Twilight Sparkle takes a moment from her studies at the School for Gifted Unicorns to get a late lunch. Finding herself in a strange part of the school grounds, an apple tree and its odd fruit tempts her appetite.
Taking a apple has never been so described so vividly. Awesome writing.
Really fun piece of slice of life. Very Twilight.
This story was wonderfully done. For such a simple premise I greatly enjoyed it. All my likes.
You deserve a mustache
It was a pretty good "original flavor" kind of story. I found the prose a bit wordy at first, and I kinda reacted to "thick" being used to describe two different things so close to another in the beginning, but it got better later.
Very cute stuff. I don't love the smirks and jokes behind twilight's back though. Feels rather unponyish and so sort of jarred me out of it but I easily suck back in.
Definitely want to see more.
Golden apples of chaos, eh? Short but enjoyable!
I hope you've learned your lesson about eating strange fruit, Twi.
So that's settled. Celestia IS god, she even has a garden with a forbidden fruit tree.
I liked the story, but for some reason, I realllllly hate Spike after reading this, like seriously.
It was very refreshing to read your story. It was so simple, yet so enjoyable. With no inevitable disasters lurking every corner, with no overcomplicated feelings, with no impossible ideas, even without humans. Just a simple day from Twilight's life. One would think writing a story like that is easier than any of the kind mentioned before. But I would say it's the other way around. So once again - congrats for writing such a simple story that was such a pleasure to read.
Good read and yet i find some mistakes that are not important at all but still. In the guard part he says things like someone ad not somepony. I guess you could fix that but meh.
Yet a really good story
I can't believe I put off reading this for so long. I'm ashamed of myself, and you know why?
This was awesome, that's why.
Twilight and the other characters acted perfectly, and everything in the story - from the magical tree, to the effects of its fruit, to the comedy - was great. Such an absolute pleasure to read, and so well-written. Excellent idea, excellent execution.
I know I'm gushing, but you deserve the praise.
Hah, finally I got around to this. Excellent job Geo.
Not the most exciting story, but extremely well written. The constant use of imagery gives the story a nice flowing narration along with constant mental images that keep the reader thinking and visualizing. BTW did you use an editor for this piece because I'm going to be in need of one hopefully very soon, and this short story is one of better composed writings I've read so far, along with Diary of Morning and Dusk. Very good job, good writing, good flow and speech arrangement. I hope to see much more from you.
Very very nice
Very refreshing change of pace, nice to read a simple slice of life story. And it's hilarious. Love your imagery too!
This felt rather like an actual episode. You know, it could be kind of cool to read more about Twilight's magical training. Kind of a Harry Potter meets My Little Pony thing. I quite liked this.
>>449862449862 I agree. Celestia very rarely laughs at Twilight, and in this instance since Twilight seems to be rather concerned about it it feels rather mean. Regardless, it was decently funny. Nothing I haven't seen before, but decent.