In Equestria's early history, years before Luna had become a princess like her sister, ever before she gotten her cutie mark, she was once plagued with nightmares. She wanted to sleep without these monsters and demons to haunt her. Help does come in a blue box, from a stallion who calls himself "Doctor", with is assistance, and a pony whom everyone thought was Luna's imaginary friend.
Author's note: I do not own any rights to "Doctor Whooves and Assistant" by the fantastic YouTube radio drama series by Ponies with Pockets Productions aka PrierceSmoulder. This story is a tribute to their series that get's better and better with every video.
Also, a huge thank you to SecretBrony01 for editing this.
Chapters (8)
To be honest, You do not need help. This is really good. I'll keep an eye on iit... buck this. I love it
When describing River Song, I believed you misspelled Tail.
I thought the title said "Hello Hitler"
Ooh... Future events in the past. Just what The Doctor and River Song need!
Oh, and now it's River who's going to be confused about what's going to happen. Can you have Luna say: "Spoilers" at one point? that would be awesome.
Still awesome!!!
I can see luna turning in to NNM.
you listened to ephriam blue. fun. first I thought it would be stupid, but it's actually pretty funny.
and that's how nightmare moon was born. (I hope i didn't spoil anything....)
I'm liking this story so far, I'm looking forward to what happens next. The only thing I want to point out is that the Doctor in 'Doctor Whooves and assistant' doesn't use the catchphrase 'Allons-y' instead he uses the phrase "Avanti'. Other than that, keep up the good work.
Neither myself or Ditzy
Sentence.
A lot.
Neither of us dies, it’s only when we’re really hurt
Why did she keep returning to prison?
There you go. That’s just what I could find.
Are you going to explain how River got there is the first place, Also is Tick Tock an OC? Over all nice work
You know, every time you use the word 'does', you out 'dose'. They are two completely different words, and that should be fixed.
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You know this i the first time Ive seen the complete lyrics to the nursery song
That was good. Nice and short, though I would love to see a longer fic about the Doctor. Well written, well designed. I wasn't lost with all the characters, even though I only know about River. I liked it! This deserves a spot on my Inspiration bookshelf!
4700722 Tick Tock is an OC from the actual radio show.
Mate, you need to proof read before you post. I was able to spot numerous errors in the first chapter alone. Also, it's heavily implied that the Assistant Doctor is from before River Song, but it's your story, so...
Other than that, good story.
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First, it was proofread by SecretBrony01. Secondly, this is obviously an early story so I'm not that surprised by the reaction you just posted. Of course, I did learn a couple of things since then. At the same time however, I can hear you asking: "Why don't you edit yourself? It's easy." Well there's a saying that is especially true with me: "Those who proofread their own work has a fool for an editor." So even if I somehow got an army to edit this one story, this is no guarantee that it would be flawless.
But that's not to say that I don't accept volunteers. So unless you or someone else comes up to say that they want to correct whatever flaws there are in this, I'm afraid that this is as good as it's gonna get.
Bootstrap!
10/10