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Dear Diary

This story is about Scootaloo, and takes place a couple of years after her filly age. She moved to Cloudsdale with her parents, going to flight school, the basic pegasus lifestyle. But have you ever wondered why Scootaloos' parents are never shown?

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Rainbow Scout

Rainbow Scout #1 · Apr 8th, 2012 · · · Chapter 2 ·

A little constuctive critisizm (I DONT KNOW IF I SPELLED THAT RIGHT.)

1: change the rating to mature for "gore". Trust me dude.

2:Make a new paragraph for talking scenes, for example:

I was posting a comment on "Dear Diary" By Joshi3

"What a dark fic" I said, quietly.

3: Try to write an alternate ending with a happier outcome. File it under a new chapter, and title it along the lines of "Dear Diray: No Grimdark Ending"

4: Never. EVER. Refer to colts as "males" and mares as "females." It doesn't bother me, but trust me when I say, It will for some people.

Joshi3

Joshi3 #2 · Apr 8th, 2012 · · · Chapter 2 ·

1: I don't think its too gory for that.
2: I stated that I didn't care much for grammar issues, which includes the starting a new paragraph for a new speaker
3: Ill try to
4: Noted
None the less, thanks for the criticism.

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