my name is Marc Timothy Moses and I am a gamer with vicious skills. you better watch out because I could immobilize you with my skills. I also have retail skills because I worked in retail stores.
Princess Twilight Sparkle improved Equestria greatly after defeating Tirek.
After she got her own kingdom, she also wanted a science facility and Black Mesa was more than what she bargained for.
The construction ponies built the facility near the Crystal Empire.
Notice: contains explosions, battles, an extremely dangerous science experiment, and aliens.
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So, what was that? No, really. What the hell was that? So, randomly Luna and Cadence work at Black Mesa because plot reasons. And they are employees? Wouldn't they be like, I dunno, administrators? Is this the human world Black Mesa? Or is it an alternate universe pony version? Why do Cadence and Luna have any scientific merit to work in the anomalous research lab? Are they theoretical physicists? Last time I checked, Cadence and Luna didn't know jack about science. Just this first chapter baffles me, and then after I finish the chapter, I look down and see that there are 16 more. 16 more. 16 more. 16 MORE!? I'm not sure if I could even dream of plowing through them (though they are probably short) and I could wager they fail to provide any answers to this. Really, I bet this could be an excellent crossover (and it probably has been made one in the past multiple times) but this fic simply lacks the merit to be worth further reading to me.
If I could leave you with some parting advice, it would be to read over your writing. Try to read it as if you were a critic, that way you could catch yourself if the dialogue is janky, or you forget a comma, or if you simply think you need more words per chapter. Anyways, keep writing.
EDIT: Just read the description, apparently it IS an Equestrian version of Black Mesa.
Thanks derpy
Oh god. Why am I reading this?
ANSWER: because I always finish reading a fan fic, no matter how shitty. And I've read worse. Much, much worse.
What do you want me to do, wubs and Waffles? Fix it?