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Darkryt Orbinautz


Still slowly trying to disentangle from MLP. It is ... slow going.

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Princess Cadence is a foalsitter who, being in rich, hoity-toity Canterlot, has to put up with spoiled brat after spoiled brat.

Twilight Sparkle is a terrifying filly who drives away sitter after sitter.

They were bound to find each other.

Chapters (5)
Comments ( 125 )

I really like this story hope to read more soon

You should make a sequel. I would love to read it! :twilightsmile:

16 words total? That doesn't look quite right. :unsuresweetie:

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This isn't a one-shot. There are more chapters coming.


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Yeah, it's some sort of glitch. I hit the "Publish Chapter" button when it was just the little quote about the Fool - and nothing else. So, that quote being 16 words, it counted the chapter as sixteen words. And for some reason, It won't update.

6053387 :rainbowlaugh: That's a pretty funny glitch.

Love this can not wait for more :heart::pinkiesmile::twilightsmile:

Eagerly waiting for next chapter!

So far, so good.

I would like to know HOW Twilight scared off an ex-con...

The first chapter is a bit quick, but it's a very interesting read so far. I'm favoriting it. May your next chapters be better than the first.

6054159 Probably an extensive speech on how she could manipulate the law system to throw him back in jail, and how she could not be stopped by him if she decided to do so.

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That ... will be explained in a later chapter.:raritywink:

6055085 Ex-cons, aside from vets can be pretty scary...

I just realized that Jet Set and Upper Crust are in the same generation as Twilight while Fleur and Fancy are in Shining and Cadence's generation!

This is off to a strong start!

“There are other servants in the castle!” Celestia shouted from down the hall. “Who are plenty capable of doing your job!”

:rainbowlaugh:

Looks to be fun times ahead for Twilight and Cadence, I feel bad for her having such a bad time with other foals like she does. Reading the author notes it reminded me I have that "Twilight and the Crystal Heart Spell" little book from an MLP magazine I got ages ago, I really should get around to reading that soon.

Haven't read anything from this sort of time period before, so nice to get someone's take on it, might explore it a bit myself at some point for all the fun times filly Twilight can get up to, but then there is also the bad times of Magic Kindergarten!

Small question I'd like to ask. Probably just my lack of knowledge of family titles so is Cadence the cousin or niece of both Celestia and Luna or one of them, so is Celestia her auntie and also Luna or would Luna be her cousin etc? I was just writing a story myself and had no idea what titles to use. I ended up going with calling Luna her cousin. Would be nice to get your view on how that works since if I am wrong would be good to know.

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Yes, it did get left off. Thank you for pointing that out. The issue is now fixed. You can never have a shortage of "sures."

Supplementary material claims Cadence is Celestia's niece, so she's either Luna's daughter, possibly Blueblood's sister, depending, or Celestia has other sisters/brothers we haven't seen yet.

The Crystal Heart spell, I believe, is the book that just skirts the issue and says Cadence was adopted.

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Huh that is a little confusing. I guess going with The Crystal Heart spell is likely the easiest way around it then, but is interesting to think of the possibility of being Luna's daughter I guess, though it would be weird. I guess being without her mother for over a thousand years would be difficult and the interactions thereafter they have together. Would make an interesting challenge I guess to write something with that hehe.

Odd, the front page says this is only 16 words long.

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It being Twilight? He probably tried to take away her book. After which, she calmly levitated him over to the couch and continued reading like nothing happened.

Being so easily over powered by a child could have that effect.

Some spicy herbs.”

how about cumin?

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Funnily enough, I was going to write Cadence suggesting black pepper. But then I thought, "wait, would ponies even eat black pepper?" and just made it "spicy herbs" to make it more generalized.

“Ah, you'd think that, but Twilight Sparkle is … really set against the idea of a foalsitter at all.

Something that occurred to me. With how smart Twilight is(which is probably the reason she doesn't want a foal sitter, sees herself as smart enough to not need one) has no one tried to explain to her that if she's left alone for a significant amount of time(any amount that'd warrant a foal sitter) that would considered neglect and she could be taken from them/they could be arrested? Cause I mean, I think she'd understand that(unless she pulls a bratty move of 'then just don't leave').
Assuming that Equestria is similar to earth in that regard.

6060876 Herbs are from the leaf.
Spices are from anything BUT the leaf.

There is, in brief, no such thing as "spicy herbs."

6065442 Unless you mix the two. Then it becomes spices and herbs. It's often delicious.

Does it say the chapter came out last July for anyone else?
because there are no "update?" comments, I think its displaying wrong

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Yeah, it's displaying wrong. Let me try something real quick ...
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Much like what I told HB_DS2013, that will be explained.

I love the personaesque chapter names. Will u have Aeon?

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No. All the chapter names have been selected, and that isn't among them. Sorry. :twilightsheepish::trollestia:

Twilight reminds me of a younger Fluttershy.

6314717 it's ok, just wondering

This reminds me of Raun Kaufman.

Am I the only one concerned that the next chapter may take just as long, if not longer to complete and upload?

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I think they're actually supposed to be Tarot card names. Especially if the image at the start of the chapter is indication. At least the Tarot cards of the Major Arcana .

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You are correct, sir!

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It took me a whole day to finish this chapter. HALF a day, in fact. The problem is in getting me motivated to write, which, the fact the summer is ending and I'm nowhere near my goal is ... eh. I seem only able to do chapters in 'shots.'

But you're in luck! I was wavering on between whether to continue this story, or go update another story I've been working. Your comment made me think, and I've decided, yes, I should focus on finishing this story first.

I'll try to update soon. No promises, though.

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Actually it would be miss ;P

6314695 I know that.persona social links are based off tarot.but in persona there is Aeon, a minor arcana,but only in some games,so i wasn't sure if he would put it in

'children running away in a big, crowded city is actually kind of a big deal'

You could just blame that on the differences between Earth and a land full of friendship rainbows and unicorns. On earth it's a big deal. But ponies have that whole "heard mentality" thing going on where caring for the young is everypony's responsibility.

One mild point I feel must be made, Shining Armor by choosing to go to the military academy would undoubtedly known it was going to have class work, if he "just wanted to fight bad guys" he would have chosen the route of enlistment...

6326487 Remember, Equestria barely has a royal guard and no military, so enlistment wouldn't have been possible.

OMG what will happen next I just can not wait :heart::pinkiesmile::twilightsmile:

She got sick immediately after playing in the mud? I thought it took at least a few days for symptoms to show up after you catch something. :rainbowhuh:

6340773 You'd be surprised how quickly the cold can fuck you up...especially if you don't go outside much.

And the tower comes tumbling down...

Twilight Velvet, Cadance screwed up. However she was willing to try and fix it on her own.
Excellent story btw.

Now that's a first-kiss story you don't want to tell your offspring :rainbowlaugh: (nor to your sister-in-law :twilightoops:)

6340773 Don't know about mud, but running up a sweat on a cold day (~5-10 °C) and keeping the same clothes made me go from healthy to sickest I've ever been in four hours (I was seven years old at the time).

6341580 Oh, maybe it's just the temperature and not an actual disease like a virus or bacteria. Screwing up your core temperature can set everything out of whack. Homeostasis and all those fancy highschool biology words I don't think about enough. :twilightblush:

6340773 That was my thoughts too. Equestrian viruses don't mess around.

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