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Spirit Shift


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This story is a sequel to Dinky's Mother's Day Adventure


Both Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash love their dads more than life itself, so whenever father's day came around when they were fillies, they relished the chances to spend all day with their dads.

So when did Fluttershy stop feeling the same way?

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Comments ( 18 )

This is really good, and a new look into their parents. Also, I can't find any immediate faults, so well done for that!
Looking forward to more!
-Twilight_Scratch

Made me shed 4 tears!:fluttercry::pinkiehappy: love that ending thore!

4554098 yup!Cause we'll I don't feel the feels no more which is sad but meh.

This...
I...
Why did you do this...?
I cried, man...

I didn't talk to my dad yesterday, and honestly... I don't care...
My dad was a really big ass to my family and I.
He doesn't deserve to be called a dad, to say it bluntly.

4554357 :pinkiecrazy: Cuz i'm a jerk lol

But I understand what you mean, my dads entire side of the family is more or less cut off from us. I know my aunt but NOBOBY else mainly cuz they're all either mean, abusive, crazy, or bigger jerks than I, so my dad constantly bats them all away with a stick at all times lol

OMG, I felt a tear... :derpyderp1: :raritydespair:
Why?!?! D:

4555777 lol read the below comment

I felt a tear roll down my cheeks. It is not easy to make me cry. I liked it.

daw that a sweet story :raritystarry:
at first I was gonna say that I really dislike Wind, but as a read the story I realize a father with such a strong personality could explain Fluttershy.
heck if I know my dad own strong personality had a major play into my own shy personality :pinkiecrazy:

Over all it's nice, sweet and with a interesting head cannon


FEELS HAV BEEN ANNIHALATED
COMMENCE ICE CREAM
PROCESSING.....

ICE CREAM FAILED
ENACT FAILSAFE CORNER

Other than the fact that Rainbow Dash's dad's official name is Rainbow Blaze, I liked it.

5108786 Ahh I wrote this before I know that. I fixed it. Thanks :scootangel:

I like where you went with the story, but it's a bit too rough around the edges. You change scenes pretty rapidly and have ponies just appearing when they need to say something. I wasn't able to fall into the narrative, which really got in the way of the feels.

5783899 Yeah I didnt really understand the concept of... wait DID YOU DOWNVOTE?! You ruined the zero down streak that's been going since I joined this site! Do you know how proud I was that this of all my stories had that?

Words cannot fathom the extent to which I dislike you at this moment...

5783937 I'm a math teacher. I get that a lot.

And, uh, all your stories have a downvote on them. Most have more than one.

5783967 Yeah but this one for whatever reason had none. I've had reviewers look over it before so I know whats wrong with it. It was also the first fan fic I wrote for this fandom, a story I rate all my others against.

:facehoof: Sorry, I'm ranting. I'll get over it eventually. I actually love my math teacher. Its my Social studies teacher I hate

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