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Somdudewillson


The master of unusual crossovers!

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A Planetary Annhilation/My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic crossover.

My first fanfiction, and my first work of fiction in general. Criticism of any sort is highly appriciated.

Equis. A world that, aside from a select few small conflicts, knows nothing of conflict, much less war. However, that all changes suddenly as an ancient remnant of a long-forgotten race's intergalactic war is revived by a dying star and hurtled toward Equestria. This Commander will cause untold chaos in Equis as the planet's inhabitants find that there is a new being residing here. A giant, quadrupedal metal being fashioned by an ancient race for the purpose of waging a war long forgotten. Nopony can tell you what that will do to the planet's politics, but one thing is certain: The group that ends up with it on their side after the dust settles will end up with power beyond their wildest dreams.

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 72 )

Just a single Firefly,really? In the Commander place I would have rather sent a squadron Peregrine and a pair of Hornets. You know, just for show. :trollestia: Anyway, brilliant chapter buddy, keep up the great work.

Good job so far.
Cant wait for another commander to land and have wars ensue.

4859250 Yes, but the Commander has no need to do that, as an emotionless machine.

4859892 I was actually going to use the unusual quality of the Everfree to have the Commander wage war against some other Equis faction first.

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Even better!

4859954 Good to know you think so. By the way, what do you think of the translation method I'm using?

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I find it ok.
I imagine that commanders would end up is possible first contact scenarios, so they would have translation software to make it a bit easier.

4860532 Yeah, that was what I was going for while still being realistic, as I find "universal translators" that can translate a whole unknown language instantly or only after a few minutes a really silly concept. Plus, it isn't a diplomat. It would have sufficient capability to manage first contact, but it wouldn't be a priority for the designers.

Great Job So far, though there was one or two spelling mistakes here and there.
I can't wait for the battles to commence!

4861800 Yeah, that's kinda what I expected, since I just dumped my unproofread work onto the site. As for battles, you're going to have to wait a bit for them.

The second chapter seems rushed.... but good work anyway. Also, I don't think Twilight would react THAT way for an Alien Base to be in Equestria. Actually, I don't think the Everfree is in Equestrian territory.

4947696 The second part was a dump of my current progress, so...
As for Twilight, how do you think she would react?
Also, why would the Everfree not be in Equestrian territory? AKA Why can't it be part of Equestria in my story?

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Knowing ponies, their reaction would be more of a panic really. Look how they reacted to Zicora.

The Everfree isn't apart of Equestria because it's unclaimed. There are no major settlements and ponies choose to fear it instead of exploring it. In my eyes it's unclaimed ground thus allowing the Commander to claim the land for his own.

4977919 Well he's kind of done that anyways...
I was showing twilight's reaction at more of an intellectual level. Like, she knew they were aliens, but she hadn't actually thought about it much more than that. By the time the envoy has reached the Commander, its gotten through her head, which is why she isn't full of questions at that point.

amazing work :moustache:, cant wait for more :twilightsmile:

5128243 Thanks! The next update might be a little while though, as I'm a bit short on inspiration at the moment.

I loved how he can only speak using words they have said

5203955 Thanks!

Also, everyone who wants more: More is coming VERY soon!

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Its being three days sense you said that!

also how will he tell them a enemy commander is on EQ?

5220374 That won't be for a while. Also, I am typing up the new chapter now! I had it down on paper already, so...

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Thank you

Also it was just a thought I know it wont be for a while

5221203 Won't be for a while? Why, the majority of it is here already! Granted, there is another chapter in Part 2 that is in progress now, but I have all of it planned already, as well as most of Part 3.

5228620 No, there will not be another commander in Part 3... There will be combat though! And there will be a long story arc spanning to the end of Part 4, but an enemy Commander will arrive in Part 5!

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Yes! I got you to tell us all when another commander will arrive on EQ!

5233321 Well... yes, you did. But I won't tell you anything else about what comes next! Especially not the sudden ambush by a bunch of mercenaries that is coming up! Wait, did I just type that up...

Comment posted by Marsara deleted Feb 12th, 2015

Just for fun.

Month: 4.
Day: 13 .
Time: 3:00 am.

WHERE IS NEXT CHAPTER!!!!!!!!!!:twilightangry2::twilightangry2::pinkiecrazy:

5237906 What, you want me to work faster? That'll cost you... 1 billion virtual cookies. Put them in a briefcase in the graveyard, at the back of first grave on the right, at midnight. I also accept cookiepal.

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Do you accept cookie clicker?

5238213 Yah. Also, look at Part 2. It's been updated.

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good job

Wait...

Where are my cookies!

5240776 I had GLaDOS portal them out of your inventory.

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TO THE MOON!!!!

5245895 Been there, done that.

Um...

Me: Commander Osiris 2879

Commander Osiris: Fire Annihilaser 9?

Me: Yes

Hello???

Did we just have a internet fight?

Where are all the other comment's?

First commenter here to say you dont often have multiple chapters per page each page/chapter should be around 1000 words (average) other then that heads up on the fanfic standerd i cant complain about the fic it self

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First commenter? Comment #38. Really?

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Why I must agree old boy.

5366081 Well too bad, you're not getting them.

Planet Halleys, on the other hand...

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And I expect the annihilaser

5614081 More is coming as soon as I can type it up.

5615241 Wow. It's really nice to see that someone likes my story THAT MUCH.

5615268 And... Updated! I still have more to type up though...

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