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With the hurricane of Pinkie Pies fresh in her memory, Twilight Sparkle only sees a thirty-three percent chance that Rainbow Dash's demand to meet at the Mirror Pool will end in any positive way. But a debt must be repaid, and Rainbow Dash needs her help...
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I thoroughly enjoyed reading and working with you on this story, Mind. 'Twas a fun little thing, and good luck in the contest!
Noticed that I'm commenting more on stories nowadays, but the last bit is absolutely hilarious.
Don't know about you, but if you continue this with.... something.... I don't know but I'll be a very happy person.
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Commenting is a good thing! Thank you, and I'm glad you enjoyed it.
4689931 Your welcome, but seriously, the way you ended this story would totally allow for a sequel.
Ha loved it like and favorite. Love your work keep at it
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Thanks!
Twilight Sparkle is laying down the law and woe upon you if you keep arguing.
Of course, getting kicked in the you-know-what or the you-know-whats generally causes the sort of horribly nauseating pain you won't soon forget, so her ire is completely understandable... And they're ponies, meaning they got hooves, which are basically clubs of bone which would probably hurt even more than a foot would.
So yeah, ouch!
Edit: Oh yeah, have an upvote too.
Ah, yes, that was hilarious. Perfect slap-stick comedy, loved it.
I about died laughing at that.
Cheers!
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The prompt responsible for this story was to write something based on a real experience. I've taught swim lessons before, so... yeah, I've felt her pain.
Kids or adults, it hurts like hell.
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I appreciate it! That's one of my personal favorite lines in the story too.
4692658 Oh, owch. You've got my sympathies...
Well that was... well, fun honestly. It was cute and fluffy and funny and... well, I gotta say the slapstick could use some work, but aside form that... well done.
Good luck in the contest.
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You too, and thanks for the comment.
This means that Twilight estimates a three out of four chance of a positive outcome.*
This means that Twilight sees one-to-two odds of a positive end, assuming each way is equally probable.
Odds are different from chances (which seems to be the concept you had in mind in the description). Odds express the likelihood of a possibility relative to the likelihood of that possibility not occurring (or vice versa depending on context), while chances express the likelihood of a possibility relative to a value that represents 100%.
*Gambling uses a different convention, where three-to-one odds of something indicates that three times as much money has been bet against an occurrence as has been bet for it, which indicates an aggregate estimate of a one in four chance of the event occurring.
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I thought three-to-one meant triple money because it was rare. Fixed, and thanks for pointing that out.
This was fun
albeit, well... painful 
at this rate one of them will be crippled and the other in prison within a week *sigh* young pony love 
I was kinda waiting for one of them to accidentally duplicate in the pool, and then everything turns into a threesome (of either flailing hooves or, well, favors...)
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If no one is screaming how can you know that they're in love?
Like it, fav and upvote, good luck in the contest.
You know, I expected something else entirely when the mirror pool was brought up.
But this was a nice cute fluffy little thing now wasn't it?
Loved the playful interactions between the two, and I kept chuckling at how fed up Twilight was getting as Rainbow continued to accidentally beat her up. 
Good job with this, really enjoyed it. And best of luck in the contest!
DJRD
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Even Twilight's patience has it's limits...
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Thank you both.
Have you ever considered submitting this story to Equestria Daily? You can find out how to do so here.
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I'm not sure I'm ready for EQD yet. One of their prereaders gave this a review on his blog today, and he had issues with how weak the ending was. I appreciate the tip though. Glad you enjoyed it enough to suggest that.
T'was an enjoyable read
I sympathize with getting hit down there, unpleasant 
Well that is certainly a creative use of the mirror pool. Have a ribbon:
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I had some trouble envisioning their physical positions in the pool at times, but I still loved it all the same. Up vote and a favorite. Thanks for the fun read.
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Yeah, I probably could have done better there. Ponies swim remarkably similar to humans in the show, and I didn't give much thought to it beyond that. Thanks for pointing it out.
"Do this, and I might not decide to set your tail on fire to see if you remember what I taught you. Am I clear?"
ROFLMFAO!
I don't usually like shipping fics, but this is too cute and well-written for me not to like
Great job! 
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Thank you! I love it when people say they enjoy something they usually don't. That's high praise to me.
As a former swimming instructor, I identify painfully (emphasis on that adverb) strongly with Twilight. Thankfully, none of my adult students every landed a solid kick on me, but still.
Very well-written!
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The prompt for this one was to write a story based on a real experience. I share your pain, my friend. I share your pain.
This. Video. Story. Was. Confusing.
Uh, Twi, don't you think that's a bit harsh? Unless...
*gasps in realization*...Twilight! You're not very pain tolerant are you!
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Hey now, that's a very sensitive area to get kicked in, regardless of the gender.
6083033 I know, I've been kicked there a multitude in the past 7 1/2 years. I took Tai Kwon Do for 6 years and quit a year and a half ago. I got stuck with people who couldn't lift their legs high easily alot. I never once wore a sports cut to protect myself because it restricted my mobility. Then again, many people didn't.