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  • 4w, 2d
    Just a Quick Update #3

    After way too much time mulling it over, here are the revised versions of 1-3. Rejoice. Woo.

    Honestly, I probably shouldn't have bothered with it so early, but I would kind of like to see if I could sneak this fic onto EqD.

    Would I change more? Probably, and I have no doubt that opinion is going to grow the longer I work on this. That's the problem with serial writing: I'm making changes and decision without being 100% sure of where I'm going and sort of limiting my ability to (reasonably) go back and change things.

    Will I do future revisions? Probably, but not until I've got a ton more chapters under this listing.

    Speaking of, I'm staring at Chapter 4 right now and hoping to have it posted this weekend. Also, I'm hunting for some new pre-readers/editors, so if you're legit interested, let me know.

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  • 10w, 2d
    Just a Quick Update #2

    In case anyone cares. All moved, back to writing, progress soon.

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  • 11w, 6d
    Just a Quick Update

    I really need to do more dedicated blog posts at some point.

    Long story shot, in the middle of moving, looking for a job, getting a puppy, and some other shenanigans that have slowed me down badly. Chapter 4 is still in the works, as is the revision of 1 & 2. Will try to get 4 done within the next two weeks, and follow that up with the 1/2 clean-up for EqD because it would help my self-esteem a lot if I could get my writing kinks out and get this seeing some actual popularity!

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  • 17w, 2d
    Struggling with Schedules

    Figured this was a smarter way to do this.

    Little behind schedule right now. I think a chapter every two weeks is a little ambitious. Gonna strive for 2-3 weeks still, but the main problem I'm having right now is the quality of my writing is generally increasing with every draft/revision. Which means I'm spending way too much time revising for faster serial releases.

    This kinda makes sense. I'm busying trying to shave off a lot of rust right now (and I've been getting some more aggressive structural feedback, which is helping a ton). Unfortunately, it means I'm drafting over and over to debatable effect.

    Anyhow, still working back through Chapters 1/2 (the improvements have been pretty big, hoping they're up to EqD standards), but my primary focus is on getting chapter 3 great and getting it posted, so hang tight!

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  • ...

Octavia Melody is in a bit of a spot. Life on the Manehattan Space Station isn't easy for most ponies to begin with, but when your BitCard balance is zeroed out and you're living meal to meal? It starts to feel like things couldn't get much worse.

The problem is that that sort of thinking only invites more trouble.

When Octavia suddenly finds herself stuck in the middle of a plot that could destroy the whole of the Grand Equestrian Empire, the source of her next meal is going to be the least of her concerns. Now she must find the Elements of Harmony, unravel the secrets of the Empire, save the universe, and, just maybe, find a way to make some friends.

Quick thanks to my group at the Artist/Writer Collab panel at BABSCon. Without us bouncing ideas around, this story wouldn't be happening! And another quick thanks to all my beta readers who are doing some awesome work!

Revised versions of Chapters 1, 2, and 3 now posted!

First Published
21st Jun 2014
Last Modified
24th Nov 2014

I was going to read this story when I noticed it had Octavia playing a prominent role.

Then I saw the words "Space station" in the description.

I have a weakness, and it is space and spaceships. I am SO looking forward to spaceships with best pony!

EDIT: I should probably mention for prospective readers that from what I can tell in the first chapter, it's competently written and enjoyable.

Though it could use more space ships. There's never enough space ships.

This shows promise, yes. I'm anticipating seeing the "Ponies... IN SPACE" aspect take a bigger, more prominent role in future chapters, as I am definitely somewhat of a sucker for sci-fi.

when you're BitCard balance
^ May want to fix that typo in the synopsis. I'd hate for someone to bypass this gem because of some minor grammatical errors in the intro, the way I almost did.

>>4584124 And that, ladies and gentlemen, is why you also run your synopsis through a beta reader. I'd originally had that sentence arranged completely different and my brain just derped over changing what version of "your" I was using.

Thanks for pointing it out. :twilightsmile:

Hot damn. I agree with Jonny here; more spaceships would be awesome, but this sounds fantastic. I'm seeing all sorts of different character and plot buildups here and I'm very excited. I've been looking for another bigger story to get into and this is exactly the kind I'm looking for. Space-themed sci-fi? National conspiracies? And of course the quest of a low-tier character to save everything ever? All of my yes. Vinyl and Tavi are best pones.

Love this.

Hmm this is a good start. It makes me wonder if Lyra is going to get in trouble trying to uncover these possible secrets in those books.

Anyway keep it up, something is bound to happen and I'm itching to read more.

>>4622352 Well, my plan is to try and maintain fairly regular updates, so hopefully that itch can be scratched soon enough.

This sounds amazing,  but I'll have to read it latter.

Wow, this. Is. Perfect! And has definitely been a more productive read than doing silly job-related work. Anxiously waiting for more! :scootangel:

Aw man that was fantastic! Some fast-paced action in the second chapter? That's what I'm talking about! This is looking better and better. I can't wait for chapter three! Not just because of my VinylTavia bias, either :twilightsmile:

>>4655402 Hopefully it lives up to your expectations when you have the time to read!

>>4661816 Well, I certainly wouldn't call it anywhere near "perfect," but I appreciate the sentiment. Don't get fired because me of though! It would break my heart. Or inflate my self-esteem to dangerous levels. One of those two!

And I'm hoping (at least until I fine employment again) to maintain a biweekly schedule. So you won't be waiting too long!

>>4663444 Always got a deliver with a little punch after the first chapter! Hope I continue to deliver!

OK OK this is definitely a good start... now onto the next chapter

OK! Wow... This is good!

I hope for more updates soon!  I'll be waiting.

That. Was. Awesome!

Oh and I hope what vinyl is saying turns out to be foreshadowing... that would be a very interesting thing!

Beautiful!  I'll try to be patient for the next part...

Oh and I'm happy that I can't find grammar mistakes, you do really well with your Work!

Hows th progress on this coming along? :twilightsmile: (just wondering, its really good sofar afterall)

>>5173192 The long and short of it is: well!

Revisions of Chapter 1-3 (crossing fingers that they please EqD this time around) are seeing pre-reader edits currently and I'm wrapping up Chapter 4 as we speak! Crossing my fingers that revised 1-3 will be up this weekend and 4 will be end of next week at the latest.

Thanks for asking though. Means a lot to know people are still interested in reading!

Aw yeah, new chapter. :pinkiehappy: Slowly the behind-the-scenes plotting is revealed and the major players assemble. I sense big things looming and it is exciting.

I reread the previous chapters to refresh the story in my mind because it has been a while. There are a few places where I preferred the original text, but overall the new version is much improved. I did spot some patches of weird phrasing where it looks like sentences were chopped up for editing and not pieced back together quite right, though. I can go hunt those down for you when I have a free moment amidst my other editing duties, if you'd like.

   -Chimera of Team AngelFang

>>5309254 Yeah, sure, would definitely appreciate it. If anyone ever spots anything that looks off, please feel free to let me know and I'll correct it. Even between me and prereaders, weird stuff sneaks through sometimes, especially when I start taking a machete to previously "finished" material.

And thanks for the kind words. Hopefully things will only continue to get better!

Oooh the plot thickens :pinkiehappy:


Uh also going back to chapter 3, is that chapter supposed to be mostly in cursive (italics? whatever you call it in english) :twilightsheepish: Bit harder to read like that

>>5310916 Italics is correct. And no. I failed to close a tag, it turns out. Thanks for pointing that out! Fixed now.

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