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The air in the room had suddenly become so tense that it could be cut with a knife. Octavia stared at Neon with such heavy intensity it was a wonder the stallion hadn't burst into flames. As oblivious as the pink party-pony could be at times, even she could easily read this situation. She quickly and quietly made her exit, leaving the two ponies by themselves.
"Oh good, she left. That means I will not have any witnesses for what I am about to do," Octavia snarled.
"Octavia, I-" Neon started. He would have continued, if the pregnant mare had not suddenly closed the distance, a hoof to his throat.
"I should end your pathetic existence where you stand, you selfish, heartless monster!" Octavia yelled, a small film of tears appearing along her eyelids. To her shock, Neon did not object or fight.
"...Go right ahead," Neon said simply.
"...What do you mean by that?!" Octavia asked, very much confused by the very uncharacteristic introversion the stallion was now showing. In fact, something about him didn't seem right at all. His mane was unkempt, his face covered in a darker shade of fur than the usual light blue, and massive bags outlined the undersides of his eyes.
"Don't you see, Octavia? Since that night, my life has completely gone down the drain," he said. "I'm no longer allowed to perform at the bar where we had our 'incident', Poly left me, and it only got worse from there..." he said. Octavia backed off for a moment.
"Speak. I had better hear nothing but the truth," Octavia warned, her voice threatening enough to send even the most hardened Royal Guardscolts scurrying off in terror. Neon straightened himself out as best he could, clearing his throat.
"Well... after Poly and I went our separate ways-"
"I am certain you mean, 'she left me because she caught me cheating on her'," Octavia corrected, vitriol all but apparent in her voice.
"...Right," Neon said. "After... that happened, I tried to work things out on my own. No big deal, I've survived on my own before, I can do it again... or so I thought," he said. "Turns out that Poly went around and told every bar and club about the stunt I pulled back there, and I've pretty much been blacklisted from every club, restaurant, bar, and dance hall in Canterlot. They see me as a liability and somepony who will cause them more damage than bring in bits," he said. "I broke her heart... and she was the one who was supposed to keep me from going crazy after Vinyl left me... I was convinced- wholly and truly convinced that I was going to spend the rest of my life with her," Neon chuckled, a fresh wave of tears making its way to the surface. "Then... something happened. The fire faded, the magic died... and the next thing I knew, she was leaving me. I was so hurt that... that I only thought of hurting her as badly as she did me... and I did," he finished, shaking his head. "I didn't just hurt Vinyl... I hurt Poly too... and boy did she hurt me bad," he said, making a noise halfway between a laugh and a sob.
"Serves you right for what you did," Octavia said bitterly. Neon then continued.
"It didn't end there... not only did I get blacklisted in Canterlot, but now I can't get work anywhere!" he said, half-laughing. "I... I can't believe how utterly stupid I was," Neon said, looking at his hooves. "It wasn't until I woke up one night in a gutter, bleeding out of pretty much every hole in my head with no where to turn that I realized something. I'm a scumbag. I'm a low-down, dirty piece of garbage that quite frankly, doesn't even deserve to be in the same room as you right now. What I did that night, was something nopony should ever do. I'm not here to apologize, because I know you won't forgive me. I'm not deserving of such a luxury... but I do want to start back on the right path," he said, staring Octavia straight in the eye as he said this. "I'm not asking you to believe me, or to forgive me... I just want this chance. I want this chance to do right by not just me... just saying I'm looking for redemption would be selfish. I'm doing this for Vinyl. I've done nothing but screw her over since the day I met her," he said. "I've been a horrible coltfriend, I've been a horrible partner... and I've been a horrible pony overall for what I've done..." Octavia blinked in surprise as a new sound filled the room- tears hitting the tile beneath them. She looked over at Neon, noticing his form had shrunken significantly... and tears were running down his face. While the stallion had done nothing to rectify what he had done, and she still held a great deal of anger for him, she had been raised differently.
If ye see another pony hurtin', do yer bes' ta comfort 'em... ya never know- they may become yer bes' ally in a time o' need,, Octavia thought, remembering one of her father's many life lessons. Octavia made a tentative step towards him, but froze as he began to speak again.
"I thought I was over her..." Neon said, looking up and away from Octavia, not bothering to conceal his tears. "I sincerely thought I had moved on, and that I would be perfectly okay to see her with somepony new, not to- to do what I did!" he exclaimed. "I couldn't handle it... I couldn't handle seeing her with another pony. When I saw how happy you two were together, something inside me- something told me, to destroy it. 'If I couldn't have it, neither could she,' I thought. 'It isn't fair, why does she get to have the life I wanted!?'" he yelled. He then looked at Octavia. "...and Poly, I- I can't- I can't stop thinking about her! I- I hurt her bad, Octavia, I can't believe I hurt her like this... what was I thinking!?" he asked himself as the tears continued to flow, the question hanging in silence for a few moments.
