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Fluttershy loves to care for animals, going so far as to help other people care for theirs as well.  But during winter, when they're all snuggled up in their warrens and dens to hibernate, Fluttershy can hardly cope with the boredom.  Always one to try and better herself (in non-physical ways that is) the yellow pegasus begins spending time at Twilight's library, learning as much as she can on... softer subjects.  Finding that she had the capacity for far more love than just Animal care, and never expecting a certain lavender unicorn to occupy her thoughts.

As usual, I do not own any of these characters, nor do I represent in any way Hasbro or the specific team responsible for the creation of My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic.  All rights are reserved by their original owners and this work of fiction should in no way be distributed for profit of my own, or anyone else's.  

Special Thanks to c0nker of deviantART for allowing me permission to use his artwork as a cover image (http://c0nker.deviantart.com/)

First Published
31st Oct 2011
Last Modified
5th Mar 2012

this story is just...DAWWW I don't know which is better TwiLuna or FlutterTwi!

Now i want more..and some of that soup spike made that sounds freaking awesome

nice! You did a great job building the momentum of the events and keeping Fluttershy in character. Interesting concept having pegasus' wings stick out when they're aroused. I love a good romance, I look forward to where you take this!

>>21988  The "wingboner" is hardly my idea... it's actually a pretty popular (and admittedly silly) concept that's been around for quite some time.

This story is great! Keep it comeing!

A very cute start to what will almost definitely be an extremely cute story. With Fluttershy being...well Fluttershy it's kinda hard for it not to be cute.

in the words of our saint fluttershy MOAR!! :flutterrage:

Well I'm certainly glad to see the high rating and happy comments.  I'll definitely keep working on this one but my real life (pain as that is) sometimes tends to steal away my attention, so I'll work as much as I can but it may not be a rapid-fire update.  Thank you all for the positive support and don't be afraid to voice any feedback, I'm a comment-whore.  I feed off of your comments and opinions about my work... don't let me starve. :fluttershysad:  

Nice job with the story, especially keeping everypony in character. Definetly interested in seeing where you take this. :yay::twilightsmile:

How cute, I think you should continue this! :rainbowkiss:

quite the observant one twilight :twilightblush: can't wait for more, this is definately going to be good

This has a good chance of being the cutest thing I've ever read. I love your writing style, keep up the good work, looking forward to the next update!

More. No excuses. More.

I'm wondering why it went from past tense to present tense in the middle of it o.o

ooohhh l love this! keep if up!


Interesting. The Unconscious Processes are quite fulfilling in this story and it works well with quiet Fluttershy.

Too many shipping stories have the two characters liking each other from the get-go.  This one avoids that while still making it cute.  Good work. :pinkiesmile:

... I personally really hated the whole Fluttershy speaking to herself with a second personality idea. First chapter was really sweet and nice, but this chapter half of it just went nowhere for me. I hope you won't use too much of that device again. I like that you updated fairly fast, and I like Twilight x Fluttershy pairing.

>>22359 Probably because i wrote this during my lunch break and must have missed over it during the editing process :twilightblush:  Also I'm far more comfortable writing in past tense, so with my pony fanfics i've been trying to write in present... sometimes i'll revert back and forth, though i tried to make the transitions flow well (past tense for memories and other such observations of times gone by, while still making the overarching progression in present tense)  If i screwed up i apologize

>>22385  Well I personally like the inner Id consultation idea that I gave to Fluttershy, half to explain her sudden change of attitude with the dragon and the cockatrice in the show, and half to try and add a little more depth to an already quiet and steadfast character.  The plan was for it not to show up unless she had to make bold decisions (at least bold from her perspective) and I'd say the situation she was placed in was bold enough.  Thanks for the feedback though.


I really like this story! Great writing style, and nice wording. I can see your intelligence and the socute-ness of this story. Great work!

I've been enjoying this. Concept is solid, and the writing is good.

You do, however have two little problems, typesetting, and tense.

When Fluttershy starts having a conversation with her id, it's a huge wall of text. That could definitely be broken up into a few paragraphs to help the flow.

Tense. Well, you're consistent in your use of tense... the present tense. Past tense is the logical way to go about telling the story, because the narrator is relating the events that happened, which means it already had to have happened for the narrator to know about them in order to tell us. Make sense?

