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Great story, as always.
Medic brightened immediately. “Really?!” he said. He then coughed, composing himself when he realized how perky he sounded just then. “Yes, well... I zank you, Fraulein Rarity.”
the well should be vell
WHY MUST WE WAIT SO LONG TO VEIW NEW GLORIOUS CHAPTERS ????
You never fail to amaze me, KnightMysterio. Keep them updates coming!
Oh, my, god...
Its the Story of the blanks ponies...
Yush, update
One wonders why Slendermane fears Ditzy.....
I suppose this is a three-way crossover now. Loving the story, even if I don't fully understand this new chapter.
I guess I've gotta go play story of the blanks
slenderman...story of the blanks...team fortress 2...this will end in bloodshed
"The more I learn, the more I will be able to fight it.”
Oh Celestia, you have no idea what you're getting yourself into.
Anyway, great story, originally found on ff.net and I hope you update soon.
Hmmm this chapter is shorter than the others then that must mean that there is the chance that you will post another chapter today as well!?
Or with the holiday break now officially over and people going back to work and school this possibly hindered your story's progress a bit... I know this may be a great story but I think that shorter chapters and frequent updates would be better than waiting a month to get a single long chapter. This story is just too damn good!
ive got ove 10 chapters to read, today everyone updated
gtg o spent an hour on tis one alredy
Why do they have to stay away from ditzy doo?
Great story, but half way through i began to get bored not because of the story but because the chapter was soo long maybe you should write chapters half this length and post more often anyway keep up the great work
YES!!! i was waiting so long for this fic to get another chapter out! thank you!!!
This is my favorite fic......EVER
hmm... I can see what are you doing there...
OH SHIT IT UPDATED.
TIME TO OPEN MY TF2 PLAYLIST AGAIN.
SHIT SHIT SHIT SHIT SHIT
YES
On one hand, this story got an update. On the other, we're now involving Sunnytown. This is going to be crazy.
Meanwhile at RED Base...
"Got any threes, maggot?"
"NOPE., Go fish, parder."
"This fuckin' sucks."
Slendermane (will someone please tell me what he's originally from?) + MLP +TF2 + The story of the blanks (as presented in the MLP 8-bit adventure) = pure unadulterated win!
I also must say that I really like how you are handling the BLUs. You don't make them so one-dimensional, and it took me a while to figure out demoman was the second element of honesty, if he is. I could still be mistaken at this point.
Also, the entire incident in Cloudsdale was abso-fricken-lutely hilarious!
One last thing; I plan on getting a High quality mic set in February. When I get it, the first thing I'm going to do with it is post a reading of this on youtube. I also have a friend who's a pretty good artist. If you'd like, I could ask him to do a coverart of the Ponified BLUs for this story.
EXcellent
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Oh, that sounds great! I'd love to have art of the BLU ponies. And thank you, I greatly appreciate that you're willing to do a reading of this.
Also, Slenderman(e) is from an internet creepypasta called The Slenderman Mythos. Specifically, Marble Hornets.
I like how the fic is going.
>>KnightMysterio I will definitely check that out. And my friend has agreed to do it for you!
>>KnightMysterio I will definitely check that out. And my friend has agreed to do it for you! Although if you have any reference images, aside from the pictures of the BLU team, that would help him a lot.
MOAAAAAR
*reads mention of 'Sunnytown'* Nothing out of the ordinary.
*Reads name 'Gray Hoof'* huh...where have I seen that before?
*ten minutes later* Wait..GRAY HOOF!?
OH FUCK!
Please don't hurt the kids....
This is so amazing!!!
Also: Demoman frowned. “Talk about yuir Nightmare fuel...”
*Rimshot*
*Proceeds to get hit with bricks*
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I... may reword that later...
(Or give the line to Scout...)
I really enjoy your story. The perfect blend of action, characterisation and the fact that you got everyone in character makes it so good. However, I was wondering if you would mix the pairings up a bit. For example, you've got Scout and Pinkie, or Sniper and Rainbow mostly together most of the time. I was thinking if you could change it up by putting Spy, Pinkie and the Cakes making frilly French pastries (as you put it); or Heavy going to the library, looking for something to read (he does have a PhD in Russian Lit) and meeting Twilight.
In all, I will be reading your delightful fic and hope for more chapters.
...oh... my... this one chapter has me laughing and cringing in fear... tell me: how?!
Excellent writing, Knight!
Ciao!
"FOUND YOU... now gimme 20 dollars!"
All slendermane wants is a couple of bills of 20$, you know how much it is for facial surgery?
Story of the Blanks, Slender Man, Marble Hornets, TF2, MLP: FiM, all congealed into a fantasy/action/comedy fic... Tell me, do you have a radar that just picks up all my likes? Seriously, at the line when Twilight says "burn down Ponyville" in Chapter 3, I said "Wait....what?" aloud and reread the line before seeing Spike repeat it in the next one.
