hmm this story is interesting i found it funny with the whole breaking the fourth wall type of thing ill keep it tacked and wait and see how this story turns out

Alrighty, you have my attention with a likeable character and interesting premise. Let's see if you can keep it.

PLEASE! MORE! NEED! MORE!

Y U NO MAKE MOR! ლ(ಠ益ಠლ)

I have never seen a Power Thirst reference in a pony fanfic until now. Well done.

THANK YOU MASTER!

now make more...

MOAR... please...

This pleases me...  

NEED MOAR!

In regards to your blog post, I mostly like it for your MC. Omnius seems like a cool dude with an interesting backstory, and I'm curious to see how he'll fit into the grand scheme of things. Plus he's snarky. And I enjoy a good bowl of snark.

>>3222532225

Snarky-o's! Contains 7% vitamins and minerals!

This is good! Keep it up!!!

Also: REAL LIGHTNING!! POWER THIRST!!!

excellent

i thought that i was the only one who thought of someone like Omnius, travling to other universes.

Makes me happy

but i need moar...

NOW! RAAAAA!

Can't wait for part 2

The second greatest dimensional traveler ever!

The first being my one

CRAZY BLOBS

Sorry Nathan Traveler. Remember when I told you about parentheses usage? I was wrong, all wrong. Your grammar is correct. Sorry again. I am not a smart Phone.

>>4869248692

Hey, no worries. It's just a small mistake, and the fact that you pointed it out kinda adds to your reputation as a reviewer. Also, thanks again for giving me your honest opinion on it. It really helped me get a better idea of how to write the next chapter.

love it

One large bottle of Mountain Dew, a s**t ton of Crush 40 music, and a week later, we have THIS!

I'm actually rather proud of this chapter. You get to see some action, and then something surprising at the end! I hope that it doesn't make anyone mad, but if it does, I apologize. Please don't try to banish me to the moon!

Isn't the term "Traveler" and that this guy jumps from one world to another a bit too similar to the Pendragon Series?

>>4932549325

Wouldn't know, I haven't read those books yet. Been thinking about picking them up though. They any good?

Yeah id say they are. You just have to dedicate yourself to 10 books.

Brilliant story. Keep writing!

Yay! I squee every time this updates

MOAR!!!!! NOW!!!!

this chapter had me cackling with glee.

-imitates Mr. Burns-

Excellent.

BOAST BUSTERS

oh god this series is amazing....and the fact you incorprate memes makes it so much funnier, that 20 buck and slendy thing was priceless

i hope you continue this series, maybe make some pendragon references and have fun with it.

he hugged fluttershy but you said he let go of twilight

>>6829168291

Oh Good Gandhi, I missed that. Thanks!

Did you know: Lightning doesn't actually have to strike you in order for you to get electrocuted? When lightning hits the ground, the current tends to spread out, "grounding" the charge.

Long story short: If you happen to be yards away from a lightning strike, you WILL feel it. Especially if you happen to be a horse/pony/cow. Wider the stance = more it's gonna hurt.

Awesome chapter!

This never fails to make me laugh! My pinkies. Take them.

Also Boast Busters!

CHOOSE ALL THE EPISODES!

Dovashy episode first!

I don't get the 20 bits slendermane thing. Please explain.

>>7256472564

There's a joke about Slenderman's real reason for chasing people, which basically says that he just wants twenty dollars.

http://knowyourmeme.com/memes/slender-man

This might help out.

Thanks mate.

Firing sequence for the Orbital Moar Cannon has begun. Firing in 3

2

1

MOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAARRRRRR.

Boast. I wanna see him buck trixie up.

So far it has been a great story, but Twilight did not know that Nightmare Moon was Luna until Celestia arrived at the end.

>>7975379753

I can explain...(jumps out of a window) I REGRET NOTHING!

AWWWWWWWWWWW  YEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAAAHHH!

It's the strangest thing. Just a couple of days ago, I was wondering what the heck I should do, when I looked outside, and got hit by a giant laser. For a second though, it sounded like it was screaming something, and the next thing I knew, I wanted to work on this! Would anyone happen to know anything about that?

