Your writing is good, yet I often felt as if I was reading my old Modern History of Russia textbook again. Incorporating RW history into the ponyverse can be done well, if proper research is taken. It seems like you certainly read up on your facts, though in the end I don't really know what to think of this piece. Perhaps it's just not my personal cup of tea, though I wish you well on it all the same. Happy writing!

Well! This is a pretty nice read!

Though, there was one point where I lost focus on the story:

Are they in Equestria or Europe? Because you supplemented "Finland" as a country.

Other than that, aside a few very minor typos, this is a good read - and it's only the first chapter. I'll keep on reading now.

>>426977426977 I'm doing my best. this has been delayed because my #1 proofreader and pony/communist fan was having internet shits, we're still ironing the bugs out.

>>426978426978 thanks. And the story is taking place in a parallel universe where the CCCP is run by ponies. And yes, Europe does exist, and no, only Ch 1 takes place in Equestria. The name is changed to CCCP after the revolution.

>>427371427371 Ah, okay then. It's a good read. Like GNG said, it's like a ponified history book section, or sections. And it's got some consistency. I like that.

Fuck, I was gonna write a story based off of Animal Farm to

D'oh well. Will read anyway

i like the concept, but little things like verrying your vobab so you dont use the same words too often would make it a little more appealing to the reader, but what the hell, ill follow it.

>>427422427422 Who's stopping you. Heck, send me some ideas and I'll give you credit.

>>431768431768 Alright, can do. Thanks for the feedback I appreciate every comment

The Good Old Soviet Union

Russia today is awful.

I myself am Russian and never though of ponifying the history of the Sovetsky Soyuz. Caught me by suprise rather.

This is a really good story

Faved.

by the way you spelled SWASTIKA wrong.

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>>606826606826 oh ok sorry I'll fix that.

I kind of put this story on hold because my writing seemed like crap so I didn't want to keep going until later. Oh also I was the first person in my family not to be born in the soviet union ^.^ mostly because I was born in 1996 and it was disbanded in 1991 :/

>>615964615964

yea that sucks :(

Your writing is not crap, that is ridiculous!

Good story anyway

You should cancel this too.

Cancel everything you've ever written.

>>661768661768 :) hey kid...

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I was WAITING for another chapter YAY one came FINALLY haha.

>>864209864209 Yeah, I gave up for a while because I thought no one liked my story, but then one of my followers told me I was being crazy and that I should keep writing, so I did. It's great when people comment on my story, otherwise I would have never known ^.^

New Chapter!

but . . . I still liked the story

>>876931876931

why is fluttershy sad?

At first you say you are excited because of a new chapter (positive emoticon)

...However, you like the story (negative emoticon)

Also i didn't know you were tracking me

>>879231879231

Sorry, haha i tried to hit the but i guess I clicked

on accident. sooooo yea

>>879718879718 well I'll have you know new chapter is almost done :3

>>900830900830

WooHoo

Thank you!

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You sir are a really good writing. Now let the Cold War be upon us!

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FUR DIE ROT ARMEE!

>>905417905417 Indeed the cold war is beginning :3

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>>906077906077

that makes me sad

>>919833919833 Also for some reason, of all the time between Khrushchev becoming General-Secretary and the Vietnam War (next chapter), I spent half of it discussing the few days he spent in America