"You really love this mare, do you not?" Octavia asked.
"I do... I can honestly say I do, and I threw it away over a petty grudge, only to end up with nothing!" Neon said, trying desperately to stem the flow of tears, but nothing worked. "She was the one... she was the mare I was destined to be with, not Vinyl... I was too blind to see it, and now it may be too late..." His soul had been laid bare, and it was at Octavia's discretion to tread lightly... or crush him completely.
"It is never too late," Octavia said softly. "If she truly means that much to you, then I am certain you will find a way to make this right, no matter the cost... just as you are doing right now with me," she said.
Neon was speechless. After all that had happened, after everything he had done, Octavia had still found it within the kindness of her heart to offer words of encouragement to the stallion. He simply hung his head, covering his face with his hooves as he wept. After a short while, he wiped his face and spoke. "I... I'm so sorry, Octavia... I genuinely and truly am. I can understand if you never forgive me for this, and to be honest, I know I wouldn't forgive me... but please, give me this chance. Give me this chance to do at least one thing right by Vinyl..." Neon asked, sinking to his knees. "Please... I'm begging you for this, Octavia, I've used what little money I had left to get here to do this," he said. Octavia felt a pang of sympathy for him... one she never expected to have.
"How... how do you intend to get home?" Octavia asked.
"Home? Hah!" he laughed bitterly. "After what I did? Do you really think I could go back to the apartment I shared with Poly? I can't even think about her without wanting to shrivel up and die! I don't have a home!"
... He's homeless... the poor stallion lost his home because of all this, Octavia thought, unable to even fathom not having somewhere to come home to everyday. No job, no marefriend, no home... as bad as what he did was, nopony deserves this.
He then took a deep breath to calm himself, and began again. "... It's Vinyl's and your wedding day tomorrow, it's a momentous, extremely special day for you two. I want to support her through this! I want to help you give her the day I never could... and as for Poly, I'm going to go find her, and even if she doesn't take me back, I'm going to tell her everything I told you today... but I wanted to do this first," he said. "Please... give me this chance..."
Octavia sat in silence, pondering her decision. Neon's heart pounded in his chest, the tension once again becoming palpable. After about five minutes, Octavia opened her mouth to speak. "...Fine. You can be the DJ tomorrow night..." The wave of relief that washed over Neon almost overwhelmed him.
"U-Understood, Octavia... I promise you won't regret this. I swear my life on it," he said. "...and please, don't tell Vinyl I was here. I... don't want to upset her..."
Octavia nodded curtly, and Neon quickly scampered out of Sugarcube Corner. Octavia let out a heavy sigh, still absorbing everything she had just heard. He would not have made so much effort to come here with what little bits he had left if he did not mean it, she thought. I can only hope that you stick to what you have told me, Neon...
"...Why didn't you tell me Neon showed up?" A voice said softly from right nearby, abruptly interrupting her thoughts. Octavia looked around, and felt a chill run up her spine when she found Vinyl sitting on the ground near the entrance to Sugarcube Corner, tears running off her cheeks and into the dirt beneath her.
"Vinyl, I... I had no idea you were right outside," Octavia said, immediately taking a seat next to Vinyl. She wrapped a foreleg around her, pulling her into a close embrace. "How much did you hear?"
"All of it... every last word that came out of his stupid mouth!" Vinyl yelled, her emotions having been thrown for a massive loop. "I want to believe him, but I- I just-" she let out an exasperated grunt, burying her face in her hooves. "WHY DO I FEEL SORRY FOR HIM!?" she yelled, unable to comprehend what she was feeling.
"I... I do not have an answer Vinyl, I just cannot believe how far he has fallen because of this," Octavia said, gently carressing Vinyl's shoulder with a hoof to calm her down.
"I can't help but feel like this is somehow my fault! I- I knew he had dated mares that treated him like trash before me, and- and I promised him that I wouldn't do that to him... I didn't think it would turn out like this," Vinyl said, burying her face in Octavia's neck.
"Vinyl? Is everything alright?" Bonbon asked, appearing from behind the open door to Sugarcube Corner, Lyra right behind her with grocery bags. They immediately set their things down and closed in on Vinyl.
