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Sir Hat


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I want to read it
but at the same time i love thestrals and i know how it will end

i feel so conflicted :fluttercry:

I'm not a fan of zombie stories, but this one seems pretty interesting. Nice work so far.

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They're not zombies. They're just sick.:rainbowhuh:

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Well, sick, infected, etc, still the same zombie-esque scenario.

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It's not going to be a huge part of it.

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Depends...if this does well, yes, it's going to hurt. If it dies...well...then I don't think I'm gonna write for a while....:applecry:

I hope this continues...
DON'T LET IT DIE PEOPLE!!!

>Calling them thestrals
Fuck's sakes, mate. Why.

Comment posted by Manes deleted Jul 2nd, 2014

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>The fandom chose
>The fandom
>Not the entire thread that made them popular
Why

Comment posted by Manes deleted Jul 2nd, 2014

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But the fandom's shit
Why call something by a name that it isn't? Thestrals are skeleton horses, not bat-ponies.

From what I've understood...

The ponies are victims of the Wendigoes and are simply deathly cold, covered in cold burns from literally hatred-powered magic. The thestrals are thinking it's contagious probably because, well, Wendigo power is fueled by hatred and fear and the thestrals sure show a lot of hatred and fear toward 'infected' ponies.

In short, a lot of scared souls who act recklessly and destroy themselves with their fear.

....hmmm(scratches chin) well for what its worth I'm on board.

This looks very good, I shall read it later for sure. (Its 2:30 am right now, time for bed.)

Great story. it has potential indeed :twilightsmile:

"I looked to the west, spotting ships slowly drifting through the mist," wasn't the sea located to the east... it would be rather odd that the elders would march into the waters to get away from the cold. :raritywink:

But with them, they carry a sickness, a plague that could threaten to destroy the nation of the Thestrals.

I would suggest "But they carry a sickness with them, a plague that could destroy our nation" for better flow.

And when refused asylum, when refused refuge, they turn to violence. Like cornered beasts, they fight to steal our land in some desperate bid to survive.

So it's a thestral doing the description? Then why does he/she call it "the nation of the Thestrals" and "Land of the Thestrals" as opposed to "our nation" and "our land" in the previous sentences?

But they have a trump card, they bring with them a young goddess, and we only hold ourselves to bear against the burning judgment of an brash newborn god.

Is it a god or a goddess? Also "a".

Judging from Ben's reaction in the other story this will end badly, but the prospect of knowing how and why is promising.:trixieshiftleft:
Both sides have a good reason to fight considering what each know of the situation with panic and desperation filling up the mood. One side seeking safety from a possible threat of an unknown disease (as far as what the bat ponies know), the other also seeks safety as well as a place to start anew (a sick and possibly dying race, probably from a land infested with Wendigos). The why has been set, the how will be known soon enough.:trixieshiftright:

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Noted. I still want to know how this story goes.:twilightsmile:
I'll need to wait for it though.:twilightsheepish:

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Check my latest blog post. I think I'm really fucking done this time.

Faved and liked, the intensity reminds me of Grimoire by Samsara, the only other Tragedy fic I've read. I loved Grimoire and I think I'll love this if you keep writing :pinkiehappy:

This story has the potential to be epic. I really hope you decide to continue with it.

Ah. Sheer numbers. And possibly biological warfare, depending on whether or not that really was just frostbite. This is all starting to make sense, and it looks like it's going to be fantastic. I look forward to more.

Not the best you have ever done but, at least no clop for now.

Continue this, I'm liking it so far, I want to see where it goes. Oh, and be patient, stories like these take time to get the attention they deserve.

Ah, So you're going more towards the native american-esque approach as you talked about in "A Vicious Animal," this is going to be very interesting.
Conflict based upon misunderstanding the motives and conditions the ponies on exodus, I see you're learning towards the latter in this chapter.
The way the natives thestrals handled first contact that was a bit lackluster due to the fact they made it look like they were going to kill the unicorn on the spot and I suppose he attacked back out of fear and desperation.
The saving of the foal was a good touch it shows that they still care about the children even if it's a foreign, but I would presume our current MC would've killed her on the spot if she appeared too sickly.
Please, continue the story, I would like to know why these events happened how it ties into your other works than just the current situation of the modern thestral.
I'm assuming creulty gave way to more cruelty?
I sense sunk cost being at play here.

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It's hardly first contact with ponies, but it would be first contact with them in over 2 years, and an extremely sickly one was their rep.

The idea was, contain them on their boat, then sort shit out. What without the magical help of a telephone, those things take time.

Will put in read later folder because of awesome cover art.

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I see where you're coming from. A shame that the rep made the "shots heard around the world," or atleast in that particular region, which got many of his own and a thestral captian killed.
Will more of these small conflicts along with sickness lead to the war or is it safe to say that this rep started it inadvertently?
I doubt just one burning boat will call for a such reaction if put under the realm of misunderstandings, but then again some conflicts began with less.

Well... I don't really know what to say.

Filly Luna!:rainbowkiss:

Oh snap she has an older sister...:twilightoops:

Wait what?
Luna can already control the moon? :twilightoops:

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I'll explain yo, just give me some time.:rainbowkiss:

Ah, geez... What happened? The first chapter was double this one's length...

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Just a quick one to show Luna, that's all. Some will be short, some will be long, and if I feel like it some will be full length I.E. 5k+

Aww baby Luna! :rainbowkiss:

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