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I didn't even know you were redoing this

dude. this looks awesome.

Thats a lot of deleted posts! I am happy to see this back up

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Wanted to clear out comments that were irrelevant, because y'know, rewrites n' shiz.

Ok a restart........this better be the only restart...

So you've decided to go back and rewrite this from scratch huh? Well I suppose that's good considering how long it's been since this was updated.

Where is the reset buttom?

Plotline, Acceptable, Continue

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59 views, 636 upvotes and 12 downvotes?

Seems legit.

It begins ... AGAIN! Yay!...

I mean, aww. Scootaloo's got cancer. That's sad.

In all seriousness, it's glad to see this story beginning again, and stronger than ever.

>>25821322582132

I goofed up the rewrite stuff, you goober.

>>25821442582144 Nope, no excuses . Now go find half the people who upvoted it and make them downvote it. You have to start at 50/50 after all.

I'm really glad to see this story going again.

Ok waaaay better than the last version

I liked the original more. Anywhere I can find that?

definitly alot more detail, but i feel like there might have been less, and it would have still been good. besides that 10/10

>>25822212582221

Link on the bottom of my page.

I was excited to see an email saying that make a wish had updated. I was a bit disappointed to see it was just a rewrite.

Then I read it.

Holy crap. That was amazing. You have progressed unbelievably far since last year.

Huge improvement. And I get the feeling you're slowly turning to SS&E, but that's probably just me.

Looking forward to seeing how the story progresses.

*notices orange tag*

Don't you dare. DON'T YOU FUCKING DARE, YOU HEAR ME?

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Having read the original, I felt as though you were just re-uploading it, but I'm seeing some changes, and some reoccurring stuff. Realizing that the first one was sad, and this one is on its way, I can say I can't wait for an update.

-Hotwingsrule

JESUS MAN!

This paints a very grim and vivid picture.  I mean, YIKES.

Euch. Way to many rewrites. It seems like a quarter of authors on here feels the need to start over at least one lately. Oh well.

Everything is perfect. Except scootaloo does not have pink hair you dumb

I shall read with much interest... later

Nice rewrite. I'm bit disappointed but I manage. By any chance can you reupload the original too sense I also like to reread original stories?

I forgot this existed...

Nice job with the writing, very well done.

But poor Scootaloo...sick with cancer, homeless, pennyless, hungry most of the time...

Poor thing...

ok, now that you've beat the poor little thing to a pulp, you'd better make her happy now.

Rewrite, eh? Definitely more detailed, but the tone of the story is a bit more intense. I'll be looking forward to your new take on your story.

A rewrite, interesting...well, I'm still following it!

By the way, I really love your descriptive writing.  It's making this read much better, and in a very different way, than the first time.

So Awesome rewrite but... can you upload the old version too? Like an archive?

Cancer.  You gave someone cancer.

My apologizes, but I shan't be reading this.  (Family member w/ cancer, leave it at that)

You do, however, get an up vote for the style and wording.

~Skeeter The Lurker

I remember reading the old version of this. What you've written now kind of blows it out of the water. Really, really good.

i like this one better, but scoots has fuschia mane & tail, which is a shade of purple

It's back?  Yessssssssssss!

This comment will be edited to contain actual thoughts after I read the chapter.  Hooray for knee-jerk posting!

Aw man, I missed the old one? It was on a list of my "to reads" XD

There are very few FIMfictions which I've read that make me feel that my heart's shattered into unrepairable pieces. This is one of them.

I'm a bit distraught that you're re-writing it because it means that I'm going to have to read it again in even greater and more heart-wrenching detail. Not sure if I can handle this. Oh well, I'm going to read either way.

Beautifully written, by the way.

PS: Will we see Summerset? ...So long as she doesn't die she'll make it a bit brighter.

He’s an oncologist here at the hospital.

Poor Scootaloo...

You know you are in a bad way when your primary physician has a speciality with a Greek or Latin name.

I like what you have done so far with the rewrite. Looking forward to more!

Huh, I thought this looked familiar but it had just been so long since I had read it I guess. It is still really good although it would seem that Scoot's symptoms set in earlier and much more fiercely this time round, not that I'm complaining or anything... Anyway, I really do hope my favorite CMC pulls through this.

Wow things are not looking good for Scootaloo. How soon till we find out if she's ever going to recover or if it's just a matter of time before the end comes?

How to make a good introduction

MOAR!

Sorry, I know this is stupid but I noticed the number of likes you have , and so I thought you deserved this:

LOL, Satan likes this story, it has 666 likes at the time of this post

Color me impressed.  You have a very evocative writing style, with a richness of detail that really brings the scene to life.  

(Yeah, but jumping horsefeathers, why does it seem like everyone wants to make my life into rotten sludge and kill me off?  What'd I ever do to you guys?)

(Take it easy, Scootaloo, it's just a story...)

(Yeah, I know...)

(Besides, not everyone's out to get you, you know; there's all kinds of stories here where you get a happy ending.)

(Yeah, I know...)

(...and hey, maybe you'll get a cutie mark in dramatic acting out of it.  Dramas always win more awards than comedies, y'know.)

(Heyyyy, yeah!  Cutie Mark Crusader Academy Award Winners, YAY!)

(YAY!  I mean, "Oh, agony, despair, we're all gonna diiieeeeee!"  How was that?)

(...and there was a great disturbance in The Force, as if a trio of hyperactive fillies cried out in excitement, and were suddenly... um... suddenly... oh, never mind, I got nothin'.)

Summerset's awesome. I like her.

i've seen this before. the exact story ON TUMBLR!! XT

so nless this is the mod of that tumblr making a story or you've got permission from said mod. i suggest taking it down

I think Summerset should be the leader of an indie band called Top Hat Full Of Gold...

>>26102182610218 wow, your depressing

oh wow, rewrite. I was waiting on the new  (final?) chapter of the original...either I didnt see it in FimFiction..or this just happened and I didnt expect it.

>>26106602610660 This is indeed the same person as the scootaleukemia tumblr. He decided to stop that story and redo it as this story's rewrite.

>>26106602610660

Surprise, I was that mod the whole time!

And now scoots just needs to punch her square in the nose

>>26108652610865  ok then, cool. didn't know but thanks for telling me. i hate when people steal things. it's happened to me before

I'm really liking this rewrite. Wondering if you are still going to have rainbow feature in this with spectrum.

Yay, you are going to include Summerset! I was frightened when I saw you updated but then grinned like an idiot at the chapter title. I recognized this scene from the tumblr almost as soon as the chapter started.

Also I cried during Apple Bloom's monologue. I honestly did. ...thanks a lot

Great job though, seriously.

Noticed a few small grammatical issues/ typos. Nothing big, but given the amount of people you listed as editors, I was a bit surprised.

A young earth pony filly with a scarlet mane, stepped apprehensively out of its confines and into the soulless hallway.

I could be totally wrong, but I don't think that comma should be there.

Her eyes eyes twitched, glancing between backwards and forwards, help and home.

You said eyes twice. The line before this one was also indented quite a bit more than it should be.

Again, just small stuff. Figured I'd point 'em out for ya!

>>26113542611354

Thanks for letting me know.

Really really good, cant wait for you to finish. I want to Rainbows reaction though that may sound mean :/

Hmm...Summerset is obviously a cancer survivor.  She's going to give Scoot some perspective, show her that there is a light at the end of the tunnel.

I like that idea.