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"Perhaps the story now goes beyond the book." - Cornelia Funke, Inkheart

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This story is a sequel to When The Mare Comes Around


Rae Jay, the merged personality of Rachel Shelton and Applejack Apple, finally catches a break. After surviving all the attempts on Rachel's life, she's on her way to reunite with her friends in New York City, this time with governmental support. She's going to get a little shut-eye, reconnect with her friends, then take on Discord and bring Harmony to Earth.

Except, it can't ever go smooth.

One phone call later, and Rae Jay is up to another batch of thrilling heroics, deep in an enemy compound, facing down a small army of trigger-happy, pony-hating bigots, all to save her friends. With only the Element around her neck and a fangirl CIA agent at her back, Rae Jay's odds aren't looking too good. And that's just a warm-up before taking on a mad god of chaos, and who knows what tricks he has up his scaly sleeve.

Why can't it ever go smooth?

Conclusion of the PEV - PonyEarthverse canon.

Chapters (19)
Comments ( 179 )

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Yep. Here she's not exactly riding in on a white horse, but she's on her way.

4506712

No, she's riding in with her white horse.

(Sweetie Belle)

Nice! I've been wandering when this will come it! You've got me pumped now! :pinkiehappy: :pinkiehappy: :rainbowkiss:

I immediately thought of this music when I read about Erishy's weird activities:

So you're the one that's tasked with saving her, I hope you both had finished planning already in this particular arc, because I'm wondering how this will all turn out now. Especially since the team is split up between Reid and Hope.

I am glad you have a sequel to When the Mare comes around. I hope that RJ/AJ can save Fluttershy and Ian/Apple Bloom in time. perhaps meet up with her friends or other ponies? Reunite Sweetie belle with her sister Rarity?


Apple Bloom's cousin, Babs Seed is in her own fan fiction story, written by Alamar ZeWizard, entitled Breaking Babs. Along the way, Babs meets Apple Fritter and Apple Cider, as well as Red Delicious. I was writing for Silver spoon in my fan fiction story, Landing Silver Side Up. I also found a writer to help me with Diamond Tiara. I haven't got around to updating my story due to work and summer commitments.

Hoooo boy, the girl just can't catch a break, can she? :ajsleepy:

Hrm. Well then, that's nice.

Sorry, am I holding back the plot?

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You're not. I'm just moving forward with what I have right now. Pinkie Reid's interaction with this story is still a waaaaays off.

RJ and May Belle's interactions are adorable.

Or maybe Erica is just one of those twisted individuals that totally suppressed Fluttershy and is completely taking advantage of the situation by creating drama where none need be. These people exist.

“Well, I hope you can beat this Discord character,” he replied. “He’s making it hell for me to get back to my husband.”

Husband? Isn't that a little unusual for Tennessee?


Also, a woman who is smart enough to hide her face from camera, but not enough to not have an address tag on her luggage? I don't use those things when I fly. Suppose something had gone wrong with their operation and they had to dump the suitcase instead of getting caught. Why in the world have anything incriminating on it?

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That guy isn't from Tennessee, I'm pretty sure he lives in New York. He mentions playing on a regular basis at a lounge called Therapy, and I don't think the characters are that far away from NYC to begin with.

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Oh, so he's just stuck in Tennessee.

Reading it a ~4am in the morning I must have missed that.

"It's great to hear from you, Apple Jack."

Is Erishy mispronouncing "Applejack"? Weird and suspicious... :rainbowhuh:

... Aaah-ha. :twilightangry2:

luggage tag ... address

... seriously? :unsuresweetie:

In this chapter, Greg is played by David Tennant

Now I have to read it all again in his voice.

(I've never heard him do an American accent though...)

Once Stephanie learned that, she had to contact the FBI. Apparently, when someone is kidnapped in Oklahoma while travelling to New York and there’s a lead in Georgia, that means you’ve crossed state lines and it turns into a “federal matter.”

I might have misunderstood this sentence, but wouldn't she have to have contacted someone else anyway, seeing as she's CIA and therefore not in charge of state or federal crimes? :unsuresweetie:

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You're exactly right, and Stephanie is following protocol. Rae Jay's just not thrilled, so she's getting sarcastic.

Oh, and the dream sequence left me wondering: Are RJ, AJ and Rachel all ponies in the dream? I gathered that they were, and that AJ looks exactly like RJ, while Rachel seems to be more of a mix between AJ and a ponified Rachel?

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Yep, they're all ponies. Except I'm not really sure what RJ looks like. She was really insistent on not looking in any reflective surfaces.

