DISCLAIMER: Despite the cool looking cover image, Pinkie will most likely not be featured in this particular adventure. It just fit the theme I'm trying to tell. Sorry, Pinkie fans!
When the ponies are accidentally whisked into Rainbow's favorite radio program, the only way out... is to solve it. Unfortunately, the residents of Crystal Lake look a bit... familiar...
Looks interesting. No glaring issues but I wasn't paying much attention for them.
Nice pacing. There was a weird tonal shift between the first line and the following paragraph that you might want to smooth over, but I'll definitely check out the next few chapters.
Not really enough in this chapter to hold the reader's interest. Also, I wouldn't use "Crystal Lake" as the name of the place if I were you, because your readers are going to be expecting Jason.
Comedy. Crossover. Everyone. Crystal Lake?! Like Jason Voorhees, Friday the Thirteenth, Crystal Lake? Darn it, fine. My curiosity has been thoroughly piqued. Let us have a look, shall we?
1.) This does not sound right, you may want to consider dropping the "there."
2.) The emboldened "and" should be a comma.
3.) There should be a comma after "picnics."
Wrong "there."
This should just be "whether."
One too many spaces between these words.
"Heard."
One too many spaces between these words.
The mystery reminds me of this:
Interesting premise, take a favorite and a like.
KBO.
Crystal Lake?
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Dammit its not a Jason story. Crystal Lake just sounded cool. *sighs and begins to search for a new name*
That's my line!
To be fair, the name "Crystal Lake" was made infamous by what happened there. You do not see any little Adolf Hitlers or Joseph Stalins running around.
Oh, my. Did I accidentally reveal something in my last comment?
"Groaned."
1.) There should be a comma between these words.
2.) These five words are awkwardly arranged. "Yet" may be superfluous and the section may read better as "the two were still."
I noticed a serious lack of Earth ponies.
I apologize if I accidentally revealed spoilers in my last comment. I honestly had no idea and was just being silly. I was punch-drunk from being so tired.
KBO.
"Facehoofed." But I suppose it is open to interpretation.
So I was completely wrong. It is nothing like Scooby-Doo at all. Though it does seem familiar, I cannot quite place my finger on it. It does seem interesting, however.
KBO.
*slowly raises hand* I - I am.
There is an official word for this "Whodunit" or "Whodunnit." With either one or two n's. Both, strangely enough, are correct. ...Correct is an odd way to put it.
Does Spike not count? Or are you not counting somepony else? It really is rude of me to automatically assume Spike is the throwaway character. If neither assumption is correct, then the word should be "quintet."
Huh, I would have taken Twilight as the fellow Grammar Dalek.
Seeing as they are not here, I think that the Headless Horse is Applejack, or Pinkie Pie, or both of them working in tandem. Though it could still be Old Man Phillips looking for hundreds of dollars worth of Spanish Doubloons on the bottom of the lake.
KBO.
First comment, awesome
whoa cool chapter,glad that your are back
The "It's time to split up, gang!" thing is from Scooby Doo and every single other Hanna-Barbera mystery solving team cartoon from the 1970's. Josie and the Pussycats, Speed Buggy, Jabber Jaw, Inch High Private Eye et cetera, et cetera, et cetera.
I wonder if Aunt Dixon and (I have to do it) Mister Ed are married.
(The original My Little Pony.)
KBO.
4575808 While you did catch the Ed thing, you have yet to catch the other subtle mystery reference I was referring to.
4576367 Yeah, but I am trying to distance myself from pokemon.
4576523 I don't think I made any pokemanz references?
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Remember generation one?
4579300 OH GOD THOSE THINGS