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After the Dragon Migration, Spike realized that he's a special kind of dragon. Now, he's learning his own lessons about friendship, love, and magic as he grows into what he's destined to be.
I liked it, and it's clear that when you wrote it you obviously enjoy the show a lot to make a crap ton of references and allusions to past episodes. I like how you handled spike's origin and you didn't immediately jump to the shipping as a lot of writers would do within the first 2 chapters. Speaking of which if this is a Spike x Shy fic, kudos because I've only seen that done once before. All in all the story in very well paced, well written and it feels unique in a good way.
Peace Out.
>"After the Dragon Migration, Spike realized that he's a special kind of dragon. Now, he's learning his own lessons about friendship, love, and magic as he grows into what he's destined to be."
>Spike the Animal Lover
I'm having flashbacks to that one story where Spike hangs himself. If this wasn't tagged with happy tags and rated Teen, I'd nope.avi into oblivion.
Must resist urge to kill for starwars refrence..........
On a seprate less homocidal note your page breaks feel extreamly distracting they draw the readers attention to well imo and i feel you could go without the "last time on" as well still enjoyable read and i look forward to more
>>440956 Haha. Sorry. That was the best example I could think of for a precocious crush reference that actually works kinda well here. AS far as your suggestions, I will do my best to try and write a better transitional scene. As far as the "last time on" segments, my logic here is that there might come a time in which there would be a longer delay in between updates. If that happens, that will help a good deal in helping readers remember what happened without them digging back a chapter. If enough people say that it should go, though, I have no problem making it disappear, at least from the FIMfiction version. It also serves to bump up word count on FFN, so it's also part laziness on my part. 
>>441105 a transition scene would help but as refering more to the bold -MLPFIM- like everytime one came across my screen it would instantly draw my eyes attention becuase of how much is stood out like mid sentance even just bam right their and i can surely appreciate laziness as much as the next guy but frankly as long as your chapter stay above 1500 i doubt anyone would fault you (i will admit that im less then tempted to read anythign with under 1000 words a chapter as i feel you just can't get enough done in so few words to progress a story that needs to be split into chapters)
OMG i never thought of it like that. Darth Spike is best Spike.
Hah! This is pretty interesting; I am enjoying it so far.
The one consistent problem I have when reading it is your scene transitions using "-MLPFIM-"
The first time I saw them I mistakenly took it for a sound effect. And now all your scene transitions sound like, "mlip-fihm!" when I'm reading. 
Well, I've taken all the comments to heart and I am definitely working on lessening the scene transition thing. So yeah. The next chapter should be up in the next day or so. I'm going to be flying back to my hometown from Hawaii, so it'll be a day before I have any internet access. It's almost done, I just need to fine tune it some more.
"Now, this chapter marks the beginning of the next story arc, where we'll find out more about- oh, wait, I shouldn't tell you, that would totally make reading this fic a moot point. Bahaha. Silly me."
having a pinkie moment huh
Also its nice to see you took what i said to heart i feel 20% cooler now myself as for your scene breaks much better i got read it still but i'll have more to say when im done im sure
"Complicated magic and stuff, you know?" just had a Dr Who flash back
This was tons easier to read and flowed so very natrualy dude its a hugh improvment in my opinion. You just set us up for a hell of a scene although i do wonder how well everyone would take to spike raiding anything and my other concern is the chapter name is a bit misleading kinda figured Spike would start getting his wings and Rainbow would offer to teach him to fly. Always love the little bit of Sparity though so over all 
Interesting chapter. I was honestly expecting something with Rainbow Dash due to the chapter's name. I have to agree with everyone else in that the flow of the story is so much more fluid. My only qualm with this chapter is the possible foreshadowing of Sparity ending. I Personally dislike the pairing very much, but I don't dislike people that like and use the pairing. I just don't like it because it's kind of overused and I prefer more obscure pairings. Eiither way, I still will be reading this fiction. Keep up the good work!
>>463006 Haha. Don't worry. The only sparity here as of right now is the canon deep seated crush he has. As I said before, Spike is still too young for a relationship at this point in the story. As for Rainbow Dash, keep in mind: This is only the first chapter of this arc. She may or may not have a part to play in this yet.
Hahaha!
This is great, by the way...