Where did the 'face of his father' come from?

>>8034980349

The Dark Tower series, by Stephen King.

YES YES YES

when I saw 'a wooden green mask' YOU PUT THE MASK IN THERE AND PUT IT ON PINKIE YOU ARE INSANE but in back of my mind I thought put it on celestia see what happens

Mask +Pinkie Pie = The end of 3 realities.

AWESOME WORK

When you choose, pick Boast Busters. Why? Because I wanna see Omnius shoot a Kamehameha at an Ursa Minor.

>>8049280492

Not to spoil anything, but if Boast Busters is chosen (and for those of you who are interested, the top three so far are Boast Busters, Griffon the Brush-off, and Dragonshy), that probably won't happen.

Here's a hint as to what might happen though:  http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=C1Ose7A8P94

I heard of the dark tower and remember buying somthing related to it (prety sure it was a book) but iv never goten around to reading it and I seem to have misplaced it. On the other hand this fan fic is amazingly well done and I have to admit that I had my own ideas of a pony with a cutie mark of a infinity sign who could time travel and not learn but "understand" everything. Coincidence? There goes my so called "original" idea. I eagerly await more.

Ignore the last smily.

Damn, I must admit I ignored this story when I saw it the first time. Feel bad about it now, really great story. Truely love the alternate dimmensions -gods- the endless funny as hell refferences. Great charactor, little to no spelling errors... So basicly great story, really love it! 5/5!

>>8104581045

No worries, and they are some DAMN good books. I highly recommend them. Fair warning though, there is a lot of dark stuff in there, and I would say it's borderline 'M' rating. Totally worth it though. The first book is called, "The Gunslinger."

>>8108281082

Thanks! I honestly didn't think that the story would become as popular as it is now, and I can only hope that it gets better for everyone!

Oh I almost forgot, 5/5 for al the hilarious references (even some I don't understand) and for makinging him more random than pinkie pie,

Dude, I'm new on FIMfiction, and I've been working on a fic. Something about mine is oddly similar to ours. Such as the subject of Travelers. In mine, there are Seers, and there aren't just three, but there are three extremely powerful one, known as traveling Seers. The Gods send my character to Equestria to right a wrong done to that realm. Not only that, but the first pony my character meets in Equestria is Applejack. I just learned about your fic yesterday, and I started mine three days ago. Weird.

>>8202982029

All I can say is: Holy crapola. That is strange. To tell the truth though, this has been something that's been with me for a few years now.

...alright, screw it, I'm putting this up in a blog post.

I'm not saying you copied me! I'm saying that I'm afraid you might think that I'm copying YOU, so I was just making sure.

>>8210082100

Hey, No worries. The only way I'd accuse someone of ripping off of my life is if they acted exactly like me.

AHHHHHHHHHHHH!

NEED!... MOAR!... PONY!

Hey, my first chapter might be up soon. Check it out to see how oddly similar it is. Although there is a twist. I don't know when it will actually be up. But look for it, okay?

>>8050080500 Well please tell me that there will be a Spirit Bomb, or at least a small Kamehameha. Pwease? THE POWER OF FLUTTERSHY COMPELS YOU!!!!!

I'd hate to be the guy who is that universe when the events of cupcakes transpires

I know it's not the best, and I could have done better. I really tried to change it so it wouldn't follow the same path as yours. I'm not kidding, it was almost the exact same as yours. I literally planned it out almost exactly like yours. Except for when it takes place, and also the Pinkie Pie incident. Although there was an interaction between Pinkie and my character. It involved Hunter. So you know, It was quite hard to change it. Sorry.

Annnnnyways, I'll try to do the second chapter better, and I would still like your input. It helps to have a professional (lol, flattering) tell me how it is.

I have to say, the way you included 'cupcakes' is quite nicely done. I loved the Vault too. The mask is quite hilarious.

Also, I went over my chapter again, and I realized that not everything was like yours.

I truly would like your input on ho my story is going, once the next one is out.

Again, sorry if this is bugging you. heh, heh...

