable. This is kind of a weird story I won't lie, but it was just so damn cute. I think I need to check my blood sugar, this might have given me super adorabetes. Great job.

will now i'm half a sleep:ajsleepy: reading all night:twilightblush: lol any hoof awesome story, keep it up to and u may be in luck cause i'm a artiest ;3 :yay: till then Have a great derpy:derpyderp1: day/night or whatever your timeline is lol:derpytongue2:

The story was good. But in my personal opinion apple jack should've sued the company for holding her against her wishes. It is obvious they were in using mind control on her. The proof is in the apple sauce.

Can you PLEASE do a sequel to this?? I’d just love to see Pinkie and Dashie playing in there! I would die of cute! Please??? :scootangel: :scootangel: :scootangel:

Really enjoyed story mate, keep up the good work πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ’•πŸ’•πŸ’•πŸ’•πŸ’•πŸ’•πŸ’•πŸ’•πŸ’•πŸ’•πŸ’•πŸ’•πŸ’•πŸ’•πŸ’•

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