But, uh... I'm enjoying the way Spike's resisted the urge to be a jerk with his power. Please don't make him lose his focus...
I love the way you managed to make this story flow around the recent episodes; that was pretty dang impressive.
For what it's worth I thought it was a pretty good chapter. It helped Spike develop internally. Plus I like the interaction with Rainbow Dash, she is such a closet egghead. I look forward to your next chapter! 
P.S. "Spike, I'm only trying to help you grow into the dragon you're destined to be. You understand why I lied to you write?" Write should be Right
The more you know.
>>487548 Yeah, most people, ponies, and dragons have fatal allergies to suicide missions. Fact.
>>487662 Fair point. I'm a big brother myself, so I have a soft spot for Big Mac and Shiny. In fact, I've got a fic idea in my brain featuring the two.
>>487858 and >>488218 Thanks! I'm glad y'all enjoyed!
>>488237 Yeah, I've been rather lacking in visual details, so I am definitely going to try and improve that as the fic goes on. Thanks for the support!
...I swear, I rewrote this chapter 7 times over, and I still don't like it..."
What the fuck is wrong with you dude, I thought this chapter was very well written and Daring Do cosplay is something Dash would definitely do. Also kudos for that exposition, it really helps the story out a lot.
That finale was great, but is it wrong that my favorite part was the talking sandwich puppet?
Peace Out and continue to crank out great work.
>>488993 Haha. I dunno, I just didn't like the first three pages. It was hell trying to write em. Once I saw the finale, my inspiration was back and I figured out where exactly I want to take the next few arcs of storyline. I figured closet-egghead!Dash would be funny to write and all. And... um... what do you mean by exposition? I didn't really pay attention in English class. 
Exposition is nothing more than background information given to the audience. Too much and you can alienate readers and too little and you'll confuse them. I used to review film before this franchise. I think I know why you're having an issue, you seem to be having a hard time writing all these characters and keeping them in character at the same time. Sometimes we are our harshest critics.
>>489276 Haha. Yeah, I kinda didn't think it through when this idea hit me. I haven't really written anything in a few years to be honest besides an occasional RP post so I'm really not used to running so many characters at once. But I'm doing my best! I'll get better as I write more and get used to the characters, I'm sure.
>>498864 It's going to give a break to everyone. Spike, mostly. Poor guy needs a vacation. And I'm just trying to be unique. I dunno if it's working or not. 
I honestly am still playing with the idea of giving Spike wings or just keeping him as the mini godzilla he is. If he does get wings, it will be later in the story. And Spike is very happy that he can teleport wagons.
>>499208 Well that's fair. It shouldn't be anything sudden or odd or out of character. In fact, that could be a whole arc in future, "Spike and his torn heart," As he grows, maybe he finds he's growing beyond foalish crushes. I dunno, no pressure. You carry on writing what you want, it's what we're all enjoying after all
Go Spike! And the closet egg head birgade to the rescue.
Moving on yay another chapter and Spike bucks up; however, I do feel that their was a lack of closure on the whole Rarity dress/gem matter would of liked to see her reaction when he brought all those delicious tasting /drool, I mean beautiful jewels to her home. Just saying her buissness was saved in the letter feels... cheap. On the upside the thought of angry Peewee made me dawwwwwwwwwwww. Party on.
Another great chapter from another great writer! I love the development you give Spike with it not being OOC. I can't wait for the next arc where he takes a vacation, I'm sure he is just going to turn his swag switch to the "ON" position and just watch as he gets swarmed by mares. Calling it now. All joking aside, I am really looking forward to your next chapter.
>>498934 Advanced muscle growth and recovery someones a smart and probly athletic (or possibly martial artist) Brony. I approve!
>>499225 Foolish crush really? So a sudden intrest in Fluttershy because of a whole 2 min period in the first episode stems a whole relationship...... don't go trying to burn my ship and i won't pour vodka (cheap vodka notably cause the good shit is MINE) all over yours and throw a torch 
>>500379 read everything me and Bravo typed should explain itself
>>500162 Im not sure if you mean for this or the one i was talking about but you should toss it in the comments and see if anyone offers to do one; be a nice addition. You should probly go over my first comment i think i came off better their then anywhere else in my 10 post rant/conversation thingy 
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