"What happened? Is she okay, Octavia?" Lyra asked, very much concerned.
"Physically, she is fine... emotionally, not so much," Octavia explained as she continued to comfort Vinyl.
"We saw a stallion running down the street a few minutes ago... do you know him?" Bonbon asked.
"Y-Yeah, I do..." Vinyl said.
The four mares sat in Vinyl and Octavia's living room, Vinyl sipping a cup of hot cocoa that Octavia had made her to calm her down.
"Wow... that's quite the story, Vinyl..." Lyra said, trying to take it all in.
"Well, it must mean something that he came all this way riding on all he had left in the hopes that you'd give him a chance," Bonbon reasoned.
"I did give him the chance. I can only hope that he meant what he said and that he intends to keep his word," Octavia said, positioning herself so that Vinyl could lean against her. She felt a small twinge of pain, but brushed it off.
"I just wanted to be friends with him... not for this to happen," Vinyl said softly. "He was such a great pony... and I did exactly what I promised I wouldn't..."
"You shouldn't beat yourself up about this, Vinyl. You had no idea this would happen," Lyra reasoned. Octavia shifted again, feeling a bit more pain, but thought nothing of it.
"I mean, if he got bitter because you wanted to end it with him, that's all on him, right? If I wanted to break up with my colt-friend because we weren't connecting or things were just fizzling, then I think that if he goes nuts after that it really isn't my fault," Bonbon said. Octavia shifted again, this time pushing Vinyl off her.
"Octy, what's up? You keep shifting," Vinyl pointed out.
"I am not sure... I keep getting pains, and they keep- ugh!" Octavia groaned, feeling a powerful pain shoot through her abdomen. "V-Vinyl... something is happening..."
"What? What's the matter?" Vinyl said, immediately sitting up. "What are you feeling?"
Another powerful pain shot through her abdomen, forcing tears out of Octavia's eyes. "I... I think the foals are coming..."
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Great update. Can't say it was worth the wait, but I can say I thoroughly enjoyed it. However, the ending could use a little lengthening from when Octy says "Vinyl..." to where she says "I think the foals are coming", and personally, I think "something is happening" sounds a little odd. It doesn't feel like something she'd say in this moment, at least not when they're getting as bad as they were.
PLEASE UPDATE FASTER! I LOVE THIS STORY!
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I saw it in the featured box, and I literally did a Pinkie Gasp. 
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MOAR SOON PLEASE 
I AM SO HAPPY AND SO PISSED RIGHT NOW! First of all, Its great to see an update on my favorite story! I thought you forgot about it and was ecstatic to see it update!
But still that was kind of mean...finally relieving us from a pretty big cliffhanger to give us a BIGGER cliffhanger?!?
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Just please don't leave us hanging for too long! 
OhmygoshOhmygoshOhmygoshOhmygosh!
This came out on my birthday!
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I have been so happy with you work. Until the Neon monologue. I love your work and it has made me cry more than once but i have to say the Neon monologue was really generic and sorta bland. It's the classic, i've been a jerk give me one chance thing that i see used in so many sub par fan fics. Not to say your fic is sub par, it's super great. But to see something so used in something so singular just takes a little out of it. But, I do like the cliff hanger. Well done. Just thought I would give my point of view, i know that's what i love my readers to do. Keep up the good work. 
it is not a love triangle or something like that.
Truth to be told when i first saw this story i though i would be that Pinkie started to live with Octavia and Vinyl, but that's not it either.
And another truth to be told we are 61 awesome chapters in and haven't meet the new roomie which is promised in the summary(but it seems we finally get them in the next chapter)
I was so happy to see this updated, but vastly unhappy to see Neon being redeemed. Effectively a rapist, no matter the reason, done of his own free will. Literally the scum of the earth. And he's forgiven. Just like that. In one chapter. Because of a sob story. He -should- be in prison, but all he lost was his girl and his job? That's not very sad, sounds like he got off easy for what he did.
Many of us said this was not the way to go, man. Neon being redeemed removes the one point of true conflict there was, that little black spot that added extra depth to Vinyl and Octavia. Like all the extra pregnancies, this is something that should have had its own fic series, something that could be made believable over time. I think I can safely speak for a number of us, given the comments over the last few chapters, that the readerbase was at least a touch happier when it was just Octavia and Vinyl pregnant, and Neon was still a bad guy, not an artificial sob-on-wheels with an automatic forgiveness pass.
Let me put it to you this way.
I joined because of this story and two others. This makes it worthwhile. This is one of my very favorite stories. Every character is shown nuances. Even the assholes are nuanced assholes...
