Who could resist the company of their five best friends and their favorite teacher? In the days before her coronation, Twilight invites her friends along for a special spa day with herself and the princesses. While soaking in the ambiance and expensive mineral water, Twilight can't resist showing off her new aging spell she learned for Princess Celestia. What could possibly go wrong?
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This one's looking good! I found a few typos, though.
Part
The "I" needs to be capitalized.
"Hear" should be "heard" and "feint" should be "faint".
So are the sun and moon responding to Celestia and Luna's filly tempers?? Or are they going to keep rising and setting on their own???
There seem to be a lot of characters-turned-into-foals stories recently.
Has there always been this many and I just haven't noticed?
Nice job! I'll definitely be keeping an eye on this.
second chapter is decent. the first one...needs ALOT ALOT of work. there is NO WAY they can all appear like that. you're using pure coincidence for all 5 of them. that's going over board. you need to put more thought into it. while i like the idea. i suggest getting someone with more writing experience to helpp you rewrite the first chapter and to continue. you need work
well, i dunno
We ARE talking about Twilight, here, so i'm willing to wager that EVERYTHING COULD GO WRONG!!! 
This fic was adorable. I can't wait to read what other hilarity ensues.
Oh dear, Twilight is using mad science to try to fix magic... this will not end well. I almost feel sorry for Rarity... but I can just see Celestia and Luna freaking out when she tries to stuff them in dresses.
Beware the groove!!!!!!!!!!
I laught so hard at thelast bit.
Beware the groove!!!!!!!!!!
I laughed so hard at thelast bit.
I suppose this chapter was fun, even if it was predictable. I suppose every story about babysitting infants needs to have this scene at some point. It's like a rule or something.
You need to slow down a bit and look at what you're typing. I lost track of how many typos and misused words I spotted. It's ridiculous.
Oh, and officially, it's "Apple Bloom", not "Applebloom". Likewise, "Sweetie Belle" is also two words. I'm saying this beforehand since most people who make one of those mistakes typically make the other as well, and with Rarity caring for the foals, I assume Sweetie's going to be there, too.
4645853 Probably a little of both.
I see what you did there
An anti-aging (or age-reversing) spell is something cool; but an aging spell sounds kind of dark.
quite a start to the story, I wonder, how it'll go?
cuteness overload!
DON'T GO INTO THE BASEMENT!