Final Decision:
I keep throwing money at my screen yelling for a new chapter, but nothing's happening. Am I doing it right?
Guess I'll go reread the previous chapters.... again..... for the tenth time.
Now, with the fan ranting out of the way, a little (hopefully) constructive criticism:
A few grammar mistakes/missing words here and there. I know this seems like a really small nit to pick at such an amazing story, but when a word is suddenly missing or a sentence doesn't sound right, it kills the flow and immersion into the story for me. I'd be willing to proofread your scripts for you before posting if you wish, and can assure you that I'm a complete grammar/spelling nazi.
A couple times throughout the story thus far, you seem to get a little confused between accents when you didn't mean to (at least I don't think you did). Standing out in particular are a couple times Medic says "Da" instead of "Ja" and Spy's s-to-z conversion edges in. While it is true that people speaking with a German accent will replace hard "th" sounds (e.g. "the" "there" "these") with a z, the softer "th" sound (e.g. someTHing, THink) is more commonly replaced with an s, but once again, this is minor nitpicking.
The Slendermane/Slender Man reference loses a lot of its pull on people who don't know what it's about. I realize an exception sits here typing this, but people who play TF2 and watch MLP: FiM don't strike me as the type to actively browse the web for creepypasta. That said, I wish I could think of a way to gently baptize newcomers into the Slendermane/Slender Man mythos without killing story flow with long-winded explanations or requiring previous research (which may well prevent people from being able to sleep again) in a way better than you have already done, but find myself coming up blank. Still, even without fully understanding it, I think people only reading for the MLP/TF2 crossover will still find plenty to enjoy.
Keep up the good work maintaining character in both universes. This may not be saying much on the TF2 side, given the one-faced portrayal of them from the game allowing for the rest of their personalities to be left to the imagination, but incorporating it with MLP to the point where the line between fanon and canon blur? Amazing. The icing on the cake is picking out a personality that also is believable on the TF2 side. Soldier, the strict-yet-fair hardened war hero; or Scout, the glass-half-full morale booster; or Heavy, the gentle giant with a protective, violent streak all are excellent examples, but by far the one that sticks out in my mind is Medic. The mad scientist is self-aware of his personality, letting his scientific curiosity help rationalize his morbid actions, but even through his disgust with morals, his own let him know that Equestria "is a good place" and would be better off without the nine of them there, despairing over it in Chapter 2.
I know the amount of criticism seems large to what I called an amazing story, but believe me when I say that I wouldn't bother typing them if I didn't believe this story had the potential to go from being "excellent, amazing, and engaging" to "flawless"
TL;DR: Amazing story, with a few minor kinks here and there. If they were worked out, would be flawless.
Y U NO WRITE MORE?
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Thank you for your support of my story. Please note, however, that I am currently in college and have to work on that as much as I do this story. I have not given up on this, updates are just going to be slow, for which I apologize.
MOOOAAAAARRRR.
that is all.
FlutterHeavy...Both are elements of kindness....
I suddenly see a Stetson-wearing one-eyed lady blasting blank-flank zombies into oblivion with a Grenade launcher.
DO IT!!!
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I actually see the sticky launcher as demoman's signature weapon nowadays, with the GL being used more situationally than as a main weapon.
273163 Sparkler is Derpy's daughter, and Derpy is older than she looks.271997 You got everypony correct. And the itches will be explained when the next chapter is posted.
As in chapter 6? I'd like to see a bit more on them. Also, about that lavender pony who talked with Rainbow Dash, was that just a random pegasus, or derived from one of the other popular BG pegasi? I'm gonna say Cloud Kicker.
132025 *gasp* RUN, GRAMMAR NATZI!!!!!
138712 That might be cool.
Also now this is a 3 way crossover combining Story of The Blanks, Team Fortress 2, and My Little Pony Friendship is Magic, SO MUCH WIN!
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Agreed. I only use the GL when being artillery, lobbing a few shots at far opponents or for harassment. Most of the time, Scottish Resistance. You don't know how awesome it feels to fire 10 stickies all over the place. When someone walks over, KABLOOIE. I can also (sorta) use it offensively by just spamming stickies around them.
“Hey!” Pinkie Pie protested. “I don't have a 'focus' proble- SQUIRRLE!"
TF2 Slendermane and Story of the blanks? how many more crossovers XD
That's a great chapter and all, but what about us who have no idea who these characters are?
I'm not particularly interested in reading a dark-tagged story...
I also am very uncomfortable with the concept of skipping two chapters of a long story that I actually like just because I do not understand the contents. There are very few long stories that I can enjoy, after all...
Well, thanks to you I had to learn what Sunnytown and it's inhabitants were. I do not regret this.
This story is getting better with every chapter. Right now, it deserves about 7/5 moustaches.
Hey, hey, hey...
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Sup, Fat Albert?