Okay, that last statement came out weird.
This perhaps one of the best chapters this far. The big break you took made it worthwhile. Nuanced, interesting, emotional, and more than simply comedy. You apply my philosophy on writing so very well, and it is fulfilling to see that someone else gets it. That so many other people on this site get it. As I say this, I am near tears of bliss because I feel a sense of belonging on this site. The sheer level of talent for writing on this site is amazing, and it makes me so proud to be a part of it. I have found new friends, and reconnected with old ones.
And you were part of the reason why I joined.
Thank you, so very much.
Dear Lithe Kamitatsy,
Today I learned, that not only you are one of the most awesome authors ever, but you also like cliffhangers.
Please, if you keep doing that, at least TRY to update more often.
Your faithful reader,
Jolly Roger
Obligatory MOAR-cannon:
MMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAARRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
P.S.: Thank you for finally making clear if Octavia would really have twins or if it was only just in Vinyl's dream. Wondered about that for a while
J.R. out
Neon being nice? SHENANIGAINS! Or Neon has turned for good. Also, Update!!!!! Also again, BABIES CLIFFHANGER!!!!
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THE WORST DAY EVER but I turn on my laptop and logon to fim to find one of my all time favorite fic ever has an update....
Oh my ... you have certainly out-done yourself again. This chapter was well worth the wait! If it takes two months to produce such gold, so be it. The downside to waiting is having to breeze through the previous chapters in order to refresh my memory about the storyline ... 
... oh ... wait ... did I say 'downside?' ... I meant 'bonus!'
Great job with Neon's character; I can't believe how quickly you've managed to change my opinion of him; all I could contemplate after the previous chapter's cliffhanger was, does Neon have a death wish, and how exactly you would be able to do justice to Octavia's anger towards him while:
1. maintaining this story's Everyone Rating.
2. not require the addition of the Dark tag to this story.
3. not having Octavia either committed or arrested after said encounter. (Though, a plea of temporary insanity might actually be acceptable in this situation)
I'm not sure I trust him just yet, but if he is actually lieing and has not changed, not even Celestia herself, would be able to protect him from what the entire town of Ponyville would do to him, that is if they manage to get him before Octavia does (is it just me, but I think Octavia would be more vicious to him than Vinyl).
"Oh good, she left. That means I will not have any witnesses for what I am about to do"
- the snarling works well and it fits Octavia's character, but I just personally can't shake the image of Octavia saying this line with a psychotic smile on her face, a stare that drills into his very soul, a twitch in her eye, and in a tone that sounds a bit too happy ... kind of like 'broken' Octy from Vinyl's dream.
I'm actually starting to really worry about Octavia's future mental stability. Between 'broken' Octy in Vinyl's dream (foreshadow?), and her slightly more psychotic-like behaviour in Chapter ??? (if it is was simply playing around why would their foal be so worried and have to intervene), and the fact that Chapter ??? only features one foal (which is also implied by the title) instead of the two that she is apparently about to have. One way or another, I think there might be a need for tissues soon. Or I'm simply reading more into it then there actually is; its not like the story has a Dark, Tragedy, or Sad tags. Only one way to find out ... wait and see.
"Effectively a rapist" because he tricked Vinyl into kissing him? I don't think that that act quite fits into the definition of rape; probably more sexual assult. Scumbag? Sure, he definately is that, and he even admits to it.
The thing is that in real life, there rarely, if ever, is such a thing as pure evil or pure good. There is also a difference between understanding a person and then choosing to forgive them. I don't think that either Vinyl or Octavia has yet to forgive Neon for what he did to them; but, they now do understand the motivation behind what he did. If what he says is true, he let his jealousy and personal pain at being rejected by Vinyl lead him to seek revenge, to strike back. As wrong and as despicable as his actions are, the motivation behind them is understandable. What makes him despicable, however, is how he chose to act on those feelings.
The important thing about the 'sob' story, if it turns out to be true, is that he has come to the realization of what he has done, he has shown repentance, and he wishes to make amends for his actions. He's got a long way to go to be first, believed, then accepted, then forgiven, then trusted. Forgiveness does not imply forgetting what happened or pretending it didn't happen. To me, forgiveness is about giving the person a chance to redeem themselves instead of preverbially shutting the door in their face. Forgiveness does not imply that everything goes back to normal; trust must still be regained, friendship must still be rebuilt, fears must still be overcome ... all of that takes time and work. If Neon truely wants to be friends, then he has a hell of a lot of work ahead of him. Forgiveness is not a destination, but the starting of a difficult journey.