I say ominus should transform into an Alicorn.

>>8413284132

Do you recall the Super Aura?

HUZZAH!!!! *in quiet voice* please let there be something DBZ related... I don't know why I'm in a DBZ craze right now...

And now, we have the preview for the first Viewer selected Chapter! I figured that since the viewers chose it, then that means that they can go ahead and choose the name for it!

Bahahahahahahaha! Oh, I love it! Quite the good ending, I'd say. Never alone!

daww!

Wait...Omnius now has to clean up Trixie's mess, somehow re-age the mane 6 etc etc?

...You are a GENIUS!

is it just me or is Omniusbecoming way to overpowered like goku

>>8477484774

I wouldn't say I'm 'overpowered' mostly because of how many times I've gotten my butt kicked.

For awhile I liked this story, but it's turning more and more into blatant self insertion. (Wishful thinking)

It's like your character is the only thing out there who can DO anything. Everyone must depend on him, because they can't be counted on to take action themselves.

All glory goes to Omnius, nopony else...

That aside, the story still reads well.

>>8486184861

While I don't think that's the case, everyone is entitled to their own opinion. Thanks for the input.

Ah, the old "Get guy out of his house so we can throw him a Christmas party" bit. Can't beat the classics.

I kinda just feel like saying this: I'm not getting much of a Mary Sue/Self-insert vibe here. Omnius is powerful and whatnot, but so far him being in the story hasn't impacted the episodes in a negative way, at least in my humble opinion. I just wanted to throw out my two cents.

(Oh, Lastly, for that next poll, I vote for Call of the Cutie. Merry Christmas and stuff!)

Winter Wrap-up nice chapter

Loved it

Oh yea when can we expect the next chapter?

Winter Wrap-up. Chapter 12. Do it.

>>8534185341

If all goes well, I want to try and get it out by Wednesday, but if it's not out by then, expect it on Friday or Saturday.

Oh, dude! I just thought of the best idea! You know, I'm sure you've already thought of it, but here it is.

Don't even think of adding 'Feeling Pinkie keen' to a poll. That one absolutely HAS to be a chapter! Just imagine it, all the jokes that could be used!

Oh, wait... I was thinking of using it in one of my chapters...

dang it.

Ah,well, I bet you were going to use it anyway.

ciao

>>8627986279

Ah, no worries. If anyone is interested, they can vote on Fanfiction. just click the

Image: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/3282119/Omnius_The_Traveling_Guardian

>>8629586295

LINK

Damn it!

WHY CAN'T YOU USE SHADOW CLONES TO WRITE!!!!

>>8754887548

Because they're busy beating Battletoads for me!

Okay, again with similarities. I planned ahead the other day and I realized that my chapter nine (or what I planned it to be) involved cupcakes. That makes me worried again, because I don't want you to think I'm copying you, so I'm just checking. And I involved cupcakes in mine because Mobius has a connection with Pinkie after that (because Pinkie is my fav no matter what).

So, uh, anyway, I just want your permission because well it really does seem like yours(ish).

>>8907189071

Don't sweat it bro. You don't need to ask my permission. It's YOUR story, so just go with what your heart tells you. That's what I'm doing with this.

>>8907389073

Okay, thanks for that! That's what I was told by others when I was writing short stories. That's exactly what I'll do then!

Oh yeah, and my vote is Feeling Pinkie keen! I would love to see the reactions you would have to "The Spidey- I mean, Pinkie Sense."

I finished it early...Yay?

*Reads intro to enxt chapter* "Kaboom" YYYYYHHHHHEEEEEAAAAAHHHHH.Nice chapter btw but I think that the yoshi island refernce was going a bit far...and i'm not talking about the boss.

>>8945189451

It's only going too far when an actual Yoshi shows up...

>>8945589455 and stealing that idea.Also how to get music links in your chapter it would be useful for one of my scenes

yay

>>8945789457

You highlight the phrase that will take them to the music, and then, up where the options to Bold and Italicize are, click "Insert Link".

>>8946289462 thanking you

BOOMSTICK ME WANT