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CoolStoryBrony

Joined January 2012
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Mental distortion is not required.  It will be provided for you.

Stories (4)

  • Make a Wish
    When Scootaloo is diagnosed with a fatal illness, Rainbow Dash will do anything to save her.

    18,800 words · 3,632 views · 813 likes · 17 dislikes
  • Pinnacle
    Rainbow Dash is determined to be the best flyer in the world when she leaves Ponyville behind to pursue her career as a Wonderbolt. After years of achievement and success, she has finally reached the top—and doesn't know what to do next.
    3,765 words · 1,231 views · 139 likes · 1 dislikes
  • Cherish
    “You’re going to go through a very hard time, something nopony should ever have to go through. You’re going to experience things nopony should, and there won’t be anypony around to relate."
    6,048 words · 441 views · 39 likes · 1 dislikes
  • Maternal
    Firefly writes to her best friend about her career, her declining health, and her daughter, Scootaloo. Based on events from the story blog Motherly Scootaloo.
    4,724 words · 989 views · 72 likes · 5 dislikes

Blog Posts (93)


Abandoned by her parents and raised by her wits, Scootaloo knows about the dangers of dreaming.  Any focus given to an impossible goal is focus lost from finding food, shelter, and warmth for another night.  Settling herself in Ponyville, she lives day by day, surviving on scavenged meals and the love of her friends and idol.

But when Scootaloo collapses and is diagnosed with a terrible disease, her fragile life is thrown into disarray.  Her resolve is tested as her illness impacts Rainbow Dash, strains her friendships, and confines her to a hospital bed.  With nothing but hope to drive her forward, how long can Scootaloo fight when blind to the only thing she has to hold on to?


Thanks to JakeHeritagu, Corejo, Void Chicken, zaponator, and CSquared08 for editing.

Cover Art provided by RainbowGambler.

First Published
10th Apr 2012
Last Modified
29th Aug 2013

Comments ( 190 )

#1 · Chapter 1 · 66w, 2d ago · · ·

C-C-C-Combo Breaker

I didn't even know you were redoing this

#2 · Chapter 1 · 66w, 2d ago · · ·

dude. this looks awesome.

#3 · Chapter 1 · 66w, 2d ago · · ·

Thats a lot of deleted posts! I am happy to see this back up

#4 · Chapter 1 · 66w, 2d ago · · ·

>>2581972

Wanted to clear out comments that were irrelevant, because y'know, rewrites n' shiz.

#5 · Chapter 1 · 66w, 2d ago · · ·

Ok a restart........this better be the only restart...

#6 · Chapter 1 · 66w, 2d ago · · ·

So you've decided to go back and rewrite this from scratch huh? Well I suppose that's good considering how long it's been since this was updated. :eeyup:

#7 · Chapter 1 · 66w, 2d ago · · ·

Where is the reset buttom?

#8 · Chapter 1 · 66w, 2d ago · · ·
#9 · Chapter 1 · 66w, 2d ago · · ·

59 views, 636 upvotes and 12 downvotes?

Seems legit.

#10 · Chapter 1 · 66w, 2d ago · · ·

It begins ... AGAIN! Yay!...

I mean, aww. Scootaloo's got cancer. That's sad.

In all seriousness, it's glad to see this story beginning again, and stronger than ever.

#11 · Chapter 1 · 66w, 2d ago · · ·

>>2582132

I goofed up the rewrite stuff, you goober.

#12 · Chapter 1 · 66w, 2d ago · 2 · 1 ·

>>2582144 Nope, no excuses . Now go find half the people who upvoted it and make them downvote it. You have to start at 50/50 after all.

#13 · Chapter 1 · 66w, 2d ago · · ·

I'm really glad to see this story going again. :twilightsmile:

#14 · Chapter 1 · 66w, 2d ago · · ·

Ok waaaay better than the last version :rainbowkiss:

#15 · Chapter 1 · 66w, 2d ago · · ·

I liked the original more. Anywhere I can find that?

#16 · Chapter 1 · 66w, 2d ago · · ·

definitly alot more detail, but i feel like there might have been less, and it would have still been good. besides that 10/10 :pinkiehappy:

#17 · Chapter 1 · 66w, 2d ago · · ·

>>2582221

Link on the bottom of my page.

#18 · Chapter 1 · 66w, 2d ago · · ·

I was excited to see an email saying that make a wish had updated. I was a bit disappointed to see it was just a rewrite.

Then I read it.

Holy crap. That was amazing. You have progressed unbelievably far since last year.

#19 · Chapter 1 · 66w, 2d ago · · ·

Huge improvement. And I get the feeling you're slowly turning to SS&E, but that's probably just me. :twilightsmile:

Looking forward to seeing how the story progresses.

*notices orange tag*

Don't you dare. DON'T YOU FUCKING DARE, YOU HEAR ME? :twilightangry2:

#21 · Chapter 1 · 66w, 2d ago · · ·

Having read the original, I felt as though you were just re-uploading it, but I'm seeing some changes, and some reoccurring stuff. Realizing that the first one was sad, and this one is on its way, I can say I can't wait for an update. :pinkiesmile:

-Hotwingsrule

#22 · Chapter 1 · 66w, 2d ago · · ·

JESUS MAN!

This paints a very grim and vivid picture.  I mean, YIKES.

#23 · Chapter 1 · 66w, 2d ago · 1 · ·

Euch. Way to many rewrites. It seems like a quarter of authors on here feels the need to start over at least one lately. Oh well.