>>22716 Well, yes that makes sense, but the fact that the story is being narrated doesn't necessarily constrain it to past tense only.  The only reason it's being narrated is because i wanted to provide a window into Fluttershy's mind while still allowing a third person view to help include slightly hidden messages from other characters' perspectives (things that Fluttershy doesn't notice that could still cause a kind of dramatic irony device for the readers).  You can narrate something AS it's happening, which is what i've tried to convey as happening here.  Think of a football game where the announcers constantly speak about who currently has possession of the ball.  Something along those lines.  Consistency is the biggest issue (and i know i've messed up on that one a few times) but as i said, the conveyance of the story doesn't constrain its tensing.  As for the wall of text issue: i actually agree with you after having given it a second glance.  I'll make sure i work on that in the future updates :twilightsheepish:

saw wing boner joke, cant finish reading after that.:ajbemused:


:rainbowlaugh::derpyderp1: Rainbow Dash's dreams and fantasys are being written down by her, she is just so bad at disguises! :rainbowhuh: Rainbow Dash: noooo this is NOT my thought track, you must be Pinkie Pie's Cosmic double or somethin'!

in the name of the Emprah we demand MOAR *please*

I'm workin' on it guys, jeez :twilightoops: It updated yesterday for goodness' sake.  I do have a life... okay that's a lie but i AM A COLLEGE STUDENT! If you rush me the quality's just gonna degrade and i want to keep catering to the fans with the best work that i can produce! You guys are why i keep writing at all :scootangel:

That ID is rather awesome.  I always figured something like that was what made it so hard for Fluttershy to do much, every decision is a massive internal debate.

#34 · 243w, 21h ago · · · The Spark ·

It's a date! :rainbowlaugh:

*Snort snort* :rainbowwild:

While it lacks tension and intrigue, it manages to make up for it with good harmless fluff. This story is just so cute, especially with the sexual tension Fluttershy feels around Twilight. There's nothing like a cute yuri fanfic (:rainbowhuh:?) to give you a warm fuzzy feeling. Go get her, Fluttershy, you can do it. :twilightblush:

#36 · 243w, 20h ago · · · The Spark ·


#37 · 243w, 20h ago · · · The Spark ·

>>23166 yeah i apologize for all the padding, the only real conflict here is fluttershy trying to get over her timid nature and her little inner voice and i've been more or less just setting that up thus far...  to be honest i'm a little stalled, but as long as the setting changes i'll try to keep getting something fresh in there for the folks that like a little more action in their fics.  As for the sexual tension... the rating is Teen and it's gonna stay that way... just lettin' ya know :derpytongue2: there may be a scene or two where the fillyfooling is implied, but don't hold your breath for anything cloppy.

Hrm...Okay, let's see how this compares to Once Bitten, Twice Shy... (No offense, but that's the best Twishy shipping story that one has read to date, so that's what one will be comparing this story to. Anyhoof, seems to be off to a decent start, but one expects to see over the next chapters why exactly Flutters likes/loves Twi, and if/why Twi loves her back.) For now, no judgement of stars, since the story is incomplete.

~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria

Hrm...Okay, let's see how this compares to Once Bitten, Twice Shy... (No offense, but that's the best Twishy shipping story that one has read to date, so that's what one will be comparing this story to. Anyhoof, seems to be off to a decent start, but one expects to see over the next chapters why exactly Flutters likes/loves Twi, and if/why Twi loves her back.) For now, no judgement of stars, since the story is incomplete.

~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria

p.s. Sorry for somehow double-posting

Nice job with the story. :pinkiehappy: :yay:

So... Trevor is confused... Flutters is Bi then? One was to understand that she wasn't interested in Stallions, but now she's had a dream about Big Mac a few nights ago? Why isn't she trying anything with him then? *Is confluttered*

~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria

#44 · 243w, 19h ago · · · The Spark ·

Well... This is certainly interesting and entertaining, and Trevor doesn't foresee this ending anytime soon, so... This fic has Trevor's interest! He patiently awaits the next chapter update! (Since he knows this updated just tonight, he doesn't expect it to happen very soon. Trevor is patient, and not pushy, so don't worry about one nagging at you for more chapters, unless it's been about a month! XD)

~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria

#45 · 243w, 19h ago · · · The Spark ·

>>23228 To humor you:  According to real research, sexual orientation isn't as black and white as "gay straight and bi" like many people think, it's actually based on a continuum where people can lie anywhere between gay and straight... let's just say fluttershy is closer to bisexual on her continuum... in a society where an apparent majority of the population is female i'd say social norms would be more accepting to such experimentation, especially considering that females are more sexually malleable until their late thirties where their orientation becomes more or less carved in stone, as opposed to males where that happens in the mid to late teens.  It's a fan fiction, she has a crush on twilight for her personality... and if you'll recall ANYWAY i said she wasn't interested in the stallions in flight school, not just stallions in general... see those three meatheads that kept calling rainbow dash "rainbow crash" in the sonic rainboom episode of the show: sensitive gal like fluttershy probably wouldn't be too attracted to douchebags like that. There really aren't too many good reasons to be confused about that :applejackconfused:

Following more stories than I can count... time to add one more.

#47 · 243w, 18h ago · · · The Spark ·

I like the idea that every pegasus has an inner voice that tells them to do stuff XD

#48 · 243w, 18h ago · · · The Spark ·

>>23285 when did i say every pegasus had that? :rainbowhuh: just fluttershy (in the story anyhow) :yay:

#49 · 243w, 18h ago · · · The Spark ·

Theres some grammar issues, otherwise I  fucking love it. I want her to have a necrology lab.

#50 · 243w, 17h ago · · · The Spark ·

massive amounts of squee and d'awwww :twilightsmile:

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