I'm surprised no one else has commented on this yet so let me be able to say this story is terrific

>>2003620036

I meant "let me be the first to say"

>>2004520045

Thanks! That means a lot!

I worked pretty hard on this, I'm glad to see someone liked it.

D'awww. : 3

Very nice take on a young Trixie.  Too bad she didn't follow Celestia's last bit of advice I suppose...

>>2009320093

Thanks! I'm letting the ending bit lead into the sequel I have planned. I thought the story for this was too basic, I have a lot more twists in mind for my next story!

The story itself is great and fun, but there are quite a few grammatical and contextual errors.

You refer to Trixie as a mare, one pony as a horse, etc. Could use some editing.

Wonderful story! You really did a great job with this. I can't wait for a sequel

the essence of the story is great... but there is a few individual gramatical errors and cliches (esp the over usage of 'one' in a particular paragraph)

as a whole though, prolly one of my favorite fics, BRAVO!

It says incomplete. That means I can expect more of this?! It's great as a standalone but I can has more?!

This was really great! But when Trixie didnt get in I was sad.

There were a few spelling mistakes and grammical errors that made me stop and think, was that maybe just a typing error?

overall it was great!

and now I know there's gonna be more im really happy.

Guys don't be afraid to rate, 1400 views and only 11 ratings? It takes only a second, tell me what you think!

Also, I'm seriously debating sending this to a professor. I'm absolutely certain there are grammatical errors in this story but I'm not so sure about them being "numerous". Please point out any errors you find by sending me a private message with the correction. I've proofread it many times, and the reviewers I sent it to have not found anything so I'm getting paranoid by all these grammar comments.

>>2081720817

Made the edit, thanks!

>>2088420884

Yes you can! I've got it all planned, all I have to do is write it. I'm thinking of starting today.

>>2090220902

If found the spelling error, I spelled "scared" wrong right? Yes, that was just a typo. I'm glad to hear you're excited for the next one!

The only way this could of been better is if twilight went in after her.

A very nice story. A bit slow but it's still very well written. I would think later stories would do better with more conflict, right now it's a nice story but there's not much to it. Keep it up though! Make me like The Great and Powerful Trixie too! Good work!

>>2124621246

Thank you so much for the critique! I agree completely, for my first fanfic I wanted to try something easy and cute but that definitely keeps it from being great. I have some pretty gruesome stuff in mind for Trixie to deal with in the next chapter. I feel a little sorry for her.... sorta.

what a nice preluede that could perfectly fit in the canon story X3.