#24 · Chapter 1 · 66w, 2d ago · · ·

Everything is perfect. Except scootaloo does not have pink hair you dumb

#25 · Chapter 1 · 66w, 2d ago · · ·

I shall read with much interest... later

#26 · Chapter 1 · 66w, 2d ago · · ·

Nice rewrite.:pinkiehappy: I'm bit disappointed :twilightangry2:but I manage. By any chance can you reupload the original too sense I also like to reread original stories?:twilightblush:

#27 · Chapter 1 · 66w, 2d ago · · ·

I forgot this existed...

#28 · Chapter 1 · 66w, 2d ago · 1 · ·

Nice job with the writing, very well done.

But poor Scootaloo...sick with cancer, homeless, pennyless, hungry most of the time...

Poor thing...:fluttercry::ajsleepy:

#29 · Chapter 1 · 66w, 2d ago · · ·

ok, now that you've beat the poor little thing to a pulp, you'd better make her happy now.

#30 · Chapter 1 · 66w, 2d ago · · ·

Rewrite, eh? Definitely more detailed, but the tone of the story is a bit more intense. I'll be looking forward to your new take on your story.

#31 · Chapter 1 · 66w, 2d ago · 1 · ·

A rewrite, interesting...well, I'm still following it!

By the way, I really love your descriptive writing.  It's making this read much better, and in a very different way, than the first time.

#32 · Chapter 1 · 66w, 2d ago · · ·

So Awesome rewrite but... can you upload the old version too? Like an archive?

#33 · Chapter 1 · 66w, 2d ago · · ·

Cancer.  You gave someone cancer.

My apologizes, but I shan't be reading this.  (Family member w/ cancer, leave it at that)

You do, however, get an up vote for the style and wording.

~Skeeter The Lurker

#34 · Chapter 1 · 66w, 2d ago · 2 · ·

I remember reading the old version of this. What you've written now kind of blows it out of the water. Really, really good.

#35 · Chapter 1 · 66w, 1d ago · · ·

i like this one better, but scoots has fuschia mane & tail, which is a shade of purple

#36 · Chapter 1 · 66w, 1d ago · · ·

It's back?  Yessssssssssss!

This comment will be edited to contain actual thoughts after I read the chapter.  Hooray for knee-jerk posting!

#37 · Chapter 1 · 66w, 21h ago · · ·

Aw man, I missed the old one? It was on a list of my "to reads" XD:raritydespair::raritycry:

#38 · Chapter 1 · 66w, 20h ago · 2 · ·

There are very few FIMfictions which I've read that make me feel that my heart's shattered into unrepairable pieces. This is one of them.

I'm a bit distraught that you're re-writing it because it means that I'm going to have to read it again in even greater and more heart-wrenching detail. Not sure if I can handle this. Oh well, I'm going to read either way.

Beautifully written, by the way.

PS: Will we see Summerset? ...So long as she doesn't die she'll make it a bit brighter.

#39 · Chapter 1 · 66w, 15h ago · 2 · ·

He’s an oncologist here at the hospital.

Poor Scootaloo...

You know you are in a bad way when your primary physician has a speciality with a Greek or Latin name.

I like what you have done so far with the rewrite. Looking forward to more!

#40 · Chapter 1 · 66w, 12h ago · · ·

Huh, I thought this looked familiar but it had just been so long since I had read it I guess. It is still really good although it would seem that Scoot's symptoms set in earlier and much more fiercely this time round, not that I'm complaining or anything... Anyway, I really do hope my favorite CMC pulls through this.

#41 · Chapter 2 · 65w, 3d ago · · ·

Wow things are not looking good for Scootaloo. How soon till we find out if she's ever going to recover or if it's just a matter of time before the end comes? :fluttershysad:

#42 · Chapter 2 · 65w, 3d ago · · ·

How to make a good introduction :derpytongue2:

#43 · Chapter 2 · 65w, 3d ago · · ·

MOAR! :flutterrage:

#44 · Chapter 2 · 65w, 3d ago · · ·

Sorry, I know this is stupid but I noticed the number of likes you have , and so I thought you deserved this:

#45 · Chapter 2 · 65w, 3d ago · · ·

LOL, Satan likes this story, it has 666 likes at the time of this post :twilightoops:

#46 · Chapter 2 · 65w, 3d ago · 2 · ·

Color me impressed.  You have a very evocative writing style, with a richness of detail that really brings the scene to life.  

(Yeah, but jumping horsefeathers, why does it seem like everyone wants to make my life into rotten sludge and kill me off?  What'd I ever do to you guys?) :scootangel:

(Take it easy, Scootaloo, it's just a story...)

(Yeah, I know...)

(Besides, not everyone's out to get you, you know; there's all kinds of stories here where you get a happy ending.)

(Yeah, I know...)

(...and hey, maybe you'll get a cutie mark in dramatic acting out of it.  Dramas always win more awards than comedies, y'know.)

(Heyyyy, yeah!  Cutie Mark Crusader Academy Award Winners, YAY!)

(YAY!  I mean, "Oh, agony, despair, we're all gonna diiieeeeee!"  How was that?) :applecry:

(...and there was a great disturbance in The Force, as if a trio of hyperactive fillies cried out in excitement, and were suddenly... um... suddenly... oh, never mind, I got nothin'.) :unsuresweetie:

#47 · Chapter 2 · 65w, 3d ago · 1 · ·

Summerset's awesome. I like her.

#48 · Chapter 2 · 65w, 3d ago · 1 · ·

i've seen this before. the exact story ON TUMBLR!! XT

so nless this is the mod of that tumblr making a story or you've got permission from said mod. i suggest taking it down

#49 · Chapter 2 · 65w, 3d ago · 2 · ·

I think Summerset should be the leader of an indie band called Top Hat Full Of Gold...

#50 · Chapter 2 · 65w, 3d ago · 1 · ·

>>2610218 wow, your depressing :rainbowhuh:

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