Rainbow Dash is hypnotized and imprisoned by a cloud succubus. Her friend helps bust her out.
This will be easy enough...right?
WARNINGS: Humanized ponies, language, hypnosis, and self-insertion via OC. You've been warned.
To answer an FAQ (Fucking Aggravating Quacking), the level of humanization is completely human, with animalistic wings of the original fur color on pegasi, griffons, bat ponies, alicorns, etc. Unicorns use magic via their hands.
Cloud Succubi are a copyright of Danimarion
Edited by Jimmy The Grape
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You should probably read the chapter before listening to the reading. Like, you really should. REALLY REALLY SHOULD.
Chapters (2)
Interesting concept, definitely gonna read this one. I'll tell ya what I think in few, after I read it!!
Huh, wow, cool.
A few comments;
Great details, it was a smooth read, kept me interested, and didn't rush too much. At first, I was confused if she was human or pony...? I think she was human.
Also,[quote Trying to make the flight back home would be a Herculean feat, or at least she felt like it would be in her condition.]....do they know who Hercules is?? I am one for realistic-ness, does she know who Hercles is? As pony or human?
Also THE CREATURE....villain, friend or foe???? I have to know!!! Now!!
You...ARE gonna write more...right???
I'll be following you, so follow me too! And check out my writing, the Bourne Identapony.
Keep it up!! And tell me if/when you have more!!!
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Point taken with the Hercules thing. I'll find a better way to phrase that.
The succubus is...............,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
sorry aint telling loel
Glad you enjoyed though.
4580121
Perhaps you could use "was a hore-like" feat...I don't know, the Cutie Mark's crusaders song "Hearts as strong as horses" is playing in my mind, and since being a horse is a big dealio to them widdle ponies...maybe? Meh? Eh eheheheheh????
Just an idea.
hmm sees this story on the front page sees no mature tag only a teen tag
very surprised since it sounds exactly like the descriptions for a clopfic lol
4580616
gee i wonder
1337 words lol
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Believe it or not, that was actually not an accident.
4580718 I don't believe it was.
4580843
It's this thing
Who made the title story picture?
*saw title of story*
Oh. Like the E-sports team.
*saw title of first chapter*
Oh. Like the Doctor Who episode.
.... Goddamn i'm nerdy.
4580921
But it's called Blink because Dash does a lot of that in this chapter.
I mean in lore that type of way, is that simple and what it does and i would like to see more chapter because this good
because its amazing work I would say
4581231
I realised, my brain just jumped to conclusions for me
Either way, still excited to see where this story goes.
I would say your story amazing to me more because I love how a story leads to
adventure to begining to end and so how is this story going to end
You have a really good start here please dont ruin it with overly graphic clop like so many authors tend to do
Heh, first chapter is 1337.
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butts
a cloud succubus feeding off dreams is ... different. though she may want to downgrade her target... their magical right they can take earth ponies or unicorns right...
( what do they feed the ponies while in the sky anyway, waters easy but food ?)
also wonder if these guys were one hunted if so either luna or windigo's must not like them.
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I wanted to keep this strictly clean, so, yippee for you.
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That extension is more common than I thought, huh?
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The only acceptable word count for chapter two is 6,969 after that 1,337.
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sex what gross
I get the feeling you made it 'human' from the fact of the picture.
~Skeeter The Lurker
love to see more of this because it's great work and amazing
I like this beginning, but I think I'm just going to fave for now. We'll see where this goes...
NAP CITY, BITCH!
NAP NAP CITY BITCH!
Wowwwwwwwwwwwwwwww, interesting, please continue
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This can't be good...
Can't wait for the next chapter
More please
More chapters please
I really like this fic and it is interesting
Can't wait for More chapters
4770575
Fuck, no. I'm just juggling several projects. I'm essentially trying to plan when I'll write each story, and it's taking a while. But no, this isn't close to dead, I'm just getting ready to write.
4772371 yay it's not dead can't wait for more chapters
4772371 yay so your gonna add more chapters reall soon I want to read more chapters please
If you say that you are not ready it's abandonned for me