4559458 Ouch, I would say that I'm woulded, but... meh. I'll deal.

4641920 Because we are evil! Muahahaha

4595006 Well we can go on the fact that her cutie mark is slightly different and likely any other change would be slight. RJ seems to be more Aj then Rae at the moment. Rae doesn;t really show till the big word time. But we'll see as now Sweetie may is like Rae Jay

4643056 Do you want to me Pinkie Pie in promise broken mode.

Yay! Now we're getting to the good part.

“Bad news is that the address belonged to someone who got carjacked at the airport,”

Knew that was too good to be true. Address on the suitcase. :facehoof:

“I aim to misbehave,” she said resolutely.

The irony of her saying that line while working for what would literally be the bad guys in Serenity. :rainbowlaugh:

“I was told that this facility had agreed to cooperate with the CIA in the capture and containment of the ponies arising out of this pandemic.”

Wait, they fall for that? O_o

“Moo,” I said.

I... can't... :rainbowlaugh:

She looked dead. My heart stopped.

Whether or not she is, some other folks are about to be...

Merging is so conflict removing. I'm not sure how to feel about it.

I'm surprised. Bad things happened to Fluttershy and the entire comment section didn't devolve into a storm of people threatening violence on the fictional characters responsible.

Also I'm enjoying the hell out of this story.

They let a Federal agent in and run around unhindered and unescorted with full knowledge and a pony. :applejackunsure:

Where is this again?

Inside were a quite a few serious-looking men, making what was once a large room crowded and cramped. A guy in a black tuxedo groaned, pulling my attention. He moved away from the wall he’d been sitting against, revealing Fluttershy.
She was out cold. She had shallow cuts and bruises all over her body, and the fur above her hooves was raw and red. One of her eyes had been punched out and was almost closed over.
She looked dead. My heart stopped.

I hope you're pleased with yourself... I was settling in to eat dinner when I came to these three paragraphs, and I almost choked on my next bite of food. :ajbemused:

Did she try the Stare, or Chrysalis' "green-eyed trance" thing on them? Is that why these :yay: -hoos have all but gouged her eyes out? :raritydespair:

With everyone being so distrustful it's wonderful that RJ managed to pick out someone genuinely nice.

have to wonder if they are merged to? aaagghhh the supsense.

I'm not sure what hoodoo is going on anymore.

I like what you've done with our scene. Especially since my own cockeyed plans mean that you're the only one telling it.

So do officials really call extremist bases Amateur Hour?

Now that you guys are linked up I now know why Erishy's story has started up again. With all that secrecy and sneaking in, I'm a bit worried that they might actually DO have some government help. Let's hope that they can get out of here before it's over. Also, I hope Steph doesn't wind up pony because of this and Discord deciding to be a dick at this time. If it does happen I hope the pony she's stuck with is already a fighter or law enforcement.

Freaky stuff. :pinkiesick: I like that you gave them a way out, though. (That is, if Doctor Repentant Svengali over there can hold up his end of the bargain...:trixieshiftleft: )

Comment posted by arancaytar deleted Jul 21st, 2014

Now, I’m going to trust you, Nate

That guy does not radiate trustworthiness. :twilightoops:

Also, should I know this guy? Of the PEV universe I've only read the first AJ story so far.

But, instead of no Santa, she was seeing a beaten, hollow-eyed Fluttershy.

That's like, at least 1.3 * 10^8 giga-anti-santas. :fluttercry:

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Erishy?

Pretty sure that was stated. It was only explicitly brought up by the changeling replacing her, but her handlers were also calling her Erishy, and the portmanteau name seems to imply it. Or do you mean the other imprisoned ponies?

4734056 Actually I don't think so because the Changling didn't act like Fluttershy. but we'll find out.

I'm a bit confused by Rarity's appearance... if another one of the Mane Six had been taken, shouldn't this have been more widely known?

When Raritony meets May Belle. Oh boy I can hardly wait.

Very good chapter. :pinkiehappy: I like how it came out. I just wish you had a reaction from Raritony about her sister. I know that it was what you and TonydBrony talk about writing, but it just fill like it could have given TonydBrony more to write about when he does.

I didn't know that Raritony would be in this part of the story. I thought she was having her own adventure. I bet that this is where things get really complicated.

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It is out there, and the CIA were working to correct it, but Stephanie and Alphonse didn't want to worry Rae Jay with the glass half empty stuff. Throw in that RJ's only real world contact was a brief scan of current events a few days ago... and she's as out of the loop as you can get.

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If you read another canon PonyEarthVerse story called Becoming Fluttershy by Hope you would see that Erishy was simmilar to Fluttershy in personality and that she was captured by PAPA around this time.

TOO SHORT FOR SUCH A WAIT:raritycry:

and Rarity swear as much as may Belle :rainbowlaugh:

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