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:rainbowderp: Oh no. This will not end well now that the moon is up.

Waz and az have an s not a z.

For some reason this was shown in the Sparity group. Though it seems there isn't any Sparity I will stay and see where this is going. You have earned a like and a favorite from me. ^_^

This looks very interesting.

Dude you really need to pick a tence/pov and stick with it. Your go from descibing something in past tence to first person pov and then back again all in the same sentence. It's to hard to read srry

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Nope, not a happy ending at all :fluttershbad:


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The guy lost his teeth, I was hoping to show that through his speech :applejackconfused: was it not clear?


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Well this is going to be awkward when the next chapter comes :twilightblush:


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Thank you.


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Can you at least point out where so that I can fix it? I'd really appreciate that.


Thank you all for the favorites and the likes, hope you enjoyed this.

4540088 as and was are pronouaed with zs whith someone with no problem with thire teath.

First grammar error I see, the title is randomly capitalized, rise should also be capitalized

I am too lazy to point out the grammatical errors in the story proper, but let it be known that while there is a lot, it is still legible and understandable. Question. what does this sentence mean?

However, this time I will not be so forgiven

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Fixed, fixed.

4540626

And fixed, I think.

Thank you kindly for your help :twilightsmile:

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Thank you for pointing that out.

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Thank you for posting the results, I'll be uploading them in the description soon.

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Sorry about that, but the third chapter has been exceptionally difficult to write and edit, and with real life getting in the way...

Anyway, I fixed the first two chapters, they should be a lot more easier to read now.

I like wonder what twilight's friends will do.

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