However, I am going to have to see more from him before I fully buy into his story. I still don't fully trust his character.
Yes. And this redemption bit is still a sappy gig, especially the way you spin it. There are fewer people capable of redemption than are able to walk that path. Here, we have a complete slimeball who shouldn't be able to see past his own nose, and suddenly he wants to make it up? And they're letting him take his crack at it just like that because of a "Woe is me what have I done"? Not believable in the slightest. Tell me how you'd react if you were in Octavia's shoes. Some guy gets your girl drugged up and/or drunk enough for physical interaction of a more than friendly sort while you stand there and have to view the results. Tell me then you'd just be angry to see his face, but would let him speak and tell you his troubles like some two-bit psychiatrist who can't afford a couch, then effectively cave to his sad, sad story about how he's a friendless hobo who deserves it, and frankly worse.
Or would you man up, destroy his face and most of the bones in his body you can reach, and send him packing out of town?
Stops being all fanciful and lovely-sounding, this redemption, once you add a bit of reasoning and personal emotion into it, doesn't it? My point is, and I've only made this point after a number of others did, is that Neon was the story's one true point of contention. The only bad guy, as it were. Now he's just the sick little bastard who got a get out of jail free card, and what amounts to a pat on the back. It doesn't make sense, it's pretty jarring, and erases the other half of depth - the negative half of positive.
He was not a character who should have been given his shot all in the space of one chapter... a short side-series/after-series would have done great; explore his character, his reasons, develop him from someone who thought what he was doing was justified by itself because he's an asshole who thinks that way... change him over time, with positive and negative experiences to realize he's been a horrible being. Then, with some interactions, show him the better path, and get his dumb flank's hooves on it, let him start walking. Once he's shown the others, despite their instant and understandable hatred of him, that he's trying to become a better person; then the home stretch towards giving him that chance to prove he's come to his senses now and forever appears. And once he's finally made that moral, mental, and emotional leap forward... then give him the new life he's earned. And not close friends with his ex/Vintavia, because frankly every time they see him they're going to be reminded of the bad things as well as the good. But at least then he could be forgiven.
But this is practically self-contained, they already feel sorry for him.
Every time I read this story I want to criticize and nitpick, and yet every time I see an update to it I squee a little.
And let me be perfectly clear, I never squee. Squee is something thirteen-year-old girls do. Yet here I am, squeeing. It's a little unnerving.
I'm still waiting to see if that walking void in the story that is Neon actually amounts to something. I find myself once again in conflict with the opinions expressed so far because I still feel that his actions have been far too one-dimensional for me to care about him either way. Was that a Neon-based revelation Vinyl was hinting at? Because we could sure use it. If something doesn't come of it, all the chapters he's been in will have been wasted.
Also: After sixty-one chapters this had better not be a false alarm.
...also-also, it just occurred to me: If they're having twins, shouldn't the title be "Four's a Crowd"?
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I swear, this story just keeps getting better and better. I mean sure, it takes a while for new chapters, but it's all worth it in the end.
Also, this chapter was all out of whack. Not in a bad way, though. Just in a way that I expected NONE of this. Holy shit, was it good though!
Keep up the good work! Cant wait for the next chapter!
Dare to be Different, Carpe Diem, and Live Life to the Fullest! /)(\
Although it is somewhat unrealistic that Neon comes back with a sob story and is automatically forgiven, this is a "feel-good" romance. It isn't littered with bad things coming left and right but a happy couple that goes through life. It isn't supposed to be sad and dark and Neon being redeemed is quite a refreshing change. There have been many stories where the bad guy has just been defeated and we forget about them willy-nilly. It might just be me, but I like the fact that Neon is being redeemed and I genuinely hope he gets his life together.
Or maybe I'm just to forgiving.
Anyway, nice chapter and I'm guessing (and hoping) that you'll use the song "Pony Rock Anthem" by ShadyVox?
Very good, but I worry that the Twixie will ruin the story for me. Ah well, just got to not mind it. I've just never quite why so many bronies like Trixie, to be honest. But other than that, This has been awesome. I've been reading this nonstop, from the beginning till now, for like 5 hours.
lol, i thought it was about them living together but for some reason bonbon and lyra having to move in together, which was odd as then it would be four. got this at like 3 am so i wasn't thinking.
upon reading i was mortified she got pregnant and was like this makes no sense, upon reading more i love it! im on like page 61, hardly into it but i like it so ima keep reading! kinda dumb sometimes but a good read!
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