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Just a guy who writes, games, and does stuff and things. Currently offering my services as a Beta Reader. If you're bored (and like games, writing, or ponies) then visit my blog!


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  • Equestria Exiled
    A cellist finds a way to get herself into serious trouble on the Manehattan Space Station. Now she must find the Elements of Harmony, unravel the secrets of the Grand Equestrian Empire, save the universe, and find a way to make some friends.

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Octavia Melody is in a bit of a spot. Life on the Manehattan Space Station isn't easy for most ponies to begin with, but when your BitCard balance is zeroed out and you're living meal to meal? It starts to feel like things couldn't get much worse.

The problem is that that sort of thinking only invites more trouble.

When Octavia suddenly finds herself stuck in the middle of a plot that could destroy the whole of the Grand Equestrian Empire, the source of her next meal is going to be the least of her concerns. Now she must find the Elements of Harmony, unravel the secrets of the Empire, save the universe, and, just maybe, find a way to make some friends.

Quick thanks to my group at the Artist/Writer Collab panel at BABSCon. Without us bouncing ideas around, this story wouldn't be happening! And another quick thanks to all my beta readers who are doing some awesome work!

First Published
21st Jun 2014
Last Modified
10th Aug 2014

Comments ( 15 )

#1 · Chapter 1 · 12w, 1d ago · 2 · ·

I was going to read this story when I noticed it had Octavia playing a prominent role.

Then I saw the words "Space station" in the description.

I have a weakness, and it is space and spaceships. I am SO looking forward to spaceships with best pony!

EDIT: I should probably mention for prospective readers that from what I can tell in the first chapter, it's competently written and enjoyable.

Though it could use more space ships. There's never enough space ships.

#2 · Chapter 1 · 12w, 18h ago · 1 · ·

This shows promise, yes. I'm anticipating seeing the "Ponies... IN SPACE" aspect take a bigger, more prominent role in future chapters, as I am definitely somewhat of a sucker for sci-fi.

when you're BitCard balance
^ May want to fix that typo in the synopsis. I'd hate for someone to bypass this gem because of some minor grammatical errors in the intro, the way I almost did.

#3 · Chapter 1 · 12w, 13h ago · · ·

>>4584124 And that, ladies and gentlemen, is why you also run your synopsis through a beta reader. I'd originally had that sentence arranged completely different and my brain just derped over changing what version of "your" I was using.

Thanks for pointing it out. :twilightsmile:

#4 · Chapter 1 · 11w, 6d ago · · ·

Hot damn. I agree with Jonny here; more spaceships would be awesome, but this sounds fantastic. I'm seeing all sorts of different character and plot buildups here and I'm very excited. I've been looking for another bigger story to get into and this is exactly the kind I'm looking for. Space-themed sci-fi? National conspiracies? And of course the quest of a low-tier character to save everything ever? All of my yes. Vinyl and Tavi are best pones.

Love this.

#5 · Chapter 1 · 10w, 6d ago · · ·

Hmm this is a good start. It makes me wonder if Lyra is going to get in trouble trying to uncover these possible secrets in those books.

Anyway keep it up, something is bound to happen and I'm itching to read more.

#6 · Chapter 1 · 10w, 5d ago · · ·

>>4622352 Well, my plan is to try and maintain fairly regular updates, so hopefully that itch can be scratched soon enough.

#7 · Chapter 2 · 9w, 6d ago · · ·

This sounds amazing,  but I'll have to read it latter.

#8 · Chapter 2 · 9w, 5d ago · · ·

Wow, this. Is. Perfect! And has definitely been a more productive read than doing silly job-related work. Anxiously waiting for more! :scootangel:

#9 · Chapter 2 · 9w, 5d ago · · ·

Aw man that was fantastic! Some fast-paced action in the second chapter? That's what I'm talking about! This is looking better and better. I can't wait for chapter three! Not just because of my VinylTavia bias, either :twilightsmile:

#10 · Chapter 2 · 9w, 5d ago · 1 · ·

>>4655402 Hopefully it lives up to your expectations when you have the time to read!

>>4661816 Well, I certainly wouldn't call it anywhere near "perfect," but I appreciate the sentiment. Don't get fired because me of though! It would break my heart. Or inflate my self-esteem to dangerous levels. One of those two!

And I'm hoping (at least until I fine employment again) to maintain a biweekly schedule. So you won't be waiting too long!

>>4663444 Always got a deliver with a little punch after the first chapter! Hope I continue to deliver!

#11 · Chapter 1 · 9w, 2d ago · · ·

OK OK this is definitely a good start... now onto the next chapter

#12 · Chapter 2 · 9w, 2d ago · · ·

OK! Wow... This is good!

I hope for more updates soon!  I'll be waiting.

#13 · Chapter 3 · 5w, 3h ago · · ·

That. Was. Awesome!

#14 · Chapter 2 · 4w, 6d ago · · ·

Oh and I hope what vinyl is saying turns out to be foreshadowing... that would be a very interesting thing!

#15 · Chapter 3 · 4w, 6d ago · · ·

Beautiful!  I'll try to be patient for the next part...

Oh and I'm happy that I can't find grammar mistakes, you do really